Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy such as "I do like buying shoes" and "only I buy them when I really need a new pair" which could be combined. Also, the phrase "buying money payers frequently" is unclear and likely a mistake. Try to use simpler, more precise expressions and keep your answer within 4-5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes, but only when I really need a new pair. I usually wait until my old shoes are completely worn out before replacing them. I prefer to invest in comfortable and durable shoes rather than buying new ones frequently.

제안: Your answer is brief and somewhat unclear due to grammatical errors, such as "comfortable I" which should be "comfort". Try to provide a complete sentence with a clear reason, and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: No, I have never bought shoes online because I prefer trying them on in a store to make sure they fit perfectly and are comfortable.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by correcting grammar and adding linking words for coherence. For example, "I spent" should be "I spend" to indicate habitual action. Also, specify what you mean by "moderate amount" to make your answer more specific.

예시: I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I prefer mid-range brands that offer good quality at a fair price.

제안: Your answer communicates your preference but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "I practice practically over fashion" and "it feels me like in a clouds walking in a cloud." Try to use clearer expressions and correct grammar. Also, avoid filler words like "uh" and "well" to sound more confident.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot during the day, so comfort is essential. I value practicality over fashion, and wearing comfortable shoes feels like walking on clouds.

× I also prefer to invest in comfortable and durable shoes rather than buying money payers frequently.

✓ I also prefer to invest in comfortable and durable shoes rather than buying money wasters frequently.

The phrase 'money payers' is incorrect because 'payers' refers to people who pay money, which does not fit the context. The intended meaning is likely 'money wasters', referring to items that waste money. Using the correct adjective or noun phrase is essential for clarity.

× Oh actually no, I prefer trying shoes in a store to ensure the perfect fit and comfortable I.

✓ Oh actually no, I prefer trying shoes in a store to ensure the perfect fit and comfort for me.

The phrase 'comfortable I' is incorrect because 'I' cannot be used as an adjective. The correct noun 'comfort' should be used, and 'for me' clarifies who benefits from the comfort. This corrects the pronoun misuse and improves sentence clarity.

× Umm I spent moderate amount on buying shoes.

✓ Umm I spend a moderate amount on buying shoes.

The phrase 'moderate amount' requires an article 'a' before it. Also, 'spent' is past tense, but the question asks about usual spending, so present tense 'spend' is appropriate. This corrects both article usage and tense to fit the context.

× I prefer mid range brands that offer good quality at a fair price.

✓ I prefer mid-range brands that offer good quality for a fair price.

The term 'mid range' should be hyphenated as 'mid-range' when used as a compound adjective. Also, the preposition 'for' is more appropriate than 'at' when referring to price. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and naturalness.

× I practice practically over fashion and wearing comfortable shoes and it feels me like in a clouds walking in a cloud.

✓ I prioritise practicality over fashion and wearing comfortable shoes makes me feel like I'm walking on clouds.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'practice practically' is incorrect; 'and wearing comfortable shoes' is awkwardly connected; 'it feels me like in a clouds walking in a cloud' is ungrammatical. Replacing 'practice practically' with 'prioritise practicality' corrects the phrase; restructuring the sentence improves clarity; 'makes me feel like I'm walking on clouds' is the correct idiomatic expression. This addresses conjunction misuse and overall sentence structure.