Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Jawaban Anda terlalu panjang dan berulang, serta kurang terstruktur dengan baik. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih singkat dan langsung ke inti, serta hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'actually' dan 'because'.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because there are many types and styles available. I find it interesting to explore different models and price ranges.

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan tidak lengkap, serta ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Usahakan menjawab dengan kalimat lengkap dan jelas, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. However, I prefer buying them in stores because I can try them on to check the fit and comfort.

제안: Jawaban Anda agak panjang dan tidak selesai dengan baik. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas, serta lengkapi contoh yang Anda berikan.

예시: The amount I spend on shoes depends on their purpose. For instance, I spend more on formal shoes for work or special occasions.

제안: Jawaban Anda tidak lengkap dan ada pengulangan kata. Usahakan menjawab dengan kalimat yang lengkap dan jelas, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk menjelaskan pilihan Anda.

예시: It depends on the situation. For casual outings, I prefer fashionable shoes, but for long walks, I choose comfortable ones.

× there are a lot types of shoes

✓ there are a lot of types of shoes

The phrase 'a lot types' is missing the preposition 'of' which is necessary to correctly link 'a lot' with the plural noun 'types'. The correct phrase is 'a lot of types'. This is a common plural quantifier structure in English.

× a lot of different models and also different range of prices

✓ a lot of different models and also different ranges of prices

The word 'range' should be plural 'ranges' because it refers to multiple categories or levels of prices. When talking about multiple types or categories, the plural form is required.

× I both use online

✓ I both buy online

The verb 'use' is incorrect in this context because the action is buying shoes, not using something. Also, 'both' should be followed by two items or actions; here it is unclear. The corrected sentence clarifies the intended meaning.

× I'm more to buying shoes, uh, offline or in store

✓ I prefer buying shoes offline or in store

The phrase 'more to buying' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'prefer buying' or 'I am more inclined to buy'. Also, 'in store' is better as 'in a store' or 'in-store'. Here, 'offline or in store' is acceptable but 'in a store' is more precise.

× it gives me the chance to try them, fits them and.

✓ it gives me the chance to try them, fit them, and...

After 'to', the verb should be in base form, so 'fit' instead of 'fits'. Also, the sentence is incomplete but the correction focuses on the verb form. The verb after 'to' is an infinitive and should not be conjugated.

× different situation requires different range of price

✓ different situations require different ranges of price

Both 'situation' and 'range' should be plural to agree with 'different' and the context. Also, 'price' should be plural 'prices' to match 'ranges'.

× when I'm looking for a formal shoes

✓ when I'm looking for formal shoes

The article 'a' is singular and cannot be used with the plural noun 'shoes'. Removing 'a' makes the phrase grammatically correct.

× or or even proposed

✓ or even proposed

The repeated 'or' is redundant and should be removed for clarity.

× we people are, uh, are in needs for that difference different kind of shoes

✓ we people are, uh, in need of different kinds of shoes

The phrase 'in needs' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'in need'. Also, 'difference different kind' is redundant and should be 'different kinds'. The preposition 'for' should be 'of' after 'in need'.

× I prefer a casual shoes, a fashionable use

✓ I prefer casual shoes, fashionable shoes

The article 'a' cannot be used with the plural noun 'shoes'. Also, 'use' is a typo and should be 'shoes'. The corrected sentence removes the article and corrects the noun.