Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'um' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, use clearer vocabulary such as 'match' instead of 'mash' and keep your sentences concise and direct.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I like to match them perfectly with my outfits. I especially prefer heels since they enhance my overall appearance.

제안: Avoid filler words and try to use linking words like 'but' or 'however' properly to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be more specific about your preferences and experiences.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online. However, I usually avoid buying heels and prefer sneakers because they are comfortable and go well with casual outfits.

제안: Reduce hesitation and filler words to improve fluency. Make your answer clearer and more structured by directly stating your budget habits and reasons.

예시: I don't spend much money on shoes. I set a budget every three to four months to update my shoe collection without overspending.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' more effectively and by varying your vocabulary to avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because they match well with casual outfits and provide all-day comfort, which helps me complete my outdoor tasks efficiently.

× I like to, uh, mash shoes which pair with my outfits perfectly

✓ I like to, uh, match shoes which pair with my outfits perfectly

The word 'mash' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'match' which means to pair or coordinate. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar problem, but correcting it improves clarity.

× I like to, uh, mash shoes which pair with my outfits perfectly

✓ I like to, uh, match shoes that pair with my outfits perfectly

The relative pronoun 'which' is better replaced with 'that' when referring to things in defining clauses. Also, 'pair' is correct as it agrees with plural 'shoes'.

× Yes, I did buy shoes online, however, I don't prefer buying heels but I have purchased a few sneakers umm which can be paired with any casual outfit for a comfortable feel.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online; however, I don't prefer buying heels but I have purchased a few sneakers which can be paired with any casual outfit for a comfortable feel.

Using 'did buy' is grammatically correct but less natural in this context; 'have bought' fits better for experience. Also, a semicolon or period is better than a comma before 'however' to avoid comma splice.

× Umm, uh, not a lot. I try to allocate a budget once in every three to four months such that my, uh, my uh, cupboard is also upgraded and I don't, I also don't overspend on, on something that's so.

✓ Umm, uh, not a lot. I try to allocate a budget once every three to four months so that my cupboard is also upgraded and I don't overspend on things unnecessarily.

The phrase 'once in every three to four months' is better as 'once every three to four months'. The sentence is fragmented and repetitive; removing fillers and restructuring improves clarity and grammar.

× I prefer to have more pairs of comfortable shoes because they usually pair with any casual outfits and they also provide great comfort throughout the day and this helps me to do my outside tasks more efficiently.

✓ I prefer to have more pairs of comfortable shoes because they usually pair with any casual outfit and they also provide great comfort throughout the day, which helps me do my outside tasks more efficiently.

The word 'outfits' should be singular 'outfit' to agree with 'any' which is singular. Also, 'which helps me do' is more natural than 'and this helps me to do'. Removing unnecessary words improves sentence flow.