Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid repeating words like 'shoes' unnecessarily and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, provide a clearer frequency to answer 'How often?'.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes and do it quite often, usually once every couple of months. I have a variety, including trainers and high heels.

제안: Reduce filler words like 'uh' to make your speech more fluent. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about your experience. Also, avoid repeating 'bought it online' twice.

예시: Yes, I usually buy shoes online. For example, last week during Black Friday, I purchased a beautiful new pair of Nike trainers.

제안: Avoid excessive filler words and improve sentence structure. Use correct prepositions and grammar. Also, explain why you spend that amount to add more content.

예시: I usually spend about half of my salary on shoes because buying them helps me relax and feel happy.

제안: Good structure and content, but reduce filler words and improve fluency. Use linking words like 'however' to make contrast clearer.

예시: It depends on the type of shoes; for high heels, I prefer fashionable ones. However, for trainers, comfort is more important to me.

× One of my favorite things to do is buying shoes.

✓ One of my favorite things to do is buy shoes.

After the phrase 'One of my favorite things to do is', the verb should be in its base form, not the -ing form. This is because 'to do' is followed by the base form of the verb, so 'buy' is correct instead of 'buying'.

× I have a lot of shoes like trainers or high heels shoes.

✓ I have a lot of shoes like trainers or high-heeled shoes.

The phrase 'high heels shoes' is incorrect because 'heels' is plural and 'shoes' is also plural, so 'high-heeled shoes' is the correct adjective form describing the shoes. Also, 'high-heeled' is a compound adjective and should be hyphenated.

× I guess most of the time I bought my shoes online and last week I bought a new, uh, Nike and uh, it was, uh, very, uh, beautiful and it was on Black Friday and I bought it online.

✓ I guess most of the time I buy my shoes online and last week I bought a new, uh, pair of Nike shoes and, uh, it was, uh, very, uh, beautiful and it was on Black Friday and I bought it online.

The phrase 'most of the time' indicates a habitual action, so the present tense 'buy' should be used instead of the past tense 'bought'. Also, 'a new Nike' is incomplete; it should be 'a new pair of Nike shoes' to specify the item. The rest of the sentence is correct in past tense for the specific event last week.

× I think uh, I spend uh, half of my uh, salary to my shoes and, umm, buying shoes is uh, really, uh, relax me.

✓ I think, uh, I spend, uh, half of my, uh, salary on my shoes and, umm, buying shoes really relaxes me.

The correct preposition to use with 'spend' in this context is 'on', not 'to'. Also, 'buying shoes is really relax me' is incorrect; it should be 'buying shoes really relaxes me' because 'relax' needs to be in the third person singular present tense form 'relaxes' to agree with the singular subject 'buying shoes'.

× buying shoes is uh, really, uh, relax me.

✓ buying shoes really relaxes me.

The verb 'relax' must agree with the singular subject 'buying shoes' and therefore should be in the third person singular form 'relaxes'.

× But in trainers of course I uh, prefer comfortable shoes.

✓ But with trainers, of course, I uh, prefer comfortable shoes.

The correct preposition to use with 'trainers' in this context is 'with' rather than 'in' to indicate preference when wearing or using trainers.