Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答が不自然で繰り返しがあり、文法的にも不完全です。より明確で簡潔な表現を心がけ、文を完結させることが重要です。例えば、靴の種類を具体的に述べ、購入頻度を明確に伝えましょう。

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially sports shoes and high-heeled sandals. I usually buy new shoes about twice a year.

제안: 文法の誤りと繰り返しが目立ちます。オンラインで靴を買わない理由を明確に述べ、文を論理的に繋げるために接続詞を使いましょう。

예시: No, I have never bought shoes online because I am afraid they might not fit my size properly.

제안: 金額の表現が不明瞭で、文法的な誤りも多いです。金額の範囲を明確にし、母親のアドバイスを自然な英語で説明しましょう。

예시: It depends on the shoes, but I usually spend around 10,000 yen. My mother often says it's better to buy more expensive shoes because they are more comfortable.

제안: 文が不自然で意味が伝わりにくいです。好みの理由を明確に述べ、比較表現を正しく使いましょう。

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because if my shoes are uncomfortable, it can cause problems. Therefore, comfort is more important to me than fashion.

× I like I like to buy shoes not only on sports shoes, but also high heel wear sandal uh, I buy shoes about twice a year.

✓ I like to buy shoes, not only sports shoes, but also high-heeled sandals. I buy shoes about twice a year.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'not only on sports shoes' and 'high heel wear sandal' which are awkward and grammatically incorrect. The conjunction 'not only... but also' should connect parallel structures. Correcting to 'not only sports shoes, but also high-heeled sandals' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× No I have never bought my shoes. I will be scared to buy shoes on online because it might be not fit my fit my size of. Size so.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I am scared they might not fit my size.

The phrase 'buy shoes on online' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'online' without 'on'. Also, 'it might be not fit my fit my size of size' is ungrammatical and redundant. The corrected sentence uses proper preposition and clearer structure.

× It depends on shoes. I usually spend your ¥1000 to because my mother often said shoes had better to buy higher than higher because it's more comfortable to suitable for me.

✓ It depends on the shoes. I usually spend about ¥1000 because my mother often says it's better to buy more expensive shoes since they are more comfortable and suitable for me.

The original sentence has unclear quantifiers and incorrect comparative structure. 'Spend your ¥1000 to' is incorrect; 'about ¥1000' is appropriate. 'Shoes had better to buy higher than higher' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'better to buy more expensive shoes'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think comfortable shoes is better for me because if I in a trouble about my shoes I can bear it in their uncomfortable to spend these shoes so I think.

✓ I think comfortable shoes are better for me because if I have trouble with my shoes, I can bear the discomfort when wearing them.

'Comfortable shoes is' is incorrect; 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'. Also, 'if I in a trouble' is incorrect; it should be 'if I have trouble'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Comfortable shoes is more better than.

✓ Comfortable shoes are better.

'More better' is a double comparative and incorrect. The correct form is simply 'better'. Also, 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'. The sentence is corrected to be grammatically correct and concise.