Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question first, then provide clear supporting details. Avoid redundancy and incorrect word forms. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: I don't buy shoes very often because I'm not very interested in them. However, since I enjoy outdoor activities, I sometimes need to repair my shoes because they don't last very long.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct articles and plural forms, and clarify your points with better vocabulary. Use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: No, I have never bought shoes online because I believe it's important to try them on to ensure they fit well. Moreover, prices can vary between online and physical stores, so I prefer to shop in person.

제안: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Try to give a direct response with clear reasons and avoid filler words. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

예시: The amount I spend on shoes depends on how much I like them. If I really like a pair, I might spend more than my usual budget, but otherwise, I stick to affordable options.

제안: Your answer has unclear phrases and grammatical errors. Avoid unnecessary words and clarify your points. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because when doing outdoor activities, comfort is essential. For example, if you are running or hiking, uncomfortable shoes can cause injuries.

× I'm not really a big fan of shoes so I don't really buy it really oftenly, but as I am a outdoors activity lovers so sometimes I need to repair my shoes because the durable is not isn't that good.

✓ I'm not really a big fan of shoes so I don't really buy them very often, but as I am an outdoor activity lover, sometimes I need to repair my shoes because their durability isn't that good.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to 'shoes' which is plural; it should be 'them'. 'Outdoors activity lovers' is incorrect; it should be 'an outdoor activity lover' to match singular subject. 'Durable' is an adjective, but here the noun 'durability' is needed. Also, 'not isn't' is a double negative and should be corrected to 'isn't'. 'Oftenly' is not a correct adverb; 'very often' is appropriate.

× I'm not really a big fan of shoes so I don't really buy it really oftenly, but as I am a outdoors activity lovers so sometimes I need to repair my shoes because the durable is not isn't that good.

✓ I'm not really a big fan of shoes so I don't really buy them very often, but as I am an outdoor activity lover, sometimes I need to repair my shoes because their durability isn't that good.

The article 'a' should be followed by a word starting with a consonant sound; 'outdoors' should be 'outdoor' and 'a outdoors activity lovers' is incorrect because 'lovers' is plural; it should be 'an outdoor activity lover'.

× No, I have never bought a shoes online because I think you have to really try on the shoes so that you can make sure the size is fitable.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I think you have to really try on the shoes so that you can make sure the size fits.

The phrase 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and does not take the article 'a'. Also, 'fitable' is not a correct word; 'fits' is the correct verb form here.

× No, I have never bought a shoes online because I think you have to really try on the shoes so that you can make sure the size is fitable.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I think you have to really try on the shoes so that you can make sure the size fits.

'Fitable' is not a correct adjective; the correct verb form 'fits' should be used to indicate that the size is appropriate.

× Also the price is affordable for you because sometimes the online store and real store will be a price differences.

✓ Also, the price is affordable for you because sometimes there is a price difference between the online store and the real store.

The phrase 'will be a price differences' is incorrect. 'Price difference' is singular and should be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'between' is the correct preposition to compare two stores.

× Also the price is affordable for you because sometimes the online store and real store will be a price differences.

✓ Also, the price is affordable for you because sometimes there is a price difference between the online store and the real store.

'Price differences' is plural but preceded by 'a' which is singular; it should be 'a price difference'.

× I mean, it depends on either the shoes really fascinate me or just so, so, so I would say if it's the shoes that I really want to buy that I think I will spend above the budget that I have I had, but if it isn't, I won't.

✓ I mean, it depends on whether the shoes really fascinate me or not, so I would say if they are the shoes that I really want to buy, I think I will spend above the budget that I have, but if not, I won't.

The phrase 'depends on either' is incorrect; 'depends on whether' is correct. 'I have I had' is confusing; 'I have' is appropriate here. 'If it isn't' should be 'if not' to refer back to the condition. Also, 'shoes' is plural, so 'they are' is correct instead of 'it's'.

× I mean, it depends on either the shoes really fascinate me or just so, so, so I would say if it's the shoes that I really want to buy that I think I will spend above the budget that I have I had, but if it isn't, I won't.

✓ I mean, it depends on whether the shoes really fascinate me or not, so I would say if they are the shoes that I really want to buy, I think I will spend above the budget that I have, but if not, I won't.

'It' is singular and cannot refer to 'shoes' which is plural; 'they' should be used instead.

× And I would say fast comfortable shoes because if you do outdoor activities, you need comfortable shoes to make fruits.

✓ And I would say fast, comfortable shoes because if you do outdoor activities, you need comfortable shoes to be effective.

'Make fruits' is incorrect and unclear; likely the intended meaning is 'to be effective' or 'to perform well' during activities.

× And I would say fast comfortable shoes because if you do outdoor activities, you need comfortable shoes to make fruits.

✓ And I would say fast, comfortable shoes because if you do outdoor activities, you need comfortable shoes to perform well.

'And' at the beginning is acceptable in speech but the sentence lacks clarity. Adding a comma between 'fast' and 'comfortable' improves readability. 'Make fruits' is incorrect; 'perform well' or 'be effective' is better.

× The difficulties like if you are running or dragging, you don't want to like break your foot.

✓ The difficulties are like if you are running or dragging, you don't want to break your foot.

'Like' is used incorrectly as a filler and 'break your foot' is correct but 'dragging' is unclear; possibly 'walking' or 'dragging your feet' is intended. Removing unnecessary 'like' improves clarity.