Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response to the frequency question and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more precise.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy them about twice a month, especially when I find a pair that matches my clothes well.

제안: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is a bit confusing. Try to structure your sentence clearly, use linking words, and avoid repetition. Be specific about why online shopping is convenient.

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is convenient to compare different styles and prices, which helps me choose the best pair.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

예시: I usually spend about CN¥2000 on a pair of shoes because I value quality. I believe good shoes should last a long time.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors. Use linking words properly and express your ideas more naturally. Also, explain your reasons in more detail.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I am practical and care about foot health. For example, when I have to work or stand for long periods, comfortable shoes help prevent pain and tiredness.

× Yeah, especially when I see a shoes match so well with my clothes, I will buy it directly.

✓ Yeah, especially when I see shoes match so well with my clothes, I will buy them directly.

The word 'shoes' is plural, so the article 'a' is incorrect here. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural noun 'shoes'. Remove 'a' and change 'it' to 'them' to fix the singular/plural agreement.

× Sure, I usually buy shoes online because I think buy shoes online is convenient for me to compare the shoes of styles and price that I get you the best one I want.

✓ Sure, I usually buy shoes online because I think buying shoes online is convenient for me to compare styles and prices so that I can get the best one I want.

The sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'I think buy shoes online' should be 'I think buying shoes online' to use the gerund form after 'think'. Also, 'the shoes of styles and price' is incorrect; it should be 'styles and prices'. The phrase 'that I get you the best one I want' is unclear and should be rephrased to 'so that I can get the best one I want' for clarity and correctness.

× Yeah, I usually spend about CN¥2000 for a pair pair of shoes, because I think it's important for me to choose shoes is the quality.

✓ Yeah, I usually spend about CN¥2000 for a pair of shoes, because I think it's important for me to choose shoes based on quality.

The phrase 'a pair pair of shoes' contains a repeated word 'pair'. Also, 'choose shoes is the quality' is incorrect; it should be 'choose shoes based on quality' to express the intended meaning properly.

× Yeah, I think is should last a long time for me.

✓ Yeah, I think it should last a long time for me.

The sentence is missing the subject pronoun 'it' before 'should'. Adding 'it' clarifies what 'should last a long time' refers to, making the sentence grammatically correct.

× I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes because I very practically and foot health.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes because I am very practical and care about foot health.

The phrase 'I very practically and foot health' is ungrammatical. 'Practically' is an adverb but the sentence needs an adjective 'practical' to describe 'I'. Also, 'and foot health' is incomplete; it should be 'and care about foot health' to express the intended meaning.