Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答が少し不自然で冗長です。頻度の表現が曖昧で、文法的な誤りもあります。より自然で明確な表現を心がけ、具体的な頻度を示しましょう。

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes every six months, and I prefer brands like Nike because they are stylish and comfortable.

제안: 回答は簡潔ですが、理由を述べている点は良いです。ただし、「always」は頻度が高すぎる印象を与えるため、適切な頻度表現を使いましょう。

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online because I am busy most days, so it's more convenient for me to shop on the internet.

제안: 金額の表現が不明瞭で、文法的な誤りが多いです。具体的な金額を明確に述べ、理由も簡潔に説明しましょう。

예시: I usually spend about 20,000 yen on shoes. Although it is quite expensive, I prefer to buy good quality shoes that last longer.

제안: 回答に繰り返しや文法の誤りがあります。「pray」は文脈に合わないため、「play」や「hang out」など適切な動詞を使いましょう。

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often go out and hang out with my friends. Therefore, I usually choose sports shoes or running shoes that are comfortable to wear.

× Yes, I like buying shoes and I often buy shoes and half a year and I like Nike. That is very cool and very useful to go shopping.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes and I often buy shoes every half a year. I like Nike. They are very cool and very useful for shopping.

The phrase 'and half a year' is incorrect; it should be 'every half a year' to indicate frequency. Also, 'very useful to go shopping' should be 'very useful for shopping' to use the correct preposition.

× Yes, and I'm busy every day so I always buy shoes online.

✓ Yes, I am busy every day, so I always buy shoes online.

The sentence is mostly correct but 'and' at the beginning is unnecessary and disrupts sentence flow. Removing it improves clarity and correctness.

× I usually use to buy shoes to like ¥20,000 I think it is very so expensive but I want to take a good shoes so I used to buy a expensive shoes.

✓ I usually spend about ¥20,000 on shoes. I think it is very expensive, but I want to buy good shoes, so I used to buy expensive shoes.

The phrase 'use to buy shoes to like' is incorrect; 'usually spend about' is appropriate. 'A expensive shoes' is wrong because 'shoes' is plural and 'a' is singular; it should be 'expensive shoes'. Also, 'take a good shoes' should be 'buy good shoes'.

× And I prefer to a comfortable shoes because I usually go out and pray with our friends. So I I prefer to comfortable shoes like sports shoes or running shoes.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I usually go out and play with my friends. So I prefer comfortable shoes like sports shoes or running shoes.

'Prefer to a comfortable shoes' is incorrect; 'prefer comfortable shoes' is correct. 'Pray with our friends' should be 'play with my friends' to convey the intended meaning. Also, 'I I' is a repetition error.