Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you could improve coherence by using linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly. Also, try to avoid slight redundancy and keep your answer within 4-5 sentences for conciseness.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes because changing my shoe style frequently helps me feel refreshed and confident. Moreover, I usually buy new shoes about once a year, especially when seasons change, so I can match my footwear to the weather.

제안: Your answer addresses the question well, but there is a small grammatical error ('both shoes' should be 'bought shoes'). Also, adding linking words would improve the flow and clarity of your response.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times, mainly from popular ecommerce websites like Amazon and Zappos. I find it very convenient because the shoes are delivered carefully to my doorstep, which saves me the hassle of going to a physical store.

제안: There are some issues with vocabulary and clarity here. The amount '$3080' seems unusually high and might be a typo. Also, 'at last' should be 'last', and 'crushing' is likely a mistake. Try to use precise vocabulary and check for errors to make your answer clearer and more natural.

예시: I usually spend around $80 on a pair of shoes because I prefer good quality and comfortable footwear that can last a long time. For example, I recently bought a pair of running shoes that provide excellent support and cushioning.

제안: Your answer is well-structured and clear. To improve further, you could add a linking phrase to better connect your ideas and perhaps include a contrasting opinion to show depth.

예시: I think the best shoes are those that are both fashionable and comfortable. However, if I had to choose only one, I would prefer fashionable shoes because I believe that your outfit reflects your personality and attitude. For instance, wearing stylish shoes can help me feel more confident, even though comfort is also important.

× I have both shoes online several times, mainly from popular ecommerce websites like Amazon and Zappos.

✓ I have bought shoes online several times, mainly from popular ecommerce websites like Amazon and Zappos.

The verb 'have' is incorrectly used here; the correct past participle form 'bought' should be used with 'have' to form the present perfect tense indicating past actions with relevance to the present.

× which saves me the hassle of going a physical store.

✓ which saves me the hassle of going to a physical store.

The preposition 'to' is required after 'going' when indicating movement towards a place. Omitting 'to' results in incorrect prepositional usage.

× I usually spend around $3080 on a pair of shoes because I prefer good quality and comfortable footwear that can at last a long time.

✓ I usually spend around $30-80 on a pair of shoes because I prefer good quality and comfortable footwear that can last a long time.

The amount '$3080' is likely a typo or incorrect quantifier for shoe price. It should be a range like '$30-80'. Also, 'at last' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'last' meaning to endure over time.

× For example, I recently bought a pair of running shoes that provide excellent support and crushing.

✓ For example, I recently bought a pair of running shoes that provide excellent support and cushioning.

The word 'crushing' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'cushioning', which refers to comfort and shock absorption in shoes.