Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct basic grammar (e.g., tense, articles). Keep the response to no more than five sentences.

예시: Yes, I used to enjoy buying shoes, but now I buy them rarely. Recently I prefer comfortable sneakers because I value practicality and save money for books and other priorities. Therefore, I only purchase shoes when I really need them.

제안: Answer directly and give specific reasons. Use linking words (however, because) to explain the problem with online shopping. Fix grammar and use clearer vocabulary (e.g., "sizes vary between brands"). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times, but I often return them because sizes vary between brands. For example, a size 42 in one brand can feel too small in another, so I prefer trying shoes in a store where I can check the fit before buying.

제안: Give a clear direct answer with a simple number, then add one concise reason. Avoid rambling and correct repetitive phrasing. Use linking words like "because" to connect explanation.

예시: I usually spend less than $80 on a pair of shoes because I can find good options for daily use within that price range. I only buy more expensive shoes if I need them for a special occasion.

제안: Start with a direct statement, then give specific reasons and one exception. Use linking words like "because" and "however". Correct grammatical errors and avoid repetition of "fashion". Keep to 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I commute to work, attend classes and go to the gym most days. However, I wear more fashionable shoes when I have a meeting or a formal event. Comfort is my priority for everyday use.

× I used to like the shopping and specially I really love the buying shoes because when I was in I really loved the height.

✓ I used to like shopping, and especially I really loved buying shoes because when I was younger I liked high heels.

Multiple errors: 'the shopping' and 'the buying shoes' misuse articles and gerunds (Article errors ID 22 and Verb + -ing form ID 8). 'specially' should be 'especially' (adverb spelling but treated as incorrect word choice - Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs ID 13). 'when I was in' is incomplete; likely meant 'when I was younger' (Sentence structure errors ID 26). Suggestions: remove unnecessary 'the' before uncountable gerunds (say 'shopping', 'buying shoes'), use 'especially', and replace 'when I was in' with a clear time phrase like 'when I was younger' or 'when I was a teenager'. Note: Reported grammar problem types: 22, 8, 13, 26.

× But recently I'm getting older and I never buy shoes, just I wear the sneakers and I prepare, invest my money on the book or something other else.

✓ But recently I'm getting older and I rarely buy shoes; I just wear sneakers and save or invest my money in books or other things.

Errors: 'I never buy shoes' conflicts with context; 'never' should be 'rarely' (Word choice, but here treat as sentence meaning). 'the sneakers' uses definite article incorrectly before a general plural (Article errors ID 22). 'invest my money on the book' uses wrong preposition and singular noun (Incorrect use of prepositions ID 11 and Singular and plural issue ID 1). 'something other else' is ungrammatical (Sentence structure errors ID 26). Suggestions: use 'wear sneakers' (no article), 'invest in books or other things', and replace 'never' with 'rarely' if occasional purchases occur. Note: Reported grammar problem type: 22, 11, 1, 26.

× So I don't like buying on your shoes.

✓ So I don't like buying shoes anymore.

'buying on your shoes' is ungrammatical: 'on your' is incorrect prepositional phrase and 'your' is inappropriate (Incorrect use of pronouns ID 12 and Incorrect prepositions ID 11). Likely intended meaning is 'buying shoes anymore' or 'I no longer buy shoes.' Suggestion: use 'buying shoes anymore' or 'I don't buy shoes anymore.' Note: Reported grammar problem types: 12, 11, 26.

× Actually I bought shoes online so many times but 50% is I have to return because every brand is different size they have.

✓ Actually I have bought shoes online many times, but about 50% of the time I have to return them because every brand has different sizes.

Tense: mixture of simple past and present perfect; 'so many times' and ongoing relevance call for present perfect 'have bought' (Present tense issue ID 6 and Past tense issue ID 5). Word order errors: '50% is I have to return' should be 'about 50% of the time I have to return them' (Sentence structure errors ID 26). 'every brand is different size they have' wrong order and agreement; correct is 'every brand has different sizes' (Subject-verb agreement ID 27 and Singular/plural ID 1). Suggestions: use 'I have bought... many times' and 'every brand has different sizes.' Note: Reported grammar problem types: 5, 27, 1, 26.

× Does shoes style also make the size is looks different?

✓ Does shoe style also make the size look different?

Errors: 'Does' with plural subject 'shoes style' mismatches; use 'Does shoe style' or 'Do shoe styles' (Subject-verb agreement ID 27). 'the size is looks different' has extra 'is' and incorrect verb form; correct is 'size look different' (Verb form errors ID 10/8). Also 'shoes style' should be 'shoe style' (Incorrect use of adjectives or nouns ID 13). Suggestion: write 'Does shoe style also make the size look different?' or 'Do shoe styles make sizes look different?' Note: Reported grammar problem types: 11, 27, 10, 13.

× So uh, first shoes. I think I prefer going to shop and buying shoes.

✓ So, first of all, I think I prefer going to a shop and trying on shoes before buying them.

'first shoes' is incomplete and unclear (Sentence structure ID 26). 'going to shop' needs article 'the' or 'a' or expression 'going shopping' (Article errors ID 22). Also 'buying shoes' acceptable but better to say 'trying on shoes before buying them' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'first of all' to begin and include article or say 'going shopping.' Note: Reported grammar problem types: 26, 22.

× Usually I will like spend my money on the shoes, so even if I have to buy new shoes for some reason, I just spend my money under the $80.00 because in this day I could buy I can buy any shoes under the $100.00.

✓ Usually I spend my money on shoes, so even if I have to buy new ones, I just spend under $80 because these days I can buy many shoes for under $100.

Tense and modal issues: 'I will like spend' is incorrect; use simple present 'I usually spend' (Present tense issue ID 6). 'the shoes' unnecessary article (Article errors ID 22). 'I just spend my money under the $80.00' incorrect preposition and article; use 'spend under $80' (Incorrect use of prepositions ID 11 and Article errors ID 22). 'in this day' should be 'these days' (Incorrect adverb placement/time expression ID 20). Suggestions: use 'Usually I spend' and 'these days' and avoid 'the' with general nouns. Note: Reported grammar problem types: 6, 22, 11, 20.

× So I just find a set of shoes.

✓ So I just find a pair of shoes.

'a set of shoes' is unnatural; the correct collocation is 'a pair of shoes' for one footwear item (Singular and plural issue ID 1 and Incorrect use of adjectives or nouns ID 13). Suggestion: use 'a pair of shoes' or 'a set of shoes' only if referring to multiple matching items like outfits. Note: Reported grammar problem type: 1.

× Absolutely. I prefer comfortable shoes because my schedule is just go to the work and after that I'm going to school.

✓ Absolutely. I prefer comfortable shoes because my schedule is just going to work, and after that I go to school.

'my schedule is just go to the work' is ungrammatical: verb form wrong ('is just go') and unnecessary article 'the' before 'work' (Present tense issue ID 6 and Article errors ID 22). Use 'going to work' or 'I just go to work' and parallel structure 'and then I go to school.' Suggestion: use consistent verb forms and remove 'the' before 'work.' Note: Reported grammar problem types: 13, 6, 22.

× I go to the school and then go to the gym.

✓ I go to school and then go to the gym.

Article 'the' is unnecessary before 'school' when speaking of the institution in general (Article errors ID 22). Tense is fine. Suggestion: remove 'the' unless referring to a specific school. Note: Reported grammar problem type: 22.

× So I don't need a fashionable shoes.

✓ So I don't need fashionable shoes.

Incorrect article 'a' used before plural noun 'shoes' (Article errors ID 22 and Singular and plural issue ID 1). Suggestion: remove the article or change to 'a fashionable pair of shoes.' Note: Reported grammar problem types: 22, 1.

× But sometimes I need fashionable shoes when I have meeting.

✓ But sometimes I need fashionable shoes when I have a meeting.

Missing article before 'meeting' (Article errors ID 22). Tense is present and fine. Suggestion: include 'a' before countable singular nouns: 'a meeting.' Note: Reported grammar problem type: 22.

× But normally I don't use the fashion news fashion fashionable.

✓ But normally I don't follow fashion trends.

Original sentence is incoherent and repeats 'fashion' and 'fashionable' incorrectly (Sentence structure ID 26 and Incorrect use of adjectives/nouns ID 13). 'use the fashion news' is awkward; better to say 'follow fashion trends' or 'keep up with fashion.' Suggestion: replace with 'I don't follow fashion trends' or 'I don't keep up with fashion.' Note: Reported grammar problem types: 13, 26.