Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but make it more natural by using simple present tense consistently and avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Also remove unnecessary phrases like “for example” used too often.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, and I usually buy a new pair of sneakers about once a month. I mainly shop on the official Nike or Adidas websites because they have a wide selection and reliable sizing, so I can easily find models suited for running.

제안: Good idea, but the answer is short and ends abruptly. Use present perfect or present simple consistently and add a specific reason or brief example. Use a linking word like “because” or “so” and finish your thought.

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it’s convenient and lets me compare many styles quickly, so I can find the best price and read reviews before deciding.

제안: Numbers should be stated clearly and naturally. Avoid filler words and grammatical errors (e.g., “per shoes,” “a limit a budget,” “control the budget back”). Give a precise range and explain briefly how you manage spending using linking words like “so” or “therefore.”

예시: I usually spend around $50 to $60 per pair of shoes. To control my spending, I set a monthly budget for footwear and only buy new pairs when an older pair is worn out.

제안: The content is good, but tense consistency and linking words can be improved. Start with a clear topic sentence, then contrast past and present using connectors like “but” and “now.” Remove fillers and combine short ideas into a coherent two- or three-sentence answer.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes now. When I was younger I liked fashionable shoes because they followed the trend, but now I choose comfort and durability since I walk a lot for work.

× I love buying shoes. Every month I would buy sneakers.

✓ I love buying shoes. Every month I buy sneakers.

The student used 'would' to describe a habitual present action. Use simple present 'buy' to indicate a regular habit. Suggestion: use 'I buy' or 'I usually buy' for routines.

× For example, I would go to Nike or Adidas official websites to choose some sneakers that were for running.

✓ For example, I go to Nike or Adidas official websites to choose sneakers that are for running.

The sentence mixes conditional 'would' with present routine. Also 'were' is past tense; use present 'are' to describe the type of sneakers. Suggestion: keep present tense for habitual actions: 'I go' and 'that are for running.'

× Yes, I always buy shoes online because I found it easier to look at all kinds of shoes at the same time.

✓ Yes, I always buy shoes online because I find it easier to look at all kinds of shoes at the same time.

The student used past tense 'found' while stating a general, current reason. Use present tense 'find' to match 'always buy.' Suggestion: maintain consistent present tense when giving reasons for current habits.

× For example, I will scroll the website to see if.

✓ For example, I scroll through the website to look for what I need.

'Will' is unnecessary for describing habitual action; 'scroll' (simple present) is better. The clause 'to see if' is incomplete. Replace with 'to look for what I need' or 'to see if there are any I like.'

× I usually spend around 500 to $600.00 per shoes for example.

✓ I usually spend around $500 to $600 per pair of shoes, for example.

Use consistent currency format ($500 to $600) and correct article/measure: 'per shoes' is incorrect; use 'per pair of shoes.' Also add comma placement. Suggestion: say 'per pair' or 'on shoes' depending on meaning.

× Umm, I would set a limit a budget on how much I need to buy per month in order to control the budget back.

✓ Umm, I set a limit or a budget on how much I can spend per month in order to control my expenses.

Remove 'would' for present habit ('I set'). 'Limit a budget' is ungrammatical; use 'set a limit or a budget.' 'How much I need to buy' should be 'how much I can spend.' 'Control the budget back' is awkward; use 'control my expenses.' Suggestion: use clear phrases for budgeting.

× I would prefer comfortable shoes and for example, when I was young I prefer fashionable shoes because umm it meets the trend.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes, and for example, when I was young I preferred fashionable shoes because they met the trend.

Mixes 'would' and present 'prefer' inconsistently. Use simple present 'prefer' for current preference. For past preference, use past tense 'preferred' and 'met' (past). Also 'it meets the trend' should be 'they met the trend' to agree with plural 'shoes.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent and match subject-verb number.

× But however, when I get older I prefer comfortable shoes because it's more durable and it's useful for my daily routine to go to work as well.

✓ But when I got older I preferred comfortable shoes because they are more durable and useful for my daily routine when I go to work.

'But however' is redundant; use 'but' or 'however.' The student mixed tenses: 'when I get older' should be 'when I got older' if contrasting past change, or rewrite: 'But as I got older, I preferred...' Also 'it's more durable' should agree in number: 'they are more durable.' 'It's useful for my daily routine to go to work' is awkward; better 'useful for my daily routine when I go to work.' Suggestion: choose correct tense for timing and ensure subject-verb agreement and clear phrasing.