Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details (how often and why). Use correct tense and simple linking words (because, so, also). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes every six months because I wear them a lot for work and comfort is important to me, so I often choose Skechers since they fit well and feel very comfortable.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear reason with examples. Use linking words (because, for example, however). Correct singular/plural and sentence structure. Mention a simple specific instance if possible.

예시: No, I have not bought shoes online because sizes vary between brands, and I prefer to try them on in a shop. For example, a size 8 in one brand might feel tighter than a size 8 in another, so I shop offline to make sure the fit is right.

제안: Give a clear numerical range and explain why with concise reasons. Use correct currency and avoid unclear terms. One topic sentence plus one supporting sentence with a specific reason is enough.

예시: I usually spend about 50 to 80 dollars on a pair of shoes because I value comfort and a good sole. Comfortable shoes help me stand at work for long hours and reduce back pain.

제안: Give a clear preference in the first sentence, then briefly explain why with one or two specific reasons. Use linking words (because, however, but) and correct vocabulary (shoes, not suit/switch). Mention an exception if relevant.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because they protect my back and ankles and let me walk or stand for long periods without pain. However, I would choose fashionable shoes for special events like parties or weddings.

× I like to buy shoes very well because I love shoes in the different different brand.

✓ I like buying shoes because I love shoes of different brands.

The original uses 'very well' incorrectly (adverb used with verb meaning 'enjoy' — use gerund 'buying') and repeats 'different'. Use plural 'brands' to match 'different'. Use 'of different brands' for natural adjective phrase. Suggestion: Use gerund after 'like' for habitual preference and pluralize 'brand' when speaking of multiple brands.

× I mostly wear a Skechers brand because Skechers are the feet to my foot and it's the more comfortable.

✓ I mostly wear Skechers because they fit my feet and they are more comfortable.

Mismatch between singular/plural and subject-verb agreement: 'Skechers' is plural so use 'they' and plural verb forms. 'Are the feet to my foot' is ungrammatical — use 'fit my feet'. Remove unnecessary articles and use comparative 'more comfortable' without 'the'. Suggestion: Match pronouns and verbs to plural brand names and use 'fit' for size/fit.

× And I took AI took a how open to Easter once.

✓ I once bought a pair for Easter.

Original is unintelligible with extra words and incorrect structure. 'I once bought a pair for Easter' is clear and concise, using past tense 'bought' for a past event. Suggestion: Keep sentences simple and use correct past tense verbs for completed actions.

× No, I never bought a shoes online because of the online is the uh, yeah, it's the perfect size.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because it's hard to be sure of the perfect size.

Use present perfect 'have never bought' for life experience. Remove extra article 'a' before 'shoes' (plural). Clarify reason with 'it's hard to be sure of the perfect size.' Suggestion: Use present perfect for experiences and omit 'a' with plural nouns.

× If we select a perfect size, what is the sometime is the different brand has the different size, same size, but the the minor changes is there.

✓ Even if we choose the same size, different brands sometimes run slightly differently.

Word order and articles are incorrect. Use 'different brands' (plural) and 'run slightly differently' to express minor size variations. Remove redundant words and fix tense/number. Suggestion: Use 'even if' to introduce a concession and 'run differently' for size variation.

× So that's why I like to the offline and I be aware of the suit and.

✓ So that's why I prefer buying shoes offline, and I check the fit in person.

'Like to the offline' is incorrect; use 'prefer buying shoes offline'. 'I be aware of the suit' is ungrammatical — use 'I check the fit' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'prefer' with gerund and a clear verb like 'check' to describe actions.

× I spend money in Baidu's terms, likely to 5 to 8 K uh because of the uh is the uh, Vieira's comfortable suit and the perfect sole so that we are the comfortable standing working position and our back is the more comfortable so.

✓ I spend about 5 to 8 thousand on shoes because a comfortable design and good sole make standing at work more comfortable and better for my back.

Original contains incorrect preposition 'in Baidu's terms' and unclear phrases. Use 'spend about 5 to 8 thousand on shoes'. 'Make standing at work more comfortable' conveys reason. Remove filler words and correct article use. Suggestion: Use 'spend about' for approximate amounts and express reasons with clear noun phrases.

× OK, I prefer the comfortable shoes because the comfortable suit is the uh, good for the back also and the ankle.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because they are good for the back and the ankles.

'Comfortable suit' is wrong word choice; use 'comfortable shoes'. Use plural 'ankles' to refer generally. Replace unnecessary articles and repeated words. Suggestion: Use consistent nouns ('shoes') and pluralize body parts when speaking generally.

× So comfortable switch is the more preferable fashionable switch.

✓ So comfortable shoes are preferable to fashionable shoes.

Spelling 'switch' instead of 'shoes' and awkward comparative 'the more preferable fashionable' is incorrect. Use comparative structure 'preferable to'. Suggestion: Use 'preferable to' to compare two options and ensure correct nouns.

× And like if on occasion, if the like some occasion is a party to yeah, of course, fashionable suit I prefer, but more mostly prefer the comfortable suit.

✓ On special occasions, like parties, I prefer fashionable shoes, but most of the time I prefer comfortable ones.

Correct the word choice to 'shoes', simplify repetition ('if the like some occasion'), and use 'most of the time' for frequency. 'Fashionable shoes' is the proper phrase. Suggestion: Use clear phrases like 'on special occasions' and contrast preferences with 'but most of the time'.