Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện sự tự nhiên và ngắn gọn: trả lời trực tiếp, tránh nói thừa và đặt câu cuối không cần thiết. Nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng + một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể (ví dụ lý do, tần suất) và dùng từ nối nếu cần.

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I only buy them about once a year because I have a limited budget. However, when I do shop, I choose styles that are versatile so they last longer.

제안: Nói rõ ràng về trải nghiệm và dùng từ chính xác; tránh từ không phù hợp như "qualifications" cho giày — nên dùng "quality" hoặc "fit". Thêm chi tiết cụ thể và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes on Shopee, but they didn't meet my expectations: the color was different from the photos and the quality was poor, so I returned them.

제안: Câu trả lời có nội dung nhưng cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh cấu trúc ngược; cân nhắc nêu thêm một lý do cụ thể về chất lượng hoặc ví dụ về loại giày. Dùng từ chính xác như "affordable" hoặc "reasonable".

예시: I usually spend about 200,000 to 300,000 Dong on shoes because that price range is affordable for me and the shoes are usually good enough for everyday use.

제안: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và ngắn gọn; tránh lặp từ như "comfortable" nhiều lần. Nên nêu câu chủ đề rõ ràng và cung cấp một hoặc hai lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ để kết nối ý.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me walk and run without pain. Although I like fashionable styles, I always choose comfort when I have to be on my feet for a long time.

× To be honest, I am really keen on buying shoes but I don't have that much money so I just buy shoes about once a year. Yes.

✓ To be honest, I am really keen on buying shoes but I don't have that much money, so I only buy shoes about once a year.

The sentence uses present simple correctly generally, but 'just' is better replaced by 'only' to match intended frequency meaning; a comma before 'so' improves sentence flow. Suggest using 'only' for frequency and punctuating compound sentences.'

× Yes, I have bought a couple of shoes on a Shoppe platform and I think it didn't meet my demands of the color and the qualifications.

✓ Yes, I have bought a couple of pairs of shoes on a Shopee platform and I think they didn't meet my requirements for color and quality.

Use plural 'pairs of shoes' for countable items and correct platform name 'Shopee'. 'I have bought' is present perfect so referring pronoun should be 'they'. 'Demands of the color and the qualifications' is unnatural; use 'requirements for color and quality'. Suggest matching noun forms and correct pronouns.'

× I often spend about 200 to 300,000 Dong for buying shoes because it is very suitable for my wallet and it usually meets my expectation about the quality.

✓ I often spend about 200,000 to 300,000 Dong on shoes because that fits my budget and usually meets my expectations for quality.

Use 'on shoes' rather than 'for buying shoes'. Write number range as '200,000 to 300,000 Dong'. 'It is very suitable for my wallet' is awkward; use 'fits my budget'. 'Expectation' should be plural 'expectations' and preposition 'for quality' is correct. Suggest simpler, idiomatic phrases.'

× I am the kind of person that really keen on a sense of satisfaction, so I really want to use comfortable shoes because it helped me to feel more relaxed and comfortable to walk and to run.

✓ I am the kind of person who is really keen on feeling satisfied, so I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me feel more relaxed when walking and running.

Relative pronoun should be 'who' with verb 'is' for people. 'Keen on a sense of satisfaction' is awkward; use 'keen on feeling satisfied'. 'I really want to use' better as 'I prefer'. Tense agreement: 'helped' is past; should be present 'help' to match general preference. Use plural pronoun 'they' for shoes. Use 'when walking and running' not 'to walk and to run'. Suggest correcting relative clause, verb agreement and tense consistency.'