Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition, use a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details. Give specific frequency and preferences with linking words. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and correct basic grammar (e.g., 'I like buying shoes', 'a good sale').

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy a new pair about every two months because I often find good sales at the market. Mostly I prefer casual sports shoes and sneakers because they are comfortable for daily use.

제안: Answer directly and fix grammar and vocabulary errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example with linking words. Avoid unclear words like 'switch' and 'suit' when you mean 'shoes' or 'pair'.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online. For example, I bought a pair of Nike trainers from Amazon during a big sale, and I still wear them regularly because they are comfortable.

제안: Give a specific price range and use clearer vocabulary. Start with a direct statement about your budget, then explain why with linking words. Mention amounts (e.g., dollars) to make the answer concrete.

예시: I usually spend relatively little on shoes, normally around $30–$60 per pair because I buy them on sale. I prefer affordable but comfortable options rather than expensive branded shoes.

제안: Provide a clear preference statement and support it with reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, however) and correct phrasing (e.g., 'for daily wear' and 'for special occasions'). Keep to two or three sentences.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes for daily wear because I’m on my feet a lot and need support. However, I wear fashionable shoes for special occasions, such as birthday parties or meetings, to look more formal.

× I like uh buy buying shoes.

✓ I like buying shoes.

The verb 'like' is followed by a gerund (verb + -ing) when expressing a general preference. 'Buy' should be in the -ing form 'buying'. Remove the extra 'buy' and filler words to make the sentence natural.

× I remember I always uh, whenever I go to the market and uh, I, I, I see there is a good suge in the market, I buy immediately.

✓ I remember that whenever I go to the market and see a good sale, I buy immediately.

Use present tense consistently for habitual actions ('whenever I go... I see... I buy'). Include the conjunction 'that' after 'I remember' for clarity. Replace 'suge' with 'sale'. Remove repeated fillers.

× I think I buy one pair of shoes uh in, in two months and uh mostly I like casual sports and sneakers.

✓ I think I buy a pair of shoes every two months, and mostly I like casual sports shoes and sneakers.

Use 'a pair' (singular) and 'every two months' for frequency. Add 'shoes' after 'casual sports' to form the noun phrase 'casual sports shoes'. Ensure parallel structure with 'and'.

× You have, you have course.

✓ Yes, of course.

The student likely intended to say 'Yes, of course.' The original is ungrammatical and uses wrong pronouns and omitted words. Use the fixed phrase 'Yes, of course.'.

× Whenever, uh, I see a sale on the online website, I always buy a switch and still now I am having a Nike suit, which I buy from Amazon and I'm wearing this shoes regular regularly.

✓ Whenever I see a sale on an online website, I always buy a pair, and right now I have a Nike suit which I bought from Amazon, and I wear these shoes regularly.

Use 'on an online website' or simply 'online' (preposition), 'buy a pair' (correct collocation), and correct tense: 'bought' for past purchase. 'These shoes' matches plural noun; 'regularly' is the correct adverb form. Removed duplicative words and corrected word choice ('switch' -> 'pair').

× How much money do you usually spend on shoes?

✓ How much money do you usually spend on shoes?

The sentence is grammatically correct; no article correction needed. Included here to show it fits allowed types list (no change).

× I do not spend too much money on the shoes like branded shoes.

✓ I do not spend too much money on shoes like branded ones.

Use 'shoes' without 'the' for general reference. Replace 'branded shoes' repetition with 'branded ones' to avoid redundancy. 'Too much money on shoes' is the correct collocation.

× I always buy a sale switch with cheaper as well as comfortable for me.

✓ I always buy items on sale that are cheaper and comfortable for me.

'Sale switch' is incorrect; use 'items on sale' or 'shoes on sale'. Use comparative/adjective 'cheaper' and adjective 'comfortable' in parallel structure 'cheaper and comfortable' or better 'cheaper and more comfortable.' Keep noun agreement and word order correct.

× I prefer bosuj uh, comfortable shoes I wear in my daily routine and uh, fashionable shoes, uh, I wear on my on the functions, uh, birthday parties or somewhere meeting.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes for my daily routine, and I wear fashionable shoes for functions, birthday parties, or meetings.

Correct sentence structure and word choice: 'bosuj' is unclear and removed. Use 'for my daily routine' and 'for functions, birthday parties, or meetings.' Maintain parallelism and proper prepositions ('for').