Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, correct grammar and use concise supporting details (frequency, types and occasions). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Aim for 2–4 sentences, e.g. say how often you buy shoes, what kinds you prefer and when you wear them.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually buy new pairs every few months. I like trying different designs, especially casual sneakers and formal shoes. For example, I keep a pair for the gym, a pair for outdoor walks and a nicer pair for meeting friends.

제안: Answer directly, give 1–2 clear reasons with specific examples and use linking words (because, for example, so). Correct grammar (e.g. ‘I don’t like buying shoes online because…’) and avoid filler words. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I prefer not to buy shoes online because sizes often differ and I worry they won't fit. For example, I once ordered sneakers that were pictured well but felt too tight when they arrived, so I returned them.

제안: Give a clear estimate (amount or frequency) and explain reasons with specific details. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and correct grammar. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and avoid vague phrases like ‘uncountable.’

예시: I typically spend around $50–80 on a comfortable pair of shoes and buy new ones every 3–6 months. Because I move a lot for work, I replace shoes quickly when they wear out to avoid foot pain, so I buy shoes more often than my friends.

제안: State your preference clearly, give a concise reason and one brief example. Use linking words (because, so) and correct verb forms. Keep it to 2–3 sentences to sound natural and effective.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I value comfort daily. For example, I choose cushioned sneakers for long walks instead of stylish shoes that hurt my feet.

× Uh, actually I have very passionate about buying shoes and I try always try to different kind of design and fashionable shoes.

✓ Actually, I am very passionate about buying shoes and I always try different kinds of designs and fashionable styles.

The original uses 'have passionate' which is incorrect; the adjective 'passionate' requires the verb 'be' ('am passionate'). 'Try always try to different kind of design' has word order and article errors: 'always' should come before the verb, 'try different kinds of designs' uses plural 'kinds' and plural 'designs', and 'fashionable shoes' is better as 'fashionable styles' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I am very passionate' and place adverbs before main verbs.

× And also I use uh, different perspects of shoes like gym shoes separated and out in out outdoor shoe or shoes separated when I go with our friends walk up.

✓ I also use different types of shoes, like separate gym shoes and outdoor shoes when I go for walks with my friends.

The sentence misuses 'perspects' (should be 'types') and 'separated' is misplaced; use 'separate' as adjective before the noun. 'Out in out' is incorrect; use 'outdoor'. 'Go with our friends walk up' has wrong prepositions and word order; correct phrase is 'go for walks with my friends.' Suggestion: simplify to 'different types of shoes' and use 'separate gym shoes and outdoor shoes.'

× Actually, I don't like shopping from online, uh shoes and absolutely not because it's the size issues.

✓ Actually, I don't like shopping for shoes online at all because of size issues.

Use 'shopping for shoes online' (correct preposition). 'Absolutely not' is awkward; 'at all' fits negative preference. 'It's the size issues' should be 'because of size issues' or 'because of the sizing problem.' Suggestion: use 'because of' to indicate reason and correct preposition 'for.'

× Also other thing, umm, there have a big scam or Nic in picture and the real of this uh, anything sales come.

✓ Another issue is that there are many scams or misleading pictures, and the actual product is different when it arrives.

Original has fragmented structure and incorrect words 'Nic in picture' and 'real of this anything sales come.' Correct sentence uses 'there are' for existence, 'scams or misleading pictures' for clarity, and explains that the actual product differs on arrival. Suggestion: use clearer nouns and proper clause order: 'Another issue is that there are...' followed by explanation.

× So that's the reason I do not, uh, like to brought online show.

✓ So that's the reason I do not like to buy shoes online.

The verb 'brought' is past tense; the sentence needs the infinitive 'to buy' or present 'buy.' Also 'show' is a misspelling of 'shoes.' Suggestion: use 'to buy' or simply 'buy' after 'like to.'

× Well, I usually spend money is uncountable because I work a lot of work and need comfortable, uh, pairs.

✓ Well, I usually spend a lot of money because I work a lot and need comfortable pairs of shoes.

'Spend money is uncountable' is ungrammatical and confusing. 'Spend a lot of money' is the correct expression. 'Work a lot of work' repeats 'work'; use 'I work a lot.' Also specify 'pairs of shoes.' Suggestion: use standard collocation 'spend a lot of money' and avoid repetition.

× Uh, if my shoes become uncomfortable and worn out, I replace them quickly to avoid pain.

✓ If my shoes become uncomfortable or worn out, I replace them quickly to avoid pain.

Change 'and' to 'or' to reflect that either condition (uncomfortable or worn out) triggers replacement. Otherwise sentence is acceptable. Suggestion: use 'or' for alternative conditions.

× So I ended up buying shoes more frequent than my friends I when I go to eat their outing and doing activities, umm, I feel very comfortable that.

✓ So I end up buying shoes more frequently than my friends; when I go out to eat or on outings and do activities, I feel much more comfortable.

'More frequent' should be the adverb 'more frequently.' Tense 'ended up' conflicts with habitual meaning; use 'end up.' The phrase 'my friends I when I go to eat their outing' is ungrammatical; separate ideas with a semicolon or sentence break. 'I feel very comfortable that' should be 'I feel much more comfortable.' Suggestion: use adverb forms and correct sentence breaks.

× When I brought some shoes or any clothes, I always noticed for comfortable rather than fashionable because when I something I wear in footwear, uh, do not give any comfortable.

✓ When I buy shoes or clothes, I always choose comfort rather than fashion because if something I wear is not comfortable, it is not worth buying.

'Brought' is past tense; the sentence refers to habitual action so use 'buy' or 'buying.' 'I always noticed for comfortable' is wrong; use 'I always choose comfort.' 'When I something I wear in footwear, uh, do not give any comfortable' is ungrammatical; correct to 'if something I wear is not comfortable.' Suggestion: use present simple for habits and correct collocations: 'choose comfort.'

× That means doesn't to, doesn't make sense to spend more money on that.

✓ That means it doesn't make sense to spend more money on them.

Original has missing subject 'it' and incorrect 'doesn't to.' Use 'it doesn't make sense to.' Also refer back to plural 'shoes' as 'them.' Suggestion: include dummy subject 'it' for extraposition and use correct verb structure 'doesn't make sense to.'

× So that's the reason I always choose comfortable, uh, umm, rather than fashionable shoes.

✓ So that's the reason I always choose comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones.

'Choose comfortable' needs the noun 'shoes' or use 'comfortable ones.' 'Rather than fashionable shoes' is acceptable but 'fashionable ones' avoids repetition. Suggestion: use full noun or pronoun 'ones' after adjectives.