Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và trật tự từ; rút gọn câu để tự nhiên hơn; thêm câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng liên từ để nối ý. Cụ thể: dùng thì đúng (I usually wear), loại bỏ tiếng lấp đầy (umm, uh), nối các ý bằng 'for' hoặc 'when' và giới thiệu tần suất rõ ràng (e.g. every month, regularly).

예시: Yes, I do. I usually buy shoes regularly for different purposes. For example, I buy formal shoes for work and casual sneakers for hanging out with friends. I also get special shoes for events.

제안: Giảm lặp từ, sửa ngữ pháp (e.g. 'I often buy' not 'I always buy' nếu không chắc), dùng cấu trúc nguyên nhân - kết quả rõ ràng (because... so...). Tránh mệnh đề chưa hoàn chỉnh ('cheapest than the' cần hoàn chỉnh: 'cheaper than in stores'). Nên đề cập cụ thể về trải nghiệm: giao hàng, đổi trả, kích cỡ.

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because I'm usually busy and can't visit stores. I shop on Shopee since it is cheaper than physical shops, and I find the delivery is convenient. Sometimes I read reviews first to make sure the size and quality are right.

제안: Trả lời trực tiếp rồi mở rộng bằng một chi tiết cụ thể. Sửa ngữ pháp nhỏ (I think it is around...). Có thể nêu một khoảng rõ ràng và ví dụ về loại giày tương ứng với chi phí.

예시: I think it is around 200,000 to 300,000 dong on average. For example, I usually spend about 200,000 dong for casual sneakers, while formal shoes may cost closer to 300,000 dong.

제안: Trình bày rõ quan điểm ngay đầu (I prefer...), sau đó giải thích với liên từ như 'when' hoặc 'otherwise'. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và từ sai ('mice' → 'times'; 'fashion fashion fashionable' → 'fashionable'), và giữ câu ngắn gọn, tối đa 3-4 câu. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể cho mỗi tình huống.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes for daily activities, but I choose fashionable shoes for special occasions. For instance, I wear comfortable sneakers when I hang out or exercise, while I wear formal, fashionable shoes to the office or events.

× I usually wearing shoes umm, for the main reasons like shoes for work, uh, and shoes for I hang out with my friends or shoes.

✓ I usually wear shoes for the main reasons: shoes for work, shoes for hanging out with my friends, or shoes for specific events.

The original uses 'usually wearing' which is incorrect because after adverb of frequency 'usually' we need the base form or auxiliary (present simple). Use 'usually wear'. Also 'for I hang out' should use gerund 'hanging out' after preposition 'for'. Improve clarity by listing reasons and using parallel structure. Suggestions: Use present simple after frequency adverbs, use gerunds after prepositions, and keep parallel noun phrases.

× I uh, go to some specific event and I do this regular basis.

✓ I go to specific events regularly.

The phrase 'do this regular basis' is ungrammatical. Use 'regularly' (adverb) to modify 'go', and pluralize 'events' to match general meaning. Simplify to subject + verb + adverb. Suggestions: Use adverbs for frequency and ensure pluralization when speaking generally.

× I always buy shoes online uh, mainly because I'm a busy person so I uh can't go to the store to buy my shoes, so I have to book it in the Shopee to buy it and I see it is very cheapest than the.

✓ I always buy shoes online mainly because I'm busy, so I can't go to the store to buy them; I have to order them on Shopee because I find they are much cheaper there.

Problems: 'have to book it in the Shopee' uses wrong verb and article — 'order' is correct. 'Can't' is fine. 'cheapest than the' is wrong comparative form — use 'much cheaper than there' or 'cheaper there'. Also pronoun 'them' replaces 'my shoes'. Use 'on Shopee' not 'in the Shopee'. Suggestions: Use correct modal/auxiliary constructions, choose proper verbs ('order'), correct comparative forms ('cheaper than'), correct preposition with platforms ('on Shopee'), and use plural pronouns for shoes.

× I think is around 2 or 300,000 Dong.

✓ I think it's around 200,000 or 300,000 Dong.

Missing subject 'it' and unclear number formatting. Use contraction 'it's' or 'it is' and write numbers clearly. Also use 'or' between two clear amounts. Suggestions: Always include subject and verb in a clause and express numbers consistently.

× It is depend on specific situations like uh for mice when I want to go specific event or office I will wear the fashion fashion fashionable shoes or I want to do exercise or hang out with my friends I will wear comfortable shoes.

✓ It depends on the situation. For example, when I go to a specific event or to the office, I wear fashionable shoes; when I exercise or hang out with friends, I wear comfortable shoes.

Use 'depends' (third person singular present) not 'depend'. 'For mice' is incorrect — likely 'for instance' or 'for example'. Use consistent tense: present simple for habitual actions ('I wear'). Avoid repeating 'fashion'. Use plural/singular appropriately and add articles where needed ('a specific event', 'the office'). Suggestions: Ensure subject-verb agreement ('depends'), use correct linking phrases ('for example'), and maintain parallel structure for contrasting choices.