Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers, then give a specific frequency using correct grammar. Reduce filler words and correct singular/plural and verb forms.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy a new pair about once every six months because I like updating my wardrobe and replacing worn-out footwear.

제안: Answer directly, avoid long general statements. Mention the specific experience with correct tense and concise reasons. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas and correct article usage.

예시: Yes, I have. For example, I once bought a pair of shoes on Amazon Prime because they were on sale and offered free delivery, so it was convenient and cheaper than in-store options.

제안: Be precise and clear with vocabulary and numbers. Start with a direct topic sentence explaining reason, then state the price clearly (specify currency). Replace unclear words ('sleep resistance', 'dribble') with correct terms like 'slip-resistant' and 'durable'. Keep to two or three sentences.

예시: As a professional physiotherapist, I usually choose comfortable, slip-resistant shoes to protect my feet and back. I typically spend around 10,000 to 15,000 INR on a pair because I prefer durable, supportive branded shoes.

제안: Give a clear direct answer and then explain with a specific example. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid repetition. Use linking words 'but' or 'however' to contrast preferences.

예시: It depends on the situation; I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday work because I’m on my feet a lot. However, when I travel or go out for social events, I usually choose more fashionable shoes to look stylish.

× Yes, definitely I like to purchase shoes.

✓ Yes, definitely I like to buy shoes.

Use of 'to purchase' is not wrong grammatically but 'buy' is the natural simple present verb collocation for habitual actions. Maintain simple present tense for routines: 'I like to buy shoes' or 'I like buying shoes'.

× Uh, I don't remember how often time, but yes uh, every six month in a one time or a twice in a year I I am buying a shoes.

✓ I don't remember exactly how often, but I usually buy shoes once every six months or twice a year.

Original has word order and extra words causing unclear meaning. Corrected sentence uses appropriate adverbs ('exactly'), correct time expressions ('once every six months', 'twice a year'), and proper noun phrase ('shoes' without article). Use simple present for habitual actions.

× Nowadays in contemporary world, the online platform is increased day by day and online shopping is become very famous.

✓ Nowadays, online platforms are increasing day by day and online shopping has become very popular.

Use plural 'platforms' to match general subject and present continuous 'are increasing' for ongoing change. Use present perfect 'has become' to show a change that has occurred and 'popular' is the correct adjective. Word order and articles adjusted for natural English.

× And once a time I remember I bought a shoes from online, uh, on the Amazon Prime.

✓ Once, I remember buying a pair of shoes online on Amazon Prime.

Use 'a pair of shoes' for singular footwear and correct preposition 'online' or 'on Amazon Prime'. 'Bought a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural; use 'a pair of shoes' or 'shoes' without 'a'.

× I bought it from it because it give me a good discount.

✓ I bought them on there because they gave me a good discount.

Pronoun references were unclear and verb tense was wrong. Use 'them' to refer to shoes (plural) and past simple 'gave' because the buying happened in the past. 'On there' or 'on Amazon' is more natural than 'from it'.

× I am professionally physiotherapist, so I usually buy comfortable shoes, uh, that sleeps, uh, uh, sleep resistance shoes to protect my feet and back at my work I typically spend around 10 to 15 thousands on a pair because I prefer branded shoes that are dribble and supportive.

✓ I am a professional physiotherapist, so I usually buy comfortable, slip-resistant shoes to protect my feet and back at work. I typically spend around 10,000 to 15,000 on a pair because I prefer branded shoes that are durable and supportive.

Multiple issues corrected: add article 'a' before profession, use adjective order and hyphenation omitted in speech replaced by commas; 'slip-resistant' is correct term not 'sleep resistance' or 'sleeps'. Use numerals format and appropriate noun 'on a pair'. 'Dribble' was incorrect — replaced with 'durable'. Past tense not needed; present simple expresses habitual action.

× It's depend on the situation.

✓ It depends on the situation.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires third person singular verb 'depends'.

× Uh I I like both type of shoes.

✓ I like both types of shoes.

Use plural 'types' to match 'both' and remove filler repetition. 'Both' requires a plural noun.

× In regular days I use a comfortable shoes knot.

✓ On regular days I wear comfortable shoes, not knots.

Use correct preposition 'on' with time expressions, verb 'wear' for clothing, and 'shoes' without 'a'. Original 'knot' unclear — likely 'not' or 'not'. If intended 'not', place properly. I corrected to 'not' after comma.

× But if I if I go to other travelling or for the fun activity I always choose the fashionable shoes rather than the comfortable shoes.

✓ But if I travel or go on a trip or do a fun activity, I always choose fashionable shoes rather than comfortable ones.

Simplified and corrected verb forms: use 'travel' rather than 'go to other travelling'. Use 'fashionable shoes' and contrast with 'comfortable ones' to avoid repetition. Use simple present for habitual preference and correct preposition 'on a trip' or 'for a trip'.