Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep answers concise and directly relevant. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct basic grammar (e.g., use correct verb forms and articles), and give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like “buying suits” when you mean shoes. Use linking words if adding a reason.

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy shoes for traditional occasions about once or twice a year, because I prefer styles that match cultural events and last a long time.

제안: Provide a clear timeline and reason, using correct tense and smoother linking words. Start with a simple direct statement, then explain when and why, and mention a brief result or outcome. Avoid filler words like “uh” and incorrect tense usage.

예시: Yes, I bought shoes online about five years ago when I needed winter boots urgently. I couldn’t find my size in local stores, so I ordered boots online and they arrived in time for the cold season.

제안: Give a specific amount or range and a clear reason. Use present tense consistently and avoid contradictory phrases like “one time basis.” Keep it to one topic sentence plus one supporting detail with linking words (for example, “because” or “so”).

예시: I usually spend between $30 and $60 on a pair of shoes because I prefer reasonably priced shoes that are suitable for different occasions and my daily work.

제안: Answer directly, use correct noun forms, and give one clear reason with a brief example. Use linking words like “because” and keep sentences concise. Avoid repetition and tense mistakes.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me stay focused and reduce fatigue during long workdays; for example, I wear cushioned trainers when I have to stand or walk a lot at work.

× Yes, I love to buying suits which are means to be comfortable for me and I usually buying shoes in the occasion started like in tradition.

✓ Yes, I love to buy suits that are meant to be comfortable for me and I usually buy shoes for traditional occasions.

The phrase 'love to buying' and 'usually buying' incorrectly mix the infinitive 'to' with a gerund. Use the base form 'buy' after 'love to' and 'usually' should be followed by the base verb 'buy'. 'Which are means to be' is awkward; use 'that are meant to be' to convey purpose. Also replace 'in the occasion started like in tradition' with 'for traditional occasions' for clarity and correct preposition use. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× I used to prefer by traditional shoes in my personal performance.

✓ I used to prefer traditional shoes for my personal use.

The preposition 'by' is incorrect here; say 'prefer X for Y' to indicate purpose. 'Personal performance' is awkward; 'personal use' fits the intended meaning. The structure 'used to prefer' indicates a past habit which is correct, so only preposition and noun choice are adjusted. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Many times ago when I was in, uh, my job time five years ago and that time I need urgently some boots for my winter, It's really cold season.

✓ Many years ago, when I was working five years ago, I urgently needed some boots for the winter because it was a very cold season.

The original mixes present and past tenses ('need' should be past 'needed'). 'Many times ago' is incorrect; use 'Many years ago' or 'A long time ago'. 'When I was in, uh, my job time' is ungrammatical; use 'when I was working'. Also ensure consistent past tense 'was' for 'it was a very cold season'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× And that time I didn't find my shape and size boot and I prefer to, uh, want online.

✓ At that time I couldn't find boots in my size and I preferred to buy them online.

Pronoun and noun forms are incorrect: 'my shape and size boot' should be 'boots in my size'. 'Didn't find' is fine but pair with 'couldn't find' for ability. 'I prefer to, uh, want online' mixes tenses and verbs; use past 'preferred to buy them online'. Also add 'them' to refer to boots. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I prefer to spend reasonable price for shoes because I didn't prefer to buy expensive shoes and I only use my shoes for one time basis due to different types of occasion and my working activities.

✓ I prefer to spend a reasonable amount on shoes because I do not prefer to buy expensive ones, and I usually wear my shoes only once for different occasions and work activities.

Maintain present tense for habitual preference: use 'prefer' and 'do not prefer'. 'Reasonable price' should be 'a reasonable amount'. 'Didn't prefer' mixes past; change to 'do not prefer'. 'One time basis' is unidiomatic; use 'only once' or 'only on a one-time basis'. Use 'ones' to avoid repeating 'shoes'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I always prefer to buy a comfortable shoes because it really help help me to focus on my work and my daily basic work When I was really tired.

✓ I always prefer to buy comfortable shoes because they really help me focus on my work and daily tasks when I am very tired.

'A comfortable shoes' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'shoes'; remove the article or use 'a comfortable pair of shoes'. 'It really help help me' has subject-verb disagreement and repetition; use plural subject 'they' and verb 'help'. 'My daily basic work' is awkward; 'daily tasks' is clearer. Use present tense 'when I am very tired' for general statements. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I really have my comfortable shoes to manage my activity.

✓ Having comfortable shoes really helps me manage my activities.

Original word order and phrasing is awkward. Use a gerund clause 'Having comfortable shoes' as subject and correct subject-verb agreement 'helps' for singular subject. 'Activity' should be plural 'activities' or specified; 'manage my activities' is more natural. Grammar problem type ID: 26}]}},{