Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Jawaban perlu lebih jelas, alami, dan teratur. Mulai dengan kalimat topik yang menjawab langsung, lalu berikan 1–2 detail spesifik tentang frekuensi dan alasan. Hindari pengulangan dan kosakata yang salah (mis. "juice", "goat"). Perhatikan tata bahasa dasar seperti bentuk kata kerja (I want to buy), dan batasi jawaban maksimal 3–4 kalimat.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes two or three times a year because I like having different styles for work and weekends. I prefer classic designs that are comfortable and easy to match.

제안: Jawaban perlu lebih terstruktur dan spesifik. Mulailah dengan jawaban singkat (Yes/No) lalu berikan alasan yang jelas dengan linking words (because, also). Perbaiki kosakata dan tata bahasa (original, scams, size). Berikan contoh konkret seperti pengalaman melihat review atau kebijakan pengembalian.

예시: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I'm worried about getting fake products and it's hard to be sure about the size. Also, I prefer trying shoes on in a store to make sure they fit comfortably.

제안: Jawaban harus lebih tepat dan natural. Sebutkan jumlah dengan format yang benar dan tambahkan konteks (mis. per pasang, per tahun). Gunakan kalimat lengkap dan jelaskan alasan memilih rentang harga terkait kualitas dan kenyamanan. Hindari kesalahan tata bahasa seperti penggunaan artikel dan bentuk jamak.

예시: I usually spend between 100,000 and 300,000 rupiah on a pair of shoes because I want something durable and comfortable. I think this price range offers decent quality without being too expensive.

제안: Jawaban cukup relevan tetapi perlu lebih personal dan terstruktur. Mulailah dengan jawaban langsung (I prefer...), lalu jelaskan kondisi ketika memilih fashion vs comfort menggunakan kata hubung (but, however, when). Perbaiki kosakata (styling, juice) dan buat contoh konkret seperti situasi kerja, acara, atau olahraga.

예시: I generally prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for long periods, but I choose fashionable shoes for special occasions or parties. For example, I wear sneakers for daily activities and dress shoes for formal events.

× Yes I do, I like buying shoes.

✓ Yes, I do. I like buying shoes.

Comma splice and missing comma after 'Yes' create a run-on; add punctuation and comma after yes for natural spoken phrasing.

× Whatever is juice is like the style I love it.

✓ Whatever is fashionable is the style I love.

Original sentence uses incorrect words ('juice') and awkward structure; replace with appropriate adjective 'fashionable' and simplify to a clear clause.

× Like I want buy a lot of shoes.

✓ I want to buy a lot of shoes.

Missing infinitive marker 'to' after 'want' and unnecessary filler 'Like'; include 'to' for correct verb pattern and remove filler.

× Many shoes for styling when I go out whenever I see a goat choose.

✓ I buy many shoes for styling when I go out; I often choose them whenever I see a nice pair.

Original has incorrect word 'goat' and unclear structure; correct quantifier usage and clarify meaning, using 'many' appropriately and adding verbs for full clauses.

× No I haven't ever bought shoes online because I don't think it originals.

✓ No, I haven't ever bought shoes online because I don't think they are original.

Pronoun missing and adjective/noun form wrong: use pronoun 'they' to refer to shoes and adjective 'original' with be-verb 'are' for correct meaning.

× There is a lot of scams on online so I don't think buying shows in online is good And also the size we don't know the real size is I should try it first.

✓ There are a lot of scams online, so I don't think buying shoes online is good. Also, we don't know the real size, so I should try them on first.

Use plural verb 'are' with 'a lot of scams'; remove unnecessary preposition 'on'; correct 'shows' to 'shoes'; split into two sentences and use 'try them on' for footwear.

× I generally buy a shoes around 1000 rupiah until 3000 rupiah.

✓ I generally buy shoes that cost around 1,000 to 3,000 rupiah.

Use uncountable/plural 'shoes' without 'a'; express price range with '1,000 to 3,000' and verb 'cost' for clarity.

× Maybe it's enough for me for buying a good shoes and good quality.

✓ Maybe that's enough for me to buy good, high-quality shoes.

Incorrect article 'a' with plural 'shoes'; use infinitive 'to buy' and adjective order 'good, high-quality' for clarity.

× Has good feature, good quality and comfortable.

✓ They have good features, good quality, and are comfortable.

Sentence fragment missing subject and verb; add subject 'They' and verb 'have'/'are', pluralize 'feature' to 'features'.

× It depends on your needs.

✓ It depends on your needs.

Sentence is acceptable; keep as is. No correction needed, included for completeness.

× If you want to styling you should buy a fashionable juice but if you want to use it wear it.

✓ If you want to style yourself, you should buy fashionable shoes; but if you want to use them for comfort, choose comfortable shoes.

Replace 'to styling' with 'to style', correct 'juice' to 'shoes', fix article usage and clarify contrast between fashion and comfort.

× For sports basketball you need to buy comfortable shoes for you use.

✓ For sports like basketball, you need to buy comfortable shoes for playing.

Add preposition 'like' to give example, correct awkward phrase 'for you use' to 'for playing' to express purpose more naturally.