Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetitions, give one or two specific supporting details and use a linking word. Also correct small grammar errors (singular/plural, word order).

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, though I don't do it very often. For example, I usually shop for shoes twice a year because I already own many pairs. When I buy, I look for unique styles that match my wardrobe.

제안: Organize your response with a clear topic sentence and specific reasons, avoid repetitions and small errors (articles, comparisons). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas and give one concrete detail about a positive experience. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is very convenient and offers more choice. For example, I can compare dozens of styles quickly and read reviews to find the right fit. Also, prices are often lower online, which helps me save money.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your typical spending, then give a specific reason and an estimate. Avoid hesitations and repeating phrases, and use correct noun forms and sentence structure.

예시: I usually spend between $60 and $80 on a pair of shoes. I think paying more than $100 is excessive, because I can find good quality shoes for about $80 that last long enough.

제안: Good clear opinion. To improve, add a brief example or reason and use a linking word to expand naturally, keeping sentences concise and varied vocabulary (e.g., 'prioritise', 'practical').

예시: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I wear them for long hours. For instance, I choose cushioned sneakers that also match my casual outfits, so I feel both comfortable and stylish.

× Yes, shopping, uh, shoes is my favorite things to go and buy because there are a lot of varieties in shoes.

✓ Yes, shopping for shoes is my favorite thing to do because there are a lot of varieties of shoes.

The sentence mixes singular and plural forms incorrectly. 'Shoes is my favorite things' should be 'shopping for shoes is my favorite thing' (singular subject 'shopping' + singular complement 'thing'). Use 'for' after 'shopping' to indicate purpose, and 'varieties of shoes' is the correct prepositional phrase. Suggestion: keep agreement between subject and complement and use correct prepositions.

× I have a lot of shoes so when I go shopping I buy 1 shoes so it's not I I frequently shop.

✓ I have a lot of shoes, so when I go shopping I buy one pair of shoes, so I don't shop frequently.

'1 shoes' is incorrect: use 'one pair of shoes' or 'one pair' (singular unit). The phrase 'it's not I I frequently shop' is ungrammatical and should be 'so I don't shop frequently.' Maintain singular/plural consistency and correct negation. Suggestion: use 'one' with countable noun units ('one pair of shoes') and a clear negative construction.

× Yes, I'm fan of online shopping because it's very convenient, I can see a lot of products in a short time and I I can pick shoes matching my style and my clothes are with cheaper.

✓ Yes, I'm a fan of online shopping because it's very convenient; I can see a lot of products in a short time and I can pick shoes that match my style, and my clothes are cheaper.

Missing article: 'I'm fan' should be 'I'm a fan.' 'Pick shoes matching my style' needs a relative pronoun or 'that match.' 'My clothes are with cheaper' is incorrect; use 'my clothes are cheaper.' Suggestions: include necessary articles ('a'), use relative clauses ('that match'), and use correct comparative adjective placement ('cheaper' without 'with').

× Yes, I'm fan of online shopping because it's very convenient, I can see a lot of products in a short time and I I can pick shoes matching my style and my clothes are with cheaper.

✓ Yes, I'm a fan of online shopping because it's very convenient; I can see a lot of products in a short time and I can pick shoes that match my style, and my clothes are cheaper.

The sentence mixes forms; use simple present consistently for general statements (I'm a fan, it's convenient, I can see, I can pick). Ensure verbs agree with subjects and maintain present tense. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual/general facts.

× I don't buy shoes more expensive, more expensive than $100 because I believe that's too much and around, uh, $80.00 I can get a high quality shoes, uh.

✓ I don't buy shoes more expensive than $100 because I believe that's too much, and at around $80 I can get a high-quality pair of shoes.

'More expensive, more expensive than $100' is repetitive; correct form is 'more expensive than $100.' 'A high quality shoes' mixes article and number: use 'a high-quality pair of shoes' or 'high-quality shoes.' Use hyphen for compound adjective 'high-quality.' Suggestion: remove repetition, place comparison correctly, and match articles with count nouns.

× I don't buy shoes more expensive, more expensive than $100 because I believe that's too much and around, uh, $80.00 I can get a high quality shoes, uh.

✓ I don't buy shoes more expensive than $100 because I believe that's too much, and at around $80 I can get a high-quality pair of shoes.

Use hyphen in compound adjective 'high-quality' and match adjective with noun number: 'a pair of shoes' not 'a shoes.' Place price phrase 'at around $80' in correct position. Suggestion: use hyphenated adjectives before nouns and correct article-noun agreement.

× Definitely comfort is more important for me than fashion. I prefer to buy shoes that are comfortable and at the same time I like them and it matches my style and my color taste.

✓ Definitely, comfort is more important to me than fashion. I prefer to buy shoes that are comfortable and at the same time I like them and they match my style and color preferences.

Use 'to me' (correct prepositional phrase) not 'for me.' Pronoun agreement: 'it matches my style and my color taste' should be 'they match' because 'shoes' is plural. 'Color taste' is awkward; use 'color preferences.' Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents and choose natural collocations.