Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, correct articles and plurals, and give a concise frequency phrase. Use a linking phrase to explain why and avoid redundancy. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially running shoes. I usually buy a new pair every two to three months because I run regularly and need good support. However, I only buy them when I feel my current pair is worn out.

제안: Improve grammar and coherence: correct article use (a/the), verb forms, and complete the thought about the downside. Use linking words (for example, however, because) to structure reasons and contrast. Be specific about how sizing is a problem (fit, returns).

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it is more convenient. For example, I can browse many brands and read reviews without going to a store. However, the downside is that sizes can be unpredictable, so I sometimes need to return items if they don't fit.

제안: Be concise and correct tense and word order. Start with a direct topic sentence giving a price range, then briefly explain why prices vary. Use linking words like because or since and avoid repetition.

예시: It depends, but I usually spend about 1,000,000 to 3,000,000 rupiah on a pair of shoes. This is because running shoes and well-known brands tend to be quite expensive these days.

제안: Good clear contrast. Improve naturalness by using smoother linking (for everyday wear vs. for exercise) and correct small grammar (match my outfit -> match my work clothes). Keep it to two sentences and add a brief specific example.

예시: For everyday wear I prefer fashionable shoes because they match my work clothes and casual outfits. For running or exercise, however, I always choose comfortable, supportive trainers so I can focus on my training.

× Yes, I like buying a pair of shoes, specifically a running shoes, just because nowadays I try to do running exercise and I like to buy it not so often, but probably two to three months and whether I really want to buy it or not.

✓ Yes, I like buying a pair of shoes, specifically running shoes, because nowadays I try to do running exercises, and I buy them not very often, probably every two to three months, depending on whether I really want to buy them or not.

Errors: 'a running shoes' mixes singular article with plural noun; 'running exercise' should be plural as 'running exercises' or 'running as exercise'; pronoun 'it' used for plural 'shoes' should be 'them'. Suggestions: use consistent singular/plural forms (e.g., 'running shoes'), match pronouns to their antecedents ('them' for shoes), and clean up phrasing for natural timing ('every two to three months, depending on...').

× Yes, of course I have bought a shoes in an online store just because it more convenience.

✓ Yes, of course I have bought shoes in an online store because it is more convenient.

Errors: 'a shoes' uses incorrect article with plural noun; 'an online store' is acceptable but 'in an online store' can be simplified to 'online' or kept; 'it more convenience' incorrect adjective/noun and missing verb 'is'. Suggestions: remove wrong article before plural noun, use 'is' and the adjective 'convenient' (not the noun 'convenience').

× I don't have to go all the way to the department store to buy a pair of shoes and also it's easier for me to know what type of shoes that I'd really like.

✓ I don't have to go all the way to the department store to buy shoes, and it's easier for me to know what type of shoes I really like.

Errors: 'a pair of shoes' is acceptable but inconsistency with plural—use either 'a pair of shoes' or 'shoes'; 'what type of shoes that I'd really like' has an unnecessary 'that' and awkward conditional. Suggestions: simplify to 'buy shoes' or keep 'a pair of shoes' consistently; remove 'that' and use present tense 'I really like' for general preference.

× However, I think the downside is probably the size I cannot.

✓ However, I think the downside is probably that I cannot be sure about the size.

Errors: sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical ('the size I cannot'). Suggestions: add a clause to express the intended meaning, e.g., 'that I cannot be sure about the size' or 'that the size may not fit' to complete the thought.

× It depends on the situation and what kind of shoes that I want to bought at that time, but probably around 1,000,000 to 3,000,000 rupiah, just because nowadays shoe running shoes quite expensive and a lot of good shoes are more above 3.

✓ It depends on the situation and what kind of shoes I want to buy at that time, but probably around 1,000,000 to 3,000,000 rupiah, because running shoes are quite expensive nowadays and many good shoes cost more than 3,000,000.

Errors: 'want to bought' uses past participle incorrectly; should be base form 'buy' after 'want to'. 'shoe running shoes' is garbled word order; 'a lot of good shoes are more above 3' is unclear and ungrammatical. Suggestions: use correct verb form after 'want to' ('buy'), reorder modifiers ('running shoes'), and specify numeric comparisons clearly ('cost more than 3,000,000').

× For day-to-day basis I prefer the fashionable shoes because it can match to my work outfit and my play outfit.

✓ On a day-to-day basis I prefer fashionable shoes because they can match my work outfit and my casual outfit.

Errors: missing preposition 'on' in 'on a day-to-day basis'; 'the fashionable shoes' unnecessarily definite—use 'fashionable shoes' generally; 'match to' should be 'match' without 'to'; 'play outfit' is unnatural—use 'casual outfit'. Suggestions: add correct preposition 'on', remove unnecessary articles, and use natural collocations like 'match my outfit'.

× But for running or exercise I prefer comfortable shoes so I can focus on my training.

✓ But for running or exercising I prefer comfortable shoes so I can focus on my training.

Errors: 'running or exercise' mixes noun and verb forms; better to use parallel forms. Suggestions: make items parallel (e.g., 'running or exercising' or 'running or exercise' -> 'running or exercise' could be acceptable but 'exercising' is more natural) and keep 'comfortable shoes' plural as correct.