Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filled pauses (uh, umm), and use varied vocabulary. Keep to 2–4 sentences: state whether you like buying shoes, give a specific reason, and say how often you buy them. Use linking words like "because" or "so" for coherence and give a precise timeframe.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I like collecting different styles to match my dresses and outfits. I usually buy a new pair every two to three months, and I choose styles that complement my wardrobe.

제안: Answer directly and expand with a clear reason and one supporting detail. Reduce hesitation and use linking words like "however" or "but". Mention a specific problem and a coping strategy (e.g., trying them on in-store).

예시: No, I usually avoid buying shoes online because the sizes can be unreliable, and I prefer to try them on for fit. However, I do check websites for sales and then buy the shoes in a physical store if I like them.

제안: Give a clear, well-organized answer. Start with a direct range, then explain any conditions (sales, special occasions). Remove unrelated or unclear phrases. Use currency consistently and avoid rambling.

예시: I usually spend around $50 to $70 on a pair of shoes. If there is no sale or if I need a specific style, I might spend up to $100, but I rarely go beyond that.

제안: Respond directly and support your preference with specific reasons and an example. Reduce filler words and state a brand or feature clearly. Use linking words like "because" and add one detail about how it benefits you.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot and need good support. For example, I like Puma sneakers with soft foam soles since they cushion my feet and are suitable for both walking and light exercise.

× I like to buy uh, shoes because umm, uh, I love to collect uh, like a different shoes to messing with my uh, dresses and my clothes.

✓ I like to buy shoes because I love to collect different shoes to match my dresses and my clothes.

The phrase 'to messing' incorrectly uses the -ing form after 'to'. After 'to' as a part of an infinitive, use the base verb (match). Also 'a different shoes' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and use 'different shoes'. Remove filler sounds and redundant words for clarity. Suggestion: Use the infinitive form after 'to' and ensure article-noun agreement; say 'different shoes' when referring to multiple items.

× Uh, I usually buy umm, a pair of shoes after 2-3 months.

✓ I usually buy a pair of shoes every 2–3 months.

'After 2-3 months' is not the natural expression for a recurring timeframe; use 'every 2–3 months'. The rest is correct: 'a pair of shoes' is singular and matches the article 'a'. Suggestion: Use 'every' for repeated intervals.

× Uh no, I don't uh, buy shoes online because umm uh, sometime it's uh umm, not uh uh, good in size.

✓ No, I don't buy shoes online because sometimes they are not the right size.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) not 'sometime' when indicating frequency. 'It's not good in size' is unnatural; refer to 'they are not the right size' for shoes (plural). Also 'I don't buy' matches present habitual action. Correct pronoun agreement: 'shoes' -> 'they'. Suggestion: Use 'sometimes' and match plural nouns with plural pronouns.

× So I checked online for deals or sales but I just visit the stores for buying it.

✓ So I check online for deals or sales, but I just visit stores to buy them.

Tense consistency: keep present tense 'check' to match habitual action. 'Visit the stores for buying it' is awkward: use 'visit stores to buy them' and match pronoun number ('them' for shoes). Remove 'the' before 'stores' unless referring to specific stores. Suggestion: Keep consistent tense and use 'to buy' instead of 'for buying'.

× I tried you always tired? Usually spend money on shoes like from 50 to $70 or otherwise.

✓ I am usually careful with money. I usually spend between $50 and $70 on shoes.

The original contains unrelated fragments ('I tried you always tired?') that are unclear. Rewritten to a coherent response that fits the question. Use 'between $50 and $70' for price ranges and include currency before both numbers or format clearly. 'Usually spend money on shoes like from 50 to $70' is ungrammatical and unclear. Suggestion: Answer concisely with clear price range phrasing.

× If it's not in sale then I can spend till $100 not more than that.

✓ If it's not on sale, I can spend up to $100, but not more than that.

Use preposition 'on sale' not 'in sale'. 'Spend till $100' is nonstandard; use 'up to $100'. Add commas for clarity and keep conditionals clear. Tense/modal 'can' is acceptable for ability/willingness. Suggestion: Use 'on sale' and 'up to' for limits.

× I always prefer comfortable shoes, uh, most of I prefer uh, Puma, uh, uh, brand and uh, with the soft foam, uh, shoes, uh, because, uh, it's very comfortable to walk and it's also sports shoes.

✓ I always prefer comfortable shoes. Usually I prefer the Puma brand with soft foam shoes because they are very comfortable for walking and they are also sports shoes.

'Most of I prefer' is incorrect pronoun/order; use 'Usually I prefer'. Include the definite article 'the' with a specific brand: 'the Puma brand'. 'With the soft foam, shoes' is awkward; 'with soft foam' is better. Use plural pronouns 'they' to agree with 'shoes'. 'Comfortable to walk' should be 'comfortable for walking'. Split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Fix word order, use correct articles with brands, ensure pronoun agreement, and use 'comfortable for walking'.