Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha açık ve doğal bir yapıda olmalı. Öncelikle doğrudan soruya yanıt verin (evet/hayır) ve ardından ne sıklıkta aldığınızı belirtin. Cümleleri kısa ve net tutun, karışık kelime seçimlerinden kaçının. Ayrıca zaman ve miktar gibi spesifik bilgiler verin. Bağlaçları (for example, because, so) mantıklı yerlerde kullanın ve gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın.

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes, especially sports shoes. I usually buy new sports shoes every six months because I exercise regularly. I prefer stores where I can try them on to make sure they fit. I also look for affordable options that offer good quality.

제안: Cevabınızı doğrudan verin ve nedenlerini açıkça sıralayın. Online alışverişin avantajları ve dezavantajlarını iki kısa cümlede belirtin. Tutarlı bağlaçlar kullanın (for example, however, because) ve belirsiz ifadelerden kaçının. Deneyiminizden spesifik bir örnek verin (örneğin iade durumu veya yanlış ürün).

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. I find it convenient because there is a wider selection and often lower prices. However, I sometimes receive the wrong size or color, so I check return policies before buying. For example, once I ordered running shoes and they were too small, but I returned them and got the correct size.

제안: Miktar ve frekans gibi sayı bilgilerini açıkça verin. Bir ana cümle ile tipik harcama aralığını söyleyin ve nedenini kısaca açıklayın (örneğin rahatlık, kullanım amacı). Gereksiz veya anlaşılmaz numara ve kelimeler kullanmayın. Cümleleri 2-3 kısa cümleyle sınırlayın.

예시: I usually spend about $50 to $80 on a pair of shoes. I mainly buy sports shoes, so comfort and durability are my priorities. I rarely buy very expensive shoes unless I need them for running or special occasions.

제안: Net bir tercih yapın ve bunu açıklayan bir neden verin. Moda ile rahatlık arasındaki tercihinizi kısa bir sebep ve bir örnekle destekleyin. Bağlaçlar (because, although, however) kullanarak mantıklı bir akış sağlayın ve karışık ifadelerden kaçının.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I walk a lot every day. Although stylish shoes can look nice, I would choose comfort for long-term use. For instance, I often choose cushioned trainers over dress shoes even if they are less fashionable.

× Yes I'm allowing to take very shoes special sports shows buying because sports shows come affordably and covet it's happening.

✓ Yes, I like to buy special sports shoes because they are affordable and popular right now.

The original sentence uses incorrect pronouns and reflexive structures (e.g., 'I'm allowing to take', 'it's happening') and unclear noun references. Use 'I like to buy' to express preference, 'they' to refer to 'sports shoes', and clear adjectives 'affordable' and 'popular'. Also add commas and proper word order.

× I'm working sports shows on 8 years but others stay at shops well held at shows buying perfect.

✓ I have been wearing sports shoes for 8 years, but other people buy shoes at shops.

The original uses incorrect tense and verb forms ('I'm working sports shows on 8 years'). Use present perfect continuous or present perfect ('have been wearing') to express an action continuing for a period up to now. Simplify the second clause to correct subject and verb agreement and clearer meaning.

× Yes I did but I finding a online shops more logical because worried very bad cheap at find change.

✓ Yes, I did, but I find online shops more convenient because I am worried about receiving very cheap or low-quality items.

Mixed past and present forms ('I did but I finding') are incorrect. Use present tense 'I find' to state a general preference. 'Finding' should be 'find'. Clarify 'worried very bad cheap at find change' to 'worried about receiving very cheap or low-quality items'.

× I usually doing shops online but sometimes there is negative outside light or wrong coming thus far again you are planes and order it because.

✓ I usually shop online, but sometimes items arrive damaged or incorrect, so I have to return and reorder them.

'Doing shops online' is incorrect; use 'shop online'. 'There is negative outside light or wrong coming' is unclear—replace with 'items arrive damaged or incorrect'. Use correct verb forms 'arrive' and 'have to return and reorder'. Articles and connectors fixed.

× I usually choose spending money support choose more really because white mostly sport shoes I use for this reason, 3004 thousand interchanging, but my 4 important to be shoes comfortable.

✓ I usually spend money on shoes that I really like, mostly white sports shoes; I spend around 300-400 dollars, but the most important thing for me is that shoes are comfortable.

Original sentence has incorrect quantifiers and numbers ('3004 thousand interchanging', 'my 4 important'). Use 'spend around 300-400 dollars' as a plausible range, and 'the most important thing' to express priority. Correct prepositions 'spend money on' and adjective order.

× I am proud for con comfortable but fictional shoes to take apart arrange but comfortable my 4 important act for this reason might need to take shoes expensive it gets.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones; comfort is very important to me, so sometimes I need to buy expensive shoes for that reason.

The original mixes nonsensical words ('con comfortable', 'fictional shoes') and incorrect structures. Use 'prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones' to contrast, 'comfort is very important to me' to state priority, and 'sometimes I need to buy expensive shoes' to explain consequence. Fix word order and choice of adjectives.