Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., "for most of the cases"). Use a linking word if adding reasons or frequency.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy them online about once a month because it’s convenient and there are more styles to choose from.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and then one or two concise supporting reasons using linking words. Correct repetition and minor grammar ("a wide range" not "there are a wide range"). Be specific about the disadvantage and, if possible, mention how you cope with it.

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because there’s a wide range of styles and it’s very convenient. However, I can’t try them on beforehand, so I always check size charts and return policies to avoid problems.

제안: Start with a direct answer about your typical spending, then give specific ranges or examples. Fix grammar ("the price of them are" → "their prices are"), and avoid unclear numbers ("three CN¥100"). Use one or two clear sentences.

예시: I usually spend between CN¥300 and CN¥1000 on shoes because I prefer branded basketball shoes like Nike or Adidas. For casual shoes I might spend less, around CN¥200–CN¥400.

제안: Answer directly then give a brief, coherent reason using a linking word. Avoid informal expressions like "2 aspects" and tighten the structure to two or three sentences maximum.

예시: It depends: I prefer fashionable shoes for social occasions but I choose comfortable shoes for exercising. Ultimately, I believe designers should balance style and comfort so shoes can look good and feel good.

× I buy shoes about once a month for most of the cases.

✓ I buy shoes about once a month in most cases.

The original uses 'for most of the cases', which is an incorrect prepositional phrase. This is a present tense habitual statement; the correct idiom is 'in most cases'. Replace the phrase to match natural English usage and keep the present tense to describe a habitual action.

× I buy shoes online.

✓ I buy shoes online.

This sentence is grammatically correct and uses the present simple to describe a habitual action, so no change is needed. Included here to show it fits the present tense usage.

× I usually buy shoes online because there are a wide range of options and it is quite convenient.

✓ I usually buy shoes online because there is a wide range of options and it is quite convenient.

The phrase 'there are a wide range of options' is incorrect because 'a wide range' is a singular noun phrase, so the verb should be 'is' (there is). Use 'there is a wide range of options' to match subject-verb agreement in present tense.

× For example, I can't try it before buying buying.

✓ For example, I can't try them before buying.

There are two issues: duplicated word 'buying' and incorrect pronoun 'it' referring to 'shoes' (plural). Use 'them' for plural and a single 'buying'. Alternatively, 'trying them on before buying' would be even clearer. Keep the modal 'can't' and present-tense verbal noun 'buying'.

× The price of them are not cheap, from three CN¥100 to CN¥1000.

✓ Their prices are not cheap, ranging from CN¥300 to CN¥1000.

Original has pronoun awkwardness ('the price of them') and subject-verb disagreement ('are' with 'price'). Also the numeric range 'three CN¥100' is unnatural. Use 'Their prices' (plural) or 'The price of them' -> 'Their prices', and 'ranging from CN¥300 to CN¥1000' to express the range. This fixes pronoun use and agreement and clarifies the numbers.

× I would like to buy basketball shoes from famous brands such as Nike and Adidas.

✓ I would like to buy basketball shoes from famous brands such as Nike and Adidas.

This sentence is grammatically correct: 'would like' expresses a polite desire and fits the context. No correction needed.

× I prefer fashionable shoes when hanging out with friends and comfortable shoes when taking exercises.

✓ I prefer fashionable shoes when I hang out with friends and comfortable shoes when I exercise.

'Hanging out' is informal but acceptable; however 'when taking exercises' is incorrect English. Use 'when I exercise' or 'when exercising'. Including the subject 'I' improves clarity. Use the present simple 'I hang out' and 'I exercise' to describe habitual preferences.

× Actually, I think the designer should consider both 2 aspects.

✓ Actually, I think designers should consider both aspects.

'Both 2 aspects' is unidiomatic: 'both' already implies two, so writing '2' is redundant. Also 'the designer' implies a single person; better to use the plural 'designers' or 'a designer' depending on intended meaning. Use 'both aspects' for correctness and naturalness.

× A good pair of shoes should be both fashionable and comfortable.

✓ A good pair of shoes should be both fashionable and comfortable.

This sentence is correct: 'a good pair' is singular and adjectives 'fashionable and comfortable' appropriately describe it. No change needed.