Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and minor grammar errors, and make your answer more concise with one clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 supporting details. Correct plural/word choice (e.g., "they wear out") and avoid repeating ideas (you mentioned quality twice). Use a linking word to connect reasons.

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes and I usually buy them about once a month because my shoes wear out quickly. In general, I prefer branded, high-quality shoes rather than cheap imitations because they last longer and are more comfortable.

제안: Organize the response: give a clear topic sentence about the experience, then provide specific details (what was wrong, what you did) and a concise opinion. Reduce fillers and repetition and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes — about six months ago I bought a pair online, but they didn't fit properly, so I had to exchange them. The exchange took a long time and I found the whole process frustrating because I had to wait several weeks for the replacement.

제안: Be precise about amounts or ranges and avoid confusing vocabulary ("generic" likely wrong — you meant "branded" or "high-quality"). Start with a clear topic sentence stating an approximate price range, then explain why and how you budget. Keep it concise and reduce hesitation.

예시: I usually spend quite a bit on shoes — roughly $80–$150 per pair — because I prefer well-made, branded shoes. I save money over time so I can afford higher-quality pairs that last longer.

제안: This answer is generally clear but has many hesitations and minor grammar errors. Make it smoother by using one topic sentence then contrasting with a linking word (e.g., 'however' or 'but') and correct phrasing like 'for celebrations' and 'comfortable for daily use.'

예시: It depends on the occasion: for celebrations or ceremonies I prefer fashionable shoes, but for daily use I choose comfortable shoes because they support my feet during long periods of walking.

× Yes, I'm fond of buying shoes and I prefer to buy shoes on a monthly uh basis, uh, because they worn out.

✓ Yes, I'm fond of buying shoes and I prefer to buy shoes on a monthly basis because they wear out.

The error is present tense: 'they worn out' uses past participle incorrectly; correct present simple is 'they wear out' to describe a habitual action. Suggestion: use subject-verb agreement in present simple for plural subject 'they' -> 'wear'. Avoid filler sounds and unnecessary commas.

× I prefer quality to quantities, so I prefer to buy uh branded shoes compared to fake shoes.

✓ I prefer quality to quantity, so I prefer to buy branded shoes rather than fake ones.

The phrase should be 'quality to quantity' (uncountable noun) and use comparative 'rather than' with 'fake ones' as a noun phrase. 'Branded' is an adjective modifying 'shoes' and 'fake ones' is clearer. Suggestion: use correct collocation 'quality over quantity' or 'quality to quantity' and 'rather than' for comparison.

× Yes, if I'm not mistaken, it was uh, six months ago I bought a pair of shoes online and it wasn't much with my feet uh, so I uh, had to uh, exchange them.

✓ Yes, if I'm not mistaken, about six months ago I bought a pair of shoes online and they didn't fit my feet, so I had to exchange them.

The original mixes tenses and uses incorrect phrasing 'it wasn't much with my feet'. Use past simple 'didn't fit' for a completed action in the past. 'About six months ago' is a natural time expression. Suggestion: use clear subject 'they' for plural 'pair of shoes' and correct verb 'fit' in past simple.

× It's uh, really, it was really a bad umm, uh, experience for me because I had to wait for the new ones and it was really time consuming.

✓ It was a really bad experience for me because I had to wait for the new ones and it was very time-consuming.

Use past simple 'It was' consistently for past event. 'time-consuming' is a hyphenated adjective (present participle used as adjective) and 'really' repeated is redundant. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and use 'time-consuming' as adjective.

× As I've already mentioned, I prefer quality to quantities, so I prefer to buy generic shoes.

✓ As I've already mentioned, I prefer quality to quantity, so I prefer to buy branded shoes.

Repeated error: 'quantities' should be 'quantity'. Also context earlier indicated buying branded rather than fake; 'generic shoes' contradicts 'branded'. If meaning is non-branded, keep 'generic', but collocation 'quality over quantity' is correct. Suggestion: choose consistent vocabulary and correct collocation.

× Uh, I pay more expensive and I always save up for buying expensive shoes, uh, because most of branded shoes and also, uh, generic shoes are really expensive, uh, so I spend a lot of money for them.

✓ I pay more for quality and I always save up to buy expensive shoes, because most branded and generic shoes are quite expensive, so I spend a lot of money on them.

'Pay more expensive' is incorrect; use 'pay more' or 'pay more for'. Use 'save up to buy' instead of 'save up for buying'. 'Most of branded shoes' should be 'most branded shoes' and preposition 'on' is correct with 'spend money on'. Suggestion: use appropriate collocations: 'pay more for', 'save up to buy', 'spend money on'. Reduce fillers.

× To be honest, it really depends on the occasion.

✓ To be honest, it really depends on the occasion.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Keep as is. Note: included to show validation of sentence structure.

× For instance, when I want to, uh, celebration or ceremonies, I prefer to, uh, wear fashionable shoes.

✓ For instance, when I attend celebrations or ceremonies, I prefer to wear fashionable shoes.

Original lacks a verb after 'want to' and misuses 'celebration' as verb context. Use 'attend' to indicate participation. Remove filler 'want to' unless followed by verb. Suggestion: use full verb phrase 'attend celebrations or ceremonies'.

× Uh, but uh, on a daily basis, I prefer to use, uh, on my daily routine, I prefer to wear, uh, comfortable shoes, uh, because it's really important to be comfort when you're wearing, uh, your shoes.

✓ On a daily basis, I prefer to wear comfortable shoes because it's really important to be comfortable when you wear your shoes.

Multiple issues: 'prefer to use' should be 'prefer to wear'. 'On my daily routine' is incorrect preposition; 'in my daily routine' or better 'on a daily basis'. 'to be comfort' should be adjective 'comfortable'. 'when you're wearing your shoes' -> 'when you wear your shoes' for consistency. Suggestion: simplify the sentence, correct prepositions and adjective forms, and use present simple for habitual actions.