Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer shows enthusiasm but has problems with clarity, grammar and relevance. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences), start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct articles, singular/plural forms and simple linking words like “because” or “so”. For example, say when you buy shoes (frequency) and why (design, color, need).

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy shoes once or twice each school semester because I like to get new styles and replace worn-out pairs. I prefer simple colors like white or black that match many outfits.

제안: Answer directly: say yes or no, then add a clear reason and a short example. Avoid confused fragments and keep sentences grammatical. Use linking words such as “because” or “for example” correctly. Mention convenience, price or delivery as specific reasons.

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because they are usually cheaper and there are more choices. For example, I bought a pair of sneakers online last month because the price was lower than in the mall and it was delivered to my dorm.

제안: Provide a specific typical price range and explain why it varies. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating the amount, then give one or two reasons (quality, comfort) using linking words like “because” or “so”. Avoid unrelated or confusing remarks.

예시: I usually spend about ₱1,500 to ₱4,000 on shoes, depending on the type. I spend more on sneakers because I value quality and comfort, but I buy cheaper sandals when I just need something for casual use.

제안: This is the strongest answer: it directly addresses the question and gives reasons with contrast. To improve further, make sentences slightly more concise and add a linking phrase like “however” (you already used it) and a brief example to show variety. Maintain correct word forms (e.g., ‘comfortable’ not ‘comfortability’).

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes most of the time because I wear them for long periods and I don’t want my feet to hurt. However, I sometimes choose fashionable shoes for special events, for example a dressy pair of loafers for a presentation.

× Yes, I love portion things too, especially when they have my favorite designs.

✓ Yes, I love fashion items too, especially when they have my favorite designs.

Original uses 'portion' which is incorrect word choice (vocabulary). Replace with 'fashion items' to match context. Ensure noun matches intended meaning. ID: not in list but treated as word choice; however only correct types from provided list are allowed. This correction addresses incorrect use of adjectives or nouns; treat as Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (13).

× I usually buy the white color for black and sharp.

✓ I usually buy shoes in white, black, or dark colors.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and adjective use. Use 'in' to indicate color and list colors with 'or'. 'Sharp' is incorrect here; 'dark' or 'sharp-looking' could be used. This is an Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs (13).

× I often buy shoes during the first semester.

✓ I often buy shoes during the first semester.

Sentence is grammatically correct for present tense habitual action, no change needed. However ensure context clarity: 'the first semester' is specific academic period, so present tense is appropriate.

× What time does I tend to buy shoes online but they are really cheaper.

✓ I tend to buy shoes online because they are usually cheaper.

Original has sentence structure errors and incorrect auxiliary 'does I'. Use simple present 'I tend' and conjunction 'because' to show reason. This is a Sentence structure error (26).

× For example, whenever I see my favorite shoe in the mall between the online for example because I can sleep a lot in my.

✓ For example, whenever I see my favorite shoes online, I often wait to buy them because I can compare prices and shop at my convenience.

Original is incoherent and has sentence structure errors. Clarify meaning: contrast mall vs online, use plural 'shoes', and state reasons clearly. This is a Sentence structure error (26).

× I usually spend a different amount of money and two because I look for quality and comfortability.

✓ I usually spend different amounts of money because I look for quality and comfort.

Original has incorrect quantifier and unnecessary 'and two'. Use plural 'amounts' when unspecified multiple values. 'Comfortability' is nonstandard; use 'comfort'. This is an Incorrect use of quantifiers (14) and adjective form (13).

× That's when I go to a shopping mall.

✓ That's when I go to a shopping mall.

Sentence is acceptable; preposition use is correct. No change needed.

× I look at the college first, the design, and if it's comfortable on my feet, I buy it no matter what.

✓ I look at the quality first, the design, and if it's comfortable on my feet, I buy it no matter what.

Original used 'college' incorrectly; intended 'quality'. This is a sentence structure/word choice error. Replace with 'quality' to make sense. Classified as Sentence structure error (26).

× Surprise for me to inform that that you enjoy what to buy.

✓ It surprises me to find out that you enjoy shopping and choose what to buy.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Rephrase to 'It surprises me to find out that you enjoy shopping and choose what to buy.' This addresses sentence structure errors (26).

× Most of the time I go for comfortable shoes because after all, I have to wear it and I make sure that my feet will not hurt.

✓ Most of the time I choose comfortable shoes because, after all, I have to wear them and I want to make sure my feet will not hurt.

Original has pronoun agreement and tense/style issues: 'shoes' is plural so use 'them' not 'it'. 'Make sure' better expressed with 'want to make sure'. This involves present tense and pronoun errors (6 and 12). Classified here as Present tense issue (6).

× However, sometimes I also go for fashionable designs if I want to match it with my outfit or I want to make it presentable.

✓ However, sometimes I also choose fashionable designs if I want to match them with my outfit or make my appearance more presentable.

Original has pronoun agreement ('designs' -> 'them') and awkward adjective/adverb use. Use 'make my appearance more presentable' for clarity. This is Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (13).