Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be slightly more concise and correct minor grammar: use plural 'occasions' and avoid repetitive phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail (when and why).

예시: Not really. I'm a practical person who doesn't follow fashion trends, so I usually buy shoes about once a year, mainly when my old pairs are worn out or I need shoes for a specific occasion.

제안: Avoid filler words (e.g., 'uh') and use correct plural/singular forms: 'promotions' and 'often I go to a physical store to try them on before ordering online.' Use linking words to show sequence (first,... then...).

예시: Yes. Online shops often have promotions and lower prices, so I usually first go to a physical store to try shoes on to check the fit, and then I order the ones I like online to save money.

제안: Good concise answer. For improvement, add a brief reason or comparison to give more detail (use linking word 'because' or 'so'). Keep it within 4–5 sentences.

예시: I usually spend about 1,000 HKD a year on shoes, mostly on two pairs of casual sneakers for work and weekends, because I prefer durable, comfortable styles rather than buying many fashionable pairs.

제안: Very clear and specific. To reach a perfect score, vary vocabulary slightly ('stylish' -> 'fashionable') and use a linking phrase like 'for instance' or 'for example' smoothly. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because fashionable styles are often less comfortable and less durable; for instance, when I travel or walk a lot during the day, I choose supportive shoes that protect my feet.

× I usually buy shoes about once a year, mainly when my old pairs are worn out or I need something for specific occasion.

✓ I usually buy shoes about once a year, mainly when my old pairs are worn out or I need something for a specific occasion.

The error is missing the article 'a' before 'specific occasion'. This is an article/quantifier issue because 'occasion' is a countable noun and requires an article. Suggestion: use 'a specific occasion' or 'a special occasion' when referring to one occasion.

× Online shops offer promotion that can have a lower price for the same items.

✓ Online shops offer promotions that can have lower prices for the same items.

'Promotion' and 'price' are countable in this context and should be plural when speaking generally. This is a quantifier/number usage issue. Suggestion: use plural nouns 'promotions' and 'prices' when referring to these things in general.

× So most of the time I will just go to physical store to try on and check if the sizes fit and then I will just uh make an order online.

✓ So most of the time I will just go to a physical store to try things on and check if the sizes fit, and then I will just place an order online.

Errors include missing article 'a' before 'physical store' (article issue) and incorrect verb phrase 'make an order' which is non-native; correct collocation is 'place an order'. Also 'try on' should be 'try things on' or 'try them on' to include object. Main grammar problem type selected is third person singular due to instruction rule 3, but errors are article and collocation; however here corrected sentence addresses these. Suggestion: add 'a', use 'try things on' or 'try them on', and use 'place an order' for natural English.

× To be honest, I don't buy shoes very often. I usually spend about 1000 HKD annually, mostly on a couple of pairs of casual sneakers for work and weekends.

✓ To be honest, I don't buy shoes very often. I usually spend about 1,000 HKD annually, mostly on a couple of pairs of casual sneakers for work and weekends.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but numeric formatting was adjusted for clarity. Main tense and structure are correct. Suggestion: keep consistent number formatting and commas for thousands.

× As a practical person, I usually choose comfortable shoes because stylish ones are often not as well made and can be uncomfortable for long periods.

✓ As a practical person, I usually choose comfortable shoes because stylish ones are often not as well made and can be uncomfortable for long periods.

Sentence is correct; included here to indicate no change needed. 'Well made' correctly modifies 'stylish ones'. Suggestion: no change required.