Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally natural and relevant. To improve, make the topic sentence more direct, reduce redundancy, and give one specific reason or detail about why you buy regularly (e.g., wear and tear, fashion, weather). Use a linking phrase to connect your routine and the example.

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes, though I’m not obsessive about it. I typically buy new pairs every three to four months because my daily shoes wear out quickly from commuting. For example, I bought a pair of sneakers last month to prepare for the cooler, wetter autumn weather.

제안: Good clear answer with reasons. Improve by removing small phrasing errors, using a linking word to connect convenience and drawback, and giving a brief specific example of a sizing problem or a platform you used.

예시: Yes, I’ve bought shoes online a few times, mainly sneakers and casual pairs. It’s convenient; however, the sizing can be unpredictable, so for instance I once ordered running shoes that were half a size too small. Therefore I often try shoes on in a physical store before buying expensive pairs.

제안: Your idea is clear but there are vocabulary and phrasing errors (e.g., “player” should be “pair”), and slight redundancy. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct the word choice, and briefly explain why that price range meets your needs with a specific example of what you get for the money.

예시: I usually spend about 200 to 800 RMB on a pair of shoes. That price range is reasonable because it gives me comfortable, durable shoes—like a pair of well-cushioned sneakers that last a year of daily use. I rarely buy high-end brands, since I don’t want to pay for hype alone.

제안: Answer is relevant and shows personal preference but has repetition and grammatical slips. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your overall preference, use a linking word to contrast situations, and give one specific example of each type of shoe you choose.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday use, but I also wear fashionable shoes on special occasions. For example, I wear cushioned sneakers to commute to school or work, but I’ll choose leather dress shoes or stylish boots when I’m on a date or attending an event.

× Put shoes online.

✓ Putting shoes online.

The student used a bare infinitive phrase 'Put shoes online' which is ungrammatical in this context. The examiner asked 'Have you ever bought shoes online?' so the student likely intended to say 'Putting shoes online' as a fragment acknowledging the activity or better: 'Yes, putting shoes online' but the correct present participle form is 'putting'. To improve, use complete clauses: 'Yes, I have bought shoes online' or 'Yes, putting shoes online is convenient.' Note: This maps to 'Verb in the present participle form' (ID 10) per the provided list.

× It's convenient, but sometimes the size doesn't fit perfectly so I still prefer trying them on in a physical store before deciding.

✓ It's convenient, but sometimes the size doesn't fit perfectly, so I still prefer to try them on in a physical store before deciding.

The original uses 'prefer trying them on', which is acceptable in many varieties, but given the instruction to only correct items matching the provided list, the clearest issue is the verb pattern after 'prefer'. Using 'prefer to try' is more standard in this register. Also a missing comma before 'so' to separate clauses. The error is classified as incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) because 'them' refers to 'shoes' correctly but sentence clarity improves with correct verb form. Suggestion: use 'I prefer to try them on' or 'I prefer trying them on' consistently and add a comma before 'so'. Note: This corresponds to 'Incorrect use of pronouns' (ID 12) per the provided list.

× I really spend around 200 to 800 RMB on a player.

✓ I usually spend around 200 to 800 RMB on a pair.

The student wrote 'a player' which is a singular noun but incorrect for shoes; the intended noun is 'pair' (of shoes). This is a singular/plural/word-choice issue: 'pair' is the correct count noun for shoes. Also 'really spend' is less natural than 'usually spend' given earlier frequency; correction uses 'usually' to fit context. To improve, use the correct collocation 'a pair of (shoes)' or simply 'a pair'. Note: This matches 'Singular and plural issue' (ID 1).

× I think that's reasonable for both comfort and durability.

✓ I think that's reasonable for both comfort and durability.

Sentence is grammatically correct; however, no change needed. Included here only to show that 'both...and' is used correctly. No action required.

× Honestly, I would never spend thousands just for the hype or the brand of it.

✓ Honestly, I would never spend thousands just for the hype or for the brand.

The phrase 'the brand of it' is awkward. Use 'for the brand' to match idiomatic English. There is no third-person singular verb error in the original, but the requested mapping chooses closest fit: improving phrasing for clarity. Suggest: 'for the brand' or 'because of the brand.' Note: Classified under 'Third person singular issue' (ID 2) only because no exact ID for awkward noun phrase is provided.

× I like them both. Well I'm going to school or work.

✓ I like both. When I'm going to school or work, I wear comfortable shoes.

'I like them both' is acceptable, but 'Well I'm going to school or work.' is a sentence fragment lacking clear tense and connection. It reads like a time clause and should be connected to main clause: 'When I'm going to school or work, I wear comfortable shoes.' This fixes sentence structure and present tense use. Use comma after introductory clause. Note: Mapped to 'Present tense issue' (ID 6).

× but occasionally when I go out on a date or want to dress up a bit I wear wear fancy shoes too.

✓ but occasionally, when I go out on a date or want to dress up a bit, I wear fancy shoes too.

The original contains a duplicated word 'wear wear' and misses commas around the adverbial clause. Remove the duplicate and add commas for clarity. This is an error in word repetition and punctuation; classified under 'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs' (ID 13) because 'fancy' properly modifies 'shoes' but punctuation and duplication made the phrase incorrect. Suggest proofreading to catch repeated words and include commas for subordinate clauses.