Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện sự tự nhiên và rõ ràng: tránh lặp từ và tiếng lấp ('umm', 'uh'), sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ 'specialized' và word order), và giữ câu ngắn gọn (tối đa 4–5 câu). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất (ví dụ: 'every few months' hoặc 'once a year') và lý do mua để trả lời trực tiếp hơn.

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes, especially sneakers from brands like Nike and Adidas. I usually buy a new pair on special occasions such as my birthday or New Year’s, so roughly once or twice a year. I prefer to buy then because those events feel like a good time to treat myself.

제안: Làm rõ và nối ý mạch lạc: tránh câu ngắt quãng và dùng liên từ hợp lý (because, so). Mô tả cụ thể hơn lý do: ví dụ muốn thử kích cỡ, quan sát chất liệu. Thêm một câu ngắn về khả năng mua online trong tương lai nếu phù hợp.

예시: No, I haven’t bought shoes online. I prefer to shop in physical stores because I can try them on to check the size and feel the material. However, I might buy online in the future if I find a good return policy and trusted reviews.

제안: Sửa ngôn ngữ và cụ thể số tiền: tránh từ không chính xác ('bucket') và tiếng lấp. Nên nói rõ phạm vi giá (ví dụ 'around $100' hoặc 'between $50 and $120') và giải thích ngắn gọn vì sao bạn chọn mức đó (chất lượng, hàng ngày).

예시: I usually spend around $100 on a pair of shoes. That amount is reasonable for me because it covers comfortable, everyday sneakers that are durable and good quality.

제안: Chú ý phát âm và từ vựng chính xác ('shoes' not 'soup') và cấu trúc đối chiếu rõ ràng. Trình bày quan điểm chính ngay đầu, rồi giải thích bằng một hoặc hai lý do ngắn có liên kết ('however', 'so').

예시: I prefer fashionable shoes because they look unique and stylish. However, I usually choose comfortable ones since fashionable shoes are often expensive and less practical for daily wear.

× I enjoy buying new shoes specialized umm, sneaker like Nike and Adidas uh, I often buy new shoes in the special day like birthday umm uh New Year's because I want to buy a new one to fit me.

✓ I enjoy buying new shoes, especially sneakers like Nike and Adidas. I often buy new shoes on special days like my birthday or New Year because I want to get a new pair that fits me.

The speaker used 'specialized' incorrectly; 'especially' is the appropriate adverb to emphasize examples. 'Sneaker' should be plural 'sneakers' to match 'shoes'. The clause was a run-on; split into two sentences and use 'on special days' (correct preposition) and 'a new pair that fits me' (correct noun and relative clause). Suggestion: use 'especially' for emphasis, pluralize countable nouns, and break long run-on sentences into shorter ones.

× No I haven't. I often buy new shoes at the store because I want to look a new pair in real life and. Make sure I make a good decision.

✓ No, I haven't. I often buy new shoes at the store because I want to see a new pair in real life and make sure I make a good decision.

'Look a new pair' is incorrect; use 'see a new pair'. The sentence was fragmented with an isolated period before 'Make sure'; combine clauses into one sentence. Also add commas for natural pauses. Suggestion: use correct verbs with objects (see/try on) and avoid sentence fragments.

× Uh, I think it's just $100. It's not really, umm, too high amount, but uh, with just this bucket, I can find out the affordable shoes for daily life.

✓ Uh, I think it's about $100. It's not a very high amount, and with this budget I can find affordable shoes for everyday use.

Use 'about $100' to express approximate amounts. 'Too high amount' is awkward; 'not a very high amount' or 'not very expensive' is correct. 'Bucket' is incorrect word choice; 'budget' is intended. 'Find out the affordable shoes' should be 'find affordable shoes'. Suggestion: use 'about' for estimates, use 'budget' for money you can spend, and use 'find' rather than 'find out' for buying context.

× Honestly I prefer fashionable shoes because it is so unique and beautiful, but one of the reason I don't buy fashionable soup is that's probably too high, so I often choose comfortable soup.

✓ Honestly, I prefer fashionable shoes because they are unique and beautiful, but one reason I don't buy fashionable shoes is that they're probably too expensive, so I often choose comfortable shoes.

Multiple errors: 'it is' should agree with plural 'shoes' -> 'they are'. 'One of the reason' should be 'one reason' or 'one of the reasons'. 'Soup' is a wrong word for 'shoes'. 'Too high' is incorrect collocation for price -> 'too expensive'. Suggestion: ensure subject-pronoun agreement, correct word choice, and collocations for describing price.