Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Work on natural grammar, concise structure and clearer cohesion. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and limit to maximum five sentences. Add one specific detail and use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., "because" or "so").

예시: I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy a new pair about once a month because I prefer good-quality shoes that last a long time. Therefore, I don't shop for shoes very often.

제안: Use present perfect or simple present consistently and correct singular/plural and article errors. Give one specific example and use a linking word like "because" or "so" for coherence. Keep answer within five sentences.

예시: I rarely buy shoes online because I often have trouble finding my size. For example, I ordered a pair last year that looked good in photos but did not fit, so now I prefer shopping in physical stores where I can try them on.

제안: Give a clear, direct answer with correct currency reference and grammar. Avoid sentence fragments and improve vocabulary (e.g., "depend on" instead of "relied on"). Provide a specific reason and an example and link sentences logically (e.g., "because" and "so").

예시: I usually spend about 1,000 to 2,000 RMB on a pair of shoes because I believe quality depends on price. For example, cheaper shoes I bought last year wore out within a few months, so I now prefer to pay more for durability.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and articles, and provide a specific reason with a linking word like "because". Make sentences concise and avoid repetition. Include one brief example to support your preference.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I commute to work by bus and walk a lot each day. For instance, comfortable sneakers help me move quickly between stops and reduce foot pain.

× Yes, I'm very like buying shoes.

✓ Yes, I really like buying shoes.

The student used 'very like' which is incorrect English collocation. Use an adverb such as 'really' or 'very much' to modify the verb 'like'. Suggestion: replace 'very like' with 'really like' or 'like ... very much'.

× I usually buy a new shoes maybe once a month because I think a good quality shoe can be wear for a long time.

✓ I usually buy a new pair of shoes maybe once a month because I think a good-quality shoe can be worn for a long time.

There are several issues: 'a new shoes' mixes singular article with plural noun — use 'a new pair of shoes' or 'new shoes' without 'a'. 'good quality' used as a compound adjective before a noun should be hyphenated as 'good-quality'. 'can be wear' needs the past participle 'worn'. Suggestions: use 'a new pair of shoes' and 'can be worn'.

× So I won't buy shoes very often.

✓ So I don't buy shoes very often.

'Won't' indicates future intention or refusal; the context describes habitual action, so simple present 'don't buy' is correct for habits. Use present tense for routines.

× I rarely bought shoes online because I think there are a risk that I can find my size or the shoes that I bought online is always not fitting me.

✓ I rarely buy shoes online because I think there is a risk that I cannot find my size, and the shoes I buy online often do not fit me.

Mixed tenses and agreement errors: 'rarely bought' incorrectly uses past for a habitual present preference — use present 'rarely buy'. 'there are a risk' should be 'there is a risk' (singular). 'that I can find my size' meaning inability should use 'cannot' or 'cannot find'. 'the shoes that I bought online is' has subject-verb agreement and tense problems — use 'the shoes I buy online often do not fit me'. Suggestions: keep present tense for habits and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× So I prefer buying shoes in physical stores.

✓ So I prefer to buy shoes in physical stores.

Both 'prefer buying' and 'prefer to buy' are possible, but 'prefer to buy' is more natural here following the previous clause. Suggestion: use 'prefer to buy' for clearer sentence flow.

× I usually spend on shoes for 1000 to 2000 because I think.

✓ I usually spend 1000 to 2000 on shoes because I think...

Word order and preposition use are wrong: 'spend on shoes for 1000 to 2000' should be 'spend 1000 to 2000 on shoes'. Also the sentence ends abruptly with 'because I think.' It needs completion, for example 'because I think quality depends on price.' Suggestion: place the amount directly after 'spend' and follow with 'on shoes'.

× The quality is relied on prices.

✓ The quality depends on the price.

'is relied on' is incorrect passive construction; use 'depends on' to express dependence. 'prices' should be singular 'price' if referring to price level. Suggestion: say 'The quality depends on the price' or 'Quality generally depends on price.'

× If you buy cheaper shoes, they might be broken faster.

✓ If you buy cheaper shoes, they may break sooner.

'might be broken faster' is awkward passive; use active voice 'they may break sooner'. 'Sooner' is more natural than 'faster' when referring to time until breaking. Suggestion: use active verb 'break' and 'sooner'.

× I prefer wearing comfortable shoes.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes.

Both forms are grammatical, but 'prefer comfortable shoes' is more natural and concise when answering preference questions. Suggestion: use 'prefer' + noun for simple preference statements.

× For me, I work a lot in my daily life that I need to take in bus for my workplace.

✓ I work a lot in my daily life and need to take the bus to get to my workplace.

The original sentence mixes clauses awkwardly: 'that I need to take in bus for my workplace' is ungrammatical. Correct structure uses coordinating conjunction 'and' to join ideas, 'take the bus' (not 'in bus'), and 'to get to my workplace' or 'to go to work'. Suggestion: use clear clause connectors and correct prepositions.

× So I need a comfortable shoes to make me walk faster.

✓ So I need comfortable shoes to help me walk more comfortably/faster.

'a comfortable shoes' mixes singular article with plural noun — use 'comfortable shoes' or 'a comfortable pair of shoes'. Also 'to make me walk faster' is odd; better is 'to help me walk more comfortably' or 'so I can walk faster'. Suggestion: correct article-number agreement and choose clearer phrasing.