Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear, relevant and well-structured with a topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, vary sentence openings and add one specific example (e.g., type of shoe or brand) to make the response more vivid. Also avoid slight redundancy ("good quality" and "last for years" convey similar ideas).

예시: I don’t buy shoes very often; usually I purchase new ones about twice a year. For example, I’ll buy a pair of durable leather sneakers from a trusted brand because they last through daily commuting and occasional hiking, so practicality is more important to me than following fashion trends.

제안: Good answer with reasons and personal preference. Improve by using clearer linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and giving a concrete online experience (site, return policy, or a specific pair). Also tighten phrasing to avoid repetition about comfort and longevity.

예시: Yes, I buy shoes online fairly often because it’s usually cheaper and there are more styles to choose from. For example, I once bought leather loafers on an outlet website at half price; the site’s easy returns and detailed size chart meant the shoes fit well and I’ve worn them almost every day since.

제안: Your response addresses the question and gives reasons, but the last clause is slightly awkward. Improve by supplying a specific price range or example (e.g., $50–$100) and using clearer linking words. Keep sentences concise and avoid filler phrases.

예시: I usually spend a moderate amount, around $50–$120 per pair, because I want decent quality without overspending. For instance, I prefer mid-range brands that last a couple of years so I can allocate extra money for travel and dining out.

제안: Solid direct answer with reasons and a buying strategy. Improve by correcting small grammar ("wore in" → "worn in"), using linking words ("therefore", "so") and adding a brief specific example of a feature you look for (e.g., cushioning, arch support).

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I’m on my feet most of the day, so comfort helps me concentrate. For example, I look for shoes with good cushioning and arch support and try them on to ensure they feel broken-in before buying.

× I typically buy shoes twice a year since I prefer investing in good quality pairs that can last for years.

✓ I typically buy shoes twice a year since I prefer investing in good-quality pairs that can last for years.

Use a hyphen with the compound adjective 'good-quality' before the noun to show they function together to modify 'pairs'. This is a punctuation/word-formation convention often treated with article/adjective rules; it improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'good-quality' or 'high-quality'.

× Yes I have and I actually like it.

✓ Yes, I have, and I actually like it.

Missing commas around the short clauses makes the sentence harder to parse. Also ensure subject agreement with context: 'it' refers to 'buying shoes online' (a gerund), which is fine in present tense. Add commas after 'Yes' and before the conjunction for clarity.

× I think buying shoes online is more cost effective because the price depends on market demand.

✓ I think buying shoes online is more cost-effective because the price depends on market demand.

Use the hyphen in the compound adjective 'cost-effective' when it precedes the noun or stands as a single adjective phrase. This improves readability and follows conventional adjective formation.

× If a pair isn't popular but I personally like it then I can get it at a reasonable price.

✓ If a pair isn't popular but I personally like it, then I can get it at a reasonable price.

Add a comma before 'then' in this conditional sentence for clarity. The verb forms are correct; the main issue is punctuation improving sentence flow. Ensure 'pair' (singular) agrees with 'isn't' and 'it'.

× And since they are comfortable and well designed I tend to wear them for a long time.

✓ And since they are comfortable and well-designed, I tend to wear them for a long time.

Hyphenate 'well-designed' when used as a compound adjective before a clause or noun. Also add a comma after the introductory subordinate clause 'And since ...' to separate it from the main clause.

× I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I try to strike a balance between style and affordability.

✓ I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I try to strike a balance between style and affordability.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no article change is needed. Keep as is. (Included to show review.)

× Typically I tend to go for middle range brands that offer decent quality without costing a fortune since I'd rather save money for traveling and eating out and quite mindful about.

✓ Typically, I tend to go for mid-range brands that offer decent quality without costing a fortune, since I'd rather save money for traveling and eating out and am quite mindful about my spending.

Problems: 'middle range' should be 'mid-range' as a compound adjective; missing commas improve flow; the clause 'and quite mindful about' is incomplete and needs a verb and object. Added 'am' and 'my spending' to complete the thought and maintain correct tense and clarity.

× I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I'm on my feet quite a lot during the day.

✓ I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I'm on my feet quite a lot during the day.

Sentence is correct in present tense and matches context; no change needed. (Included as checked.)

× If I feel comfortable and wore in my shoes, I can focus better on my work in the studies.

✓ If I feel comfortable and worn in my shoes, I can focus better on my work or my studies.

'wore' is the simple past of 'wear' and is incorrect here; the correct past participle adjective is 'worn' to describe the state of the shoes. Also 'work in the studies' is unclear—use 'work' or 'my studies'. Adjust to 'my work or my studies' for clarity and proper collocation.

× That's why I usually pay attention to the materials and the features before buying a pair.

✓ That's why I usually pay attention to the materials and features before buying a pair.

Remove the definite article 'the' before 'features' to be natural and consistent with 'materials' (no article). The preposition 'to' with 'pay attention' is correct. This makes the parallel structure clearer.