Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and gives reasons, but it is slightly wordy and has minor inaccuracies (e.g., 'Essex' seems unlikely as a shoe brand). Aim to be more concise, use one clear topic sentence, then a brief supporting detail with a linking word. Also check word choice for brand names and use natural phrasing (e.g., 'compare models' rather than 'interested in features and characteristics between').

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I run regularly and like comparing models from brands like Nike and Adidas. For example, I visit shoe shops every three or four months to try on new running shoes and see how they fit before I buy.

제안: Good clear answer with a reason and an example, but avoid awkward phrasing such as 'Exact Instagram' and singular/plural errors ('check the customer review'). Use a linking phrase to connect the reason and example and be specific about which platforms or features you use.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times because it is very convenient. For example, I often read customer reviews and look at photos on Instagram and retailer websites before deciding to purchase.

제안: Your answer gives reasoning but the figures are unclear (20,000 or ¥30,000—currency and range ambiguous). Be precise about currency and typical price, and avoid repetition ('especially'). Use a concise topic sentence then supporting detail with a linking word explaining the reason.

예시: I usually spend about ¥20,000–¥30,000 on a pair of running shoes. I don't mind paying that much because high-quality shoes provide better support and can help prevent injuries when I run.

제안: Clear preference and reason. Improve coherence by using linking words and avoid mixed ideas ('appearance and posture' is awkward). Make your comparison sharper and keep sentences concise. Mention one or two specific features you value (e.g., cushioning, arch support).

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I wear them mainly for running. Therefore, I prioritize features like cushioning and arch support over stylish designs.

× I like buying shoes very much, mainly because one of my hobbies is running and I'm very interested in features and characteristics between famous companies such as Nike, Adidas and Essex.

✓ I like buying shoes very much, mainly because one of my hobbies is running and I'm very interested in the features and characteristics of famous companies such as Nike, Adidas and Essex.

Use of preposition: 'interested in ... between' is incorrect. When describing features belonging to or associated with companies, use 'of' (features of companies). 'Between' is used to compare two or more items, but the structure 'interested in features and characteristics between companies' is awkward. Suggestion: say 'interested in the features and characteristics of [companies]' or 'interested in the differences between [companies]'.

× Therefore, I usually go to shoe shops every three or four months.

✓ Therefore, I usually go to shoe shops every three or four months.

No grammatical correction needed for subject-verb agreement: 'I usually go' is correct. Included here to indicate no change required.

× Yes, I have bought shoes online several times, mainly because it's convenient.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online several times, mainly because it is convenient.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable. Changed contraction 'it's' to 'it is' only for formality; no grammar type from the provided list strictly applies. If required to match list, this is Present tense usage (ID 6) but the original is correct.

× For example, I can check the customer review on social media platforms like Exact Instagram before purchasing, and I can think carefully about whether to buy them.

✓ For example, I can check customer reviews on social media platforms like Instagram before purchasing, and I can think carefully about whether to buy them.

Article and count noun issues: 'the customer review' implies a single specific review; better to use plural 'customer reviews' without 'the' when speaking generally. Also 'Exact Instagram' is unnatural; use simply 'Instagram' or 'the exact Instagram account' if referring to a specific account. Suggestion: use plural 'customer reviews' and drop 'the' for general statements.

× I usually spend around 20,000 or ¥30,000, especially when I buy running shoes.

✓ I usually spend around ¥20,000 or ¥30,000, especially when I buy running shoes.

Quantifier and currency notation: mixing unspecified '20,000' and '¥30,000' is inconsistent. Include the currency symbol for both amounts and use 'around' with one estimate, or 'between ¥20,000 and ¥30,000' for a range. Suggestion: 'I usually spend around ¥20,000 to ¥30,000' or 'I usually spend between ¥20,000 and ¥30,000.'

× Although this cost is not cheap, I think it's necessary, especially considering carefully about my health.

✓ Although this cost is not cheap, I think it's necessary, especially considering my health carefully.

Incorrect verb/preposition combination: 'considering carefully about my health' is unidiomatic. 'Considering' does not take 'about' after it; place 'carefully' after the object or use 'carefully considering my health.' Suggestion: 'especially considering my health carefully' or 'especially because I carefully consider my health.'

× High quality shoes can help me prevent injuries, so this investment is important in my life.

✓ High-quality shoes can help me prevent injuries, so this investment is important in my life.

Hyphenation and adjective use: 'High quality' as a compound adjective before a noun should be hyphenated: 'high-quality shoes.' The grammar itself (subject-verb agreement) is correct: 'shoes can help.' Suggestion: hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns and keep the rest of the sentence as is.

× I generally prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable shoes, mainly because my purpose of wearing shoes is for running, so I sometimes value appearance and posture.

✓ I generally prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones, mainly because my purpose for wearing shoes is running, so I sometimes value appearance and posture.

Word choice and redundancy: 'fashionable shoes' can be replaced with 'fashionable ones' to avoid repetition. 'My purpose of wearing shoes is for running' is redundant: use 'my purpose for wearing shoes is running' or simply 'because I wear shoes for running.' Suggestion: streamline the phrase to 'because I wear shoes for running.'

× But functionality and support is very important when I choose good running shoes.

✓ But functionality and support are very important when I choose good running shoes.

Subject-verb agreement: 'functionality and support' is a compound subject (plural), so the verb should be 'are' not 'is.' Suggestion: always match plural compound subjects with plural verbs.