Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và chính xác: tránh lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ “strainers” không phù hợp; nên dùng “trainers” hoặc “athletic shoes”), rút ngắn câu quá dài để không vượt quá 5 câu, và thêm liên từ hợp lý để mạch văn rõ ràng. Ngoài ra hãy cụ thể hơn về tần suất (ví dụ “every three months” thay vì “every few months”) để tăng tính cụ thể.

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes because they help me express my style and suit different activities. I usually buy new shoes every three months, especially when my old ones wear out. For example, I buy athletic trainers for exercise and formal shoes for work, depending on the season.

제안: Cải thiện sự mạch lạc và loại bỏ lỗi lặp từ: sửa cụm “for for instance” và rút gọn câu quá dài. Thêm liên từ/ cấu trúc rõ ràng khi đưa ví dụ, và chú ý chia thì nhất quán. Nên nói rõ kết quả hoặc cảm nhận sau khi mua (ví dụ: fitting, quality).

예시: Yes, I've bought shoes online several times because it's convenient to compare styles and prices. For instance, I once bought running trainers from an international retailer after reading detailed reviews and checking the size chart, and they fitted well so I didn't need to return them.

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và tính chính xác: dùng thì đúng (sử dụng “spend” thay vì “spent”), tránh viết hoa không cần thiết giữa câu và nối các câu nhỏ bằng liên từ. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về loại giày và giá sẽ giúp câu trả lời cụ thể hơn.

예시: I usually spend about $50 to $80 on a pair of shoes, depending on the type and quality. For everyday sneakers I stick to the lower end, while well-dressed or leather shoes cost more. I prefer investing a bit more in comfortable, durable brands because they last longer.

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, từ vựng và hoàn thiện câu: sửa các lỗi như “avoid them for daily use” thiếu chủ ngữ, “caused discomfort” sai dạng; hoàn thành câu cuối. Nên đưa thêm liên kết lý do và kết luận ngắn gọn. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về hoàn cảnh giúp điểm cao hơn.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I care about long-term foot health and ease of movement. For example, I wear cushioned sneakers for commuting and walking. Fashionable shoes are fine for special occasions, but I avoid wearing them daily because they often cause discomfort or pain after a few hours.

× I usually buy new shoes every few months, especially when my old ones wear out or when a new season requires different footwear, such as strainers for exercise or formal shoes for work.

✓ I usually buy new shoes every few months, especially when my old ones wear out or when a new season requires different footwear, such as trainers for exercise or formal shoes for work.

'Strainers' is a wrong word choice; the correct word is 'trainers' meaning athletic shoes. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar rule. Suggestion: use correct footwear terms and proofread for word accuracy.

× I usually spent about $50.00 to $80 on a pair of shoes depending on the type and the quality.

✓ I usually spend about $50.00 to $80 on a pair of shoes depending on the type and the quality.

The adverb 'usually' indicates a habitual action, which requires the simple present tense 'spend', not the past 'spent'. Use present simple for routines.

× For everyday sneakers I stick to the lower end, Well dressed shoes cost more.

✓ For everyday sneakers I stick to the lower end; well-dressed shoes cost more.

This sentence has punctuation and capitalization issues and two independent clauses run together. Use a semicolon or period and lowercase second clause. Also 'well-dressed shoes' is the correct adjective phrase.

× I prefer investing a bit more in comfortable, durable brands because they last longer and save money over time.

✓ I prefer to invest a bit more in comfortable, durable brands because they last longer and save money over time.

After 'prefer' when stating an action, use the infinitive 'to invest' or the gerund consistently. 'Prefer investing' is acceptable but 'prefer to invest' fits better with the surrounding simple present style.

× Personally, I prefer comfortable shoes because I attach importance to long term foot health and ease of movement.

✓ Personally, I prefer comfortable shoes because I attach importance to long-term foot health and ease of movement.

Need a hyphen in the compound adjective 'long-term' when used before a noun. This is a punctuation/word-formation issue.

× Yes, I've bought shoes online several times.

✓ Yes, I've bought shoes online several times.

Sentence is grammatically correct. Present perfect 'I've bought' is appropriate for life experience; no correction needed.

× It's very convenient because I can compare styles and prices across multiple stores quickly for for instance, and once purchased a pair of running trainers from an international retailer after reading detailed reviews and checking size charts, which saved me a trip to the mall.

✓ It's very convenient because I can quickly compare styles and prices across multiple stores; for instance, I once purchased a pair of running trainers from an international retailer after reading detailed reviews and checking size charts, which saved me a trip to the mall.

There are repeated words 'for for' and poor clause order. Move 'quickly' before the verb, add a clear 'for instance' clause, and use proper punctuation to separate ideas.

× Fashionable shoes are nice for special occasions, but avoid them for daily use since they are often caused discomfort or pain after a.

✓ Fashionable shoes are nice for special occasions, but I avoid them for daily use since they often cause discomfort or pain after a short time.

Original lacks subject for 'avoid' and uses passive 'are often caused discomfort' improperly. Add subject 'I', change to active 'cause', and complete the phrase 'after a short time' for clarity.