Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Jawabanmu perlu lebih terstruktur dan jelas. Mulailah dengan kalimat topik langsung (mis. apakah kamu suka membeli sepatu), lalu berikan alasan spesifik dan penggunaan kata sambung yang tepat. Hindari pengulangan dan perbaiki tata bahasa (mis. "more than one choices" → "more than one choice"; "every semester" bisa dijelaskan apakah tiap 4 atau 6 bulan).

예시: I don’t buy shoes very often; I usually shop for shoes once a semester, which is about every six months. I prefer this because buying less frequently lets me compare more styles and prices, so I can choose the best pair for my needs.

제안: Jawabanmu jelas tetapi penuh dengan kesalahan tata bahasa dan pengulangan. Jelaskan alasan secara teratur dengan kata sambung (because, so, therefore) dan berikan contoh spesifik (mis. pengalaman ukuran tidak cocok). Hindari frasa yang tidak perlu seperti "I don't have ever" dan perbaiki struktur kalimat.

예시: No, I haven’t bought shoes online because I prefer trying them on first. For example, sizes often vary between brands, so I worry that the shoes won’t fit properly and I would have to return them.

제안: Informasi uang yang diberikan tidak jelas dan ada penggunaan kosakata yang salah (contoh: "quiet" seharusnya "quite"). Sebutkan mata uang secara jelas (dollar, rupiah, dll.), berikan kisaran yang konsisten, dan jelaskan mengapa kamu mengeluarkan jumlah itu.

예시: I usually spend around $50 to $100 on a pair of shoes, depending on the brand and quality. I choose mid-range shoes because they are comfortable and durable without being too expensive.

제안: Jawabanmu menyampaikan preferensi tetapi kalimatnya berulang dan tidak rapi. Mulailah dengan pernyataan langsung, berikan alasan konkret (mis. kesehatan, aktivitas sehari-hari), dan gunakan kata sambung untuk menghubungkan ide. Hindari pengulangan kata seperti "my my" dan frasa yang membingungkan.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day and comfort helps prevent foot pain. For instance, I usually buy shoes with good arch support and cushioning even if they are not the latest fashion.

× I don't like buying shoes often every month, but I usually buy my shoes every semester because I think I can make more than one choices if I have more than one shoes in one semester.

✓ I don't like buying shoes often; I usually buy shoes every semester because I think I can have more choices if I have more shoes in a semester.

Kalimat menggunakan bentuk present simple tetapi beberapa frasa tidak alami: 'often every month' bertentangan (either 'often' or 'every month'); 'every semester' cocok untuk kebiasaan sehingga gunakan 'I usually buy shoes every semester'. 'Make more than one choices' salah kata dan jumlah; gunakan 'have more choices'. 'More than one shoes' harus jamak: 'more shoes'. Perbaikan: hilangkan pengulangan dan gunakan bentuk present simple yang konsisten, perbaiki jumlah kata benda dan frasa 'have choices'.

× No, I haven't because I cannot choose what the what my perfect size and on it and I cannot try.

✓ No, I haven't because I cannot choose my perfect size online and I cannot try them on.

Penggunaan present perfect 'I haven't' perlu dilengkapi ('I haven't' what? implied 'bought shoes online'). Frasa 'what the what my perfect size and on it' tidak jelas; gunakan 'choose my perfect size online'. 'Try' membutuhkan objek atau particle 'on' untuk sepatu: 'try them on'. Juga gunakan modal 'cannot' dengan infinitive tanpa 'to' sebelum 'try'.

× So I don't have ever bought shoes online and I don't trust online shop as much as the offline market.

✓ So I have never bought shoes online and I don't trust online shops as much as offline markets.

Urutan kata untuk present perfect negatif: 'have never bought' bukan 'don't have ever bought'. 'Don't' tidak dipasangkan dengan present perfect. 'Online shop' harus jamak atau 'online shopping' untuk umum; konsistenkan bentuk jamak 'online shops' dan 'offline markets'.

× Maybe about 5 or 10, five until $10. Yeah, it's like a, it's a quiet, it's a quiet cheap than others.

✓ Maybe about five or ten dollars, up to $10. Yeah, it's quite cheap compared to others.

Gunakan kata lengkap untuk angka dalam kalimat ('five or ten dollars') dan tambahkan satuan '$'. 'Five until $10' tidak benar; gunakan 'up to $10'. 'It's a quiet' salah kata dan ejaan; harus 'quite'. 'Cheap than others' memerlukan perbandingan 'cheaper than others' atau 'cheap compared to others'; di sini 'quite cheap compared to others' lebih alami.

× Absolutely comfortable shoes because I don't have a look I don't need. I don't need the fashionable shoes for my legs that I have to choose the comfortable for myself.

✓ Absolutely comfortable shoes, because I don't care about looks. I don't need fashionable shoes; I choose comfort for myself.

Konstruksi asli tidak jelas: 'I don't have a look I don't need' salah struktur dan makna. 'I don't care about looks' atau 'I don't care about how I look' lebih alami. 'I don't need the fashionable shoes for my legs' tidak tepat—sepatu untuk kaki tapi frasa tidak perlu; ringkas menjadi 'I don't need fashionable shoes; I choose comfort'. Perbaiki struktur kalimat agar singkat dan jelas.

× So I usually spend my my money for a for it and it works.

✓ So I usually spend my money on them, and it works for me.

Kata 'my my' dan 'for a for it' adalah pengulangan dan salah preposisi. Gunakan 'spend money on something'. Ganti objek dengan 'them' mengacu pada sepatu. Tambahkan 'for me' untuk menyampaikan bahwa itu cocok untuk siswa.