Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tense, count nouns and use clearer vocabulary (e.g., “safety shoes” not “seat recession shoe”).

예시: I don't buy shoes very often. I usually buy one or two pairs a year because I prefer high-quality shoes. However, I also buy about two or three pairs of safety shoes each year for work, since they wear out faster.

제안: Use present simple for habitual actions and add a brief reason with a linking word. Keep it natural and avoid repetition (e.g., "buy online" vs "bought online").

예시: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it's more convenient. Since I work long hours, shopping online saves me time and I can compare styles and prices quickly.

제안: Be precise with numbers and correct comparative phrasing. Use a clear sentence that states the price range and a short reason introduced by a linking word (e.g., “because” or “so”). Avoid repetition and contradictory phrases.

예시: I usually spend about $100 to $150 on a pair of shoes because I prioritise good quality over low price. Therefore I prefer to invest a bit more in shoes that last longer.

제안: Answer directly and add a specific reason or example with a linking word. Avoid repeating the same phrase; instead, give a brief personal detail to support your preference.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I walk a lot during the day. For example, I choose shoes with good cushioning and arch support so my feet don't get tired.

× Not really, I prefer the quality shoes but rather than quantity so I usually just bought one or two pair in a year.

✓ Not really, I prefer quality over quantity, so I usually buy just one or two pairs a year.

The sentence misuses quantifiers and articles: 'the quality shoes' should be 'quality' as an uncountable concept and 'rather than quantity' should be 'prefer quality over quantity.' Tense and number: 'bought' is past but context is habitual, so use present 'buy.' 'One or two pair' needs plural 'pairs.' Suggestion: use 'prefer X over Y' for comparisons, use present simple for habits, and match plural nouns with numbers. (Grammar problem type ID:14)

× But from at work I need to wear the seat recession shoe so I usually need to get like 2 to three pair of that kind of shoes at work.

✓ Because of work I need to wear safety-recession shoes, so I usually have to get two or three pairs of that kind of shoe for work.

'But from at work' is incorrect; use 'Because of work' or 'At work.' 'Seat recession shoe' is unclear; interpreted as 'safety-recession' or a specific work shoe—clarify noun. Use 'have to' for obligation and 'two or three pairs' for correct number and plural. 'That kind of shoe' can use singular 'shoe' after 'kind of.' Use no filler 'like.' (Grammar problem type ID:11)

× I usually bought shoes online because it's more convenient for me as I am busy working and I don't have enough time to shop a lot.

✓ I usually buy shoes online because it's more convenient for me since I am busy working and don't have enough time to shop.

The adverb 'usually' indicates a habitual action, so use present simple 'buy' instead of past 'bought.' 'As' can be 'since' for reason; remove redundant 'a lot.' Keep contractions consistent. (Grammar problem type ID:5)

× I usually spend 100 to 150 all day to buy a pair of shoes because quality is important than quality.

✓ I usually spend 100 to 150 to buy a pair of shoes because quality is more important than price.

The phrase 'all day' is unnecessary and odd here; remove it. '100 to 150' should be clarified with currency but left as numbers. Comparison was incorrect: 'quality is important than quality' is nonsensical; likely intended 'quality is more important than price.' Use 'more important than' for comparisons. (Grammar problem type ID:14)

× So yeah, about around hundred 150.

✓ So yeah, about one hundred to one hundred fifty.

This fragment is ungrammatical and redundant: 'about around' is repetitive; use either 'about' or 'around.' Numbers need words or correct numeric range format: 'one hundred to one hundred fifty' or '100 to 150.' Include an article 'one' before 'hundred' when written in words. (Grammar problem type ID:26)

× I personally prefer comfortable shoes. Since I'm getting older I'm not into fashion anymore so for me I prefer comfortable shoes.

✓ I personally prefer comfortable shoes. Since I'm getting older, I'm not into fashion anymore, so I prefer comfort over fashion.

Repetition of the same idea is redundant; combine for clarity. Commas needed after introductory clause. 'Prefer comfortable shoes' repeated—suggest rephrasing second clause to 'prefer comfort over fashion.' Tense 'I'm getting older' is fine. (Grammar problem type ID:6)