Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to be more concise and correct mistakes such as 'glass' instead of 'class'. Use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, there were many rules at my school that students had to follow, such as being disciplined in class and maintaining silence during lessons.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains repetition and grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically.

예시: I believe that having rules helps students stay focused and disciplined, both mentally and physically, which benefits their learning environment.

제안: Your answer shows positive feelings but is somewhat repetitive and lacks coherence. Try to combine sentences and use linking words to make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: I have been fortunate to have many dedicated teachers who were excellent, supportive, calm, and always willing to help me.

제안: Your answer presents a clear opinion but could be expressed more naturally and with better grammar. Use linking words to explain your reasoning clearly.

예시: In my opinion, having too few rules can lead to chaos, while too many rules can make school feel oppressive. Therefore, a balance between the two is necessary.

× Yes, there were many rules and regulation for the students in the school because in my time there were various rules and regulations that need to be followed by us such as being disciplined in the glass, making silence in the class.

✓ Yes, there were many rules and regulations for the students in the school because in my time there were various rules and regulations that needed to be followed by us such as being disciplined in the class, making silence in the class.

The phrase 'rules and regulation' is incorrect because 'regulation' should be plural to match 'rules'. Also, 'glass' is a typo and should be 'class'. Additionally, 'need' should be in past tense 'needed' to match the past context. Plural forms must be consistent when referring to multiple items.

× Yes, there were many rules and regulation for the students in the school because in my time there were various rules and regulations that need to be followed by us such as being disciplined in the glass, making silence in the class.

✓ Yes, there were many rules and regulations for the students in the school because in my time there were various rules and regulations that needed to be followed by us such as being disciplined in the class, maintaining silence in the class.

The phrase 'making silence in the class' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'maintaining silence in the class' or 'being silent in the class'. Also, 'in the glass' is a typo and should be 'in the class'. Prepositions and collocations must be used correctly for clarity.

× I believe that students need to be focused and being in a discipline while while they are in a certain place because rules shows the discipline in inner and outer mind and a body.

✓ I believe that students need to be focused and disciplined while they are in a certain place because rules show discipline in the inner and outer mind and body.

The phrase 'being in a discipline' is incorrect; 'disciplined' is the correct adjective. Also, 'rules shows' should be 'rules show' to agree with plural subject. The modal verb 'need to be' is correct but should be followed by adjectives or participles, not 'being in a discipline'.

× I believe that students need to be focused and being in a discipline while while they are in a certain place because rules shows the discipline in inner and outer mind and a body.

✓ I believe that students need to be focused and disciplined while they are in a certain place because rules show discipline in the inner and outer mind and body.

The verb 'shows' is incorrect because the subject 'rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'show'. Subject-verb agreement is essential for grammatical correctness.

× I admire all my teachers. I'm so grateful to them. Not only one. All of my teachers were excellent and diligent. They were so supportive, they were so delighted. They were so calm and helpful towards me.

✓ I admire all my teachers. I'm so grateful to them, not just one. All of my teachers were excellent and diligent. They were so supportive, they were so kind. They were so calm and helpful towards me.

The phrase 'Not only one' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'not just one' to express the intended meaning. Also, 'delighted' is not appropriate to describe teachers' attitude towards the student; 'kind' or 'friendly' is better. Plural forms and adjective usage must be appropriate.

× In my opinion, fewer rules means a disaster in the school and more rules means the silence and a heavy heart to go to school. So there need to be balanced between more and fewer.

✓ In my opinion, fewer rules mean a disaster in the school and more rules mean silence and a heavy heart to go to school. So there needs to be a balance between more and fewer rules.

The verbs 'means' should be 'mean' to agree with plural subjects 'fewer rules' and 'more rules'. Also, 'there need to be balanced' is incorrect; it should be 'there needs to be a balance'. The quantifiers 'more' and 'fewer' should be followed by the noun 'rules' for clarity.