Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ваш ответ естественный, но немного длинный и содержит повторения. Старайтесь избегать излишних слов и использовать более точные выражения. Также добавьте связующие слова для логичности.

예시: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must be polite and respectful, and running or screaming is not allowed. I believe these rules help maintain a good learning environment.

제안: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность и точность выражений. Используйте связующие слова и избегайте повторов, чтобы сделать речь более плавной.

예시: I believe having certain rules in the classroom is essential because they create order. Moreover, it's important to explain the reasons behind these rules so students understand their value.

제안: Ответ содержит интересные идеи, но выражен не очень естественно и немного сбивчиво. Старайтесь использовать более простые и точные фразы, а также избегать двусмысленностей.

예시: Yes, I have met some very dedicated teachers. They are so passionate about their subjects that it seems like they have no life outside of work. This can be both inspiring and a bit sad.

제안: Ответ понятен, но можно улучшить структуру и связность. Используйте связующие слова и уточните свои мысли для большей ясности.

예시: I prefer having fewer rules at school to reduce pressure and stress on students. However, I think it's important that students' behavior is guided with understanding.

제안: Ответ сложен для понимания из-за грамматических ошибок и нечеткой структуры. Старайтесь строить предложения проще и избегать повторов.

예시: Yes, I have had strict teachers. Many teachers in my country experience burnout, which sometimes leads them to express negative feelings towards students.

제안: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность и точность выражений. Используйте более подходящие слова и избегайте тавтологии.

예시: I would not like to work in a school without rules because it could lead to chaos and unpredictable behavior, which might cause accidents. Although having many rules can be challenging, I prefer that environment.

× I'm pretty sure it's crucial not only give rules, but also explain why we should follow.

✓ I'm pretty sure it's crucial not only to give rules, but also to explain why we should follow them.

The verb 'give' and 'explain' after 'not only' require the infinitive form 'to give' and 'to explain' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'follow' needs an object, so 'them' is added to clarify what should be followed.

× They're really burning at their work because they're so dedicated to their work that sometimes you can't even imagine that they have other life except their subject.

✓ They're really burning with their work because they're so dedicated to their work that sometimes you can't even imagine that they have another life except their subject.

The phrase 'burning at their work' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'with' as in 'burning with enthusiasm'. Also, 'other life' should be 'another life' to correctly refer to an additional life.

× In my opinion, there should be limited amount of rules in order to not give extra pressure and cause stress for students.

✓ In my opinion, there should be a limited number of rules in order not to give extra pressure and cause stress for students.

The phrase 'limited amount of rules' is incorrect because 'rules' are countable; therefore, 'limited number of rules' is correct. Also, 'in order to not give' is better expressed as 'in order not to give'.

× But also I believe that their behavior should be followed by understanding.

✓ But also I believe that their behavior should be guided by understanding.

The phrase 'behavior should be followed by understanding' is awkward and unclear. 'Guided by understanding' is a better collocation to express that behavior should be managed with understanding.

× Unfortunately, there's nothing new under the sun in our country about having a burnout and a lot of teachers unfortunately suffer from each year after year which cause a lot of accidents because they ex express their negative feelings on students.

✓ Unfortunately, there's nothing new under the sun in our country about burnout, and a lot of teachers unfortunately suffer from it year after year, which causes a lot of accidents because they express their negative feelings towards students.

The phrase 'having a burnout' should be 'burnout' as a noun. 'Suffer from each year after year' is better as 'suffer from it year after year'. 'Cause' should be 'causes' to agree with singular 'which'. 'Ex express' is a typo and should be 'express'. The preposition 'on' should be 'towards' when referring to feelings directed at someone.

× I would prefer not to work in such school because this type of environment can cause any chaotic and unpredictable behaviour, which in turn might lead to some accidents.

✓ I would prefer not to work in such a school because this type of environment can cause chaotic and unpredictable behaviour, which in turn might lead to some accidents.

The word 'any' is unnecessary and incorrect before 'chaotic and unpredictable behaviour' in this context. Also, 'such school' should be 'such a school' because 'school' is a countable noun.