Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to start directly with a topic sentence, avoid unnecessary questions, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, correct grammar such as 'Is there are' to 'There are'.

예시: There are several rules for students at my school. For instance, they must arrive on time; if they come after the bell, they are not allowed inside. Additionally, students are required to wear the proper uniform and are prohibited from bringing electronic devices like mobile phones or smartwatches.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and has incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' properly, and complete your thoughts. Avoid vague phrases and be more specific.

예시: Yes, I believe students would benefit from more rules because school is a crucial time for personal development. Learning discipline during these years helps students maintain good habits throughout their lives. Moreover, rules not only control behaviour but also help improve students personally.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and grammatically correct. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, use more varied vocabulary to describe the teacher's qualities.

예시: Yes, I have had many dedicated teachers, but I especially remember my 10th-grade social science teacher. His punctuality and commitment inspired us greatly, and we all admired him. He was highly respected by everyone at school.

제안: Your answer conveys your opinion but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use clear topic sentences and linking words like 'because' to explain your reasons. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

예시: I prefer fewer rules at school, but they should be effective in guiding children on the right path. I believe rules are essential because they ensure proper coordination, which is necessary for a good learning environment.

제안: Your answer is meaningful but could be more fluent and grammatically correct. Use linking words like 'although' and 'however' to contrast ideas, and avoid awkward phrases like 'it's the best that I had the teacher'.

예시: Yes, I had a very strict teacher in 12th grade. Although I felt upset at the time, I now appreciate him because he taught me dedication, commitment, and how to manage both studies and extracurricular activities effectively.

제안: Your answer has good points but contains repetition and grammatical errors. Avoid repeating phrases like 'work in a work' and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically.

예시: No, I would not like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because I believe rules help children develop clear thinking and a proper way of living. Without rules, it is difficult to maintain dedication and commitment in life.

× Is there are quite a lot of rules for students at my school?

✓ There are quite a lot of rules for students at my school.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'Is there are' which is ungrammatical. The correct form is 'There are' to indicate the existence of multiple rules. 'There is' is used for singular, 'There are' for plural. Here, 'rules' is plural, so 'There are' is appropriate.

× Like they should be coming in time.

✓ Like they should come on time.

The phrase 'should be coming' is incorrect here because 'should' is a modal verb followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. The correct structure is 'should come'. Also, 'on time' is the correct prepositional phrase for punctuality.

× If they are coming post school bell, they'll not be allowed inside.

✓ If they come after the school bell, they will not be allowed inside.

After 'if', the simple present tense is used to talk about future conditions, so 'are coming' should be 'come'. Also, 'post school bell' is better expressed as 'after the school bell' for clarity and correctness.

× They should be wearing proper uniform.

✓ They should wear proper uniforms.

After modal verbs like 'should', the base form of the verb is used, so 'be wearing' should be 'wear'. Also, 'uniform' is countable and usually plural when referring to all students, so 'uniforms' is appropriate.

× They should not bring any electronic devices like mobile phones or smartwatches to the school.

✓ They should not bring any electronic devices like mobile phones or smartwatches to school.

The phrase 'to the school' is less common here; 'to school' is the standard expression when referring to attending or going to school in general.

× I also believe rules are not that can control children but also the ones that can improve them personally and.

✓ I also believe rules are not only those that can control children but also ones that can improve them personally.

The original sentence is incomplete and incorrectly structured. 'Are not that can control' is ungrammatical; it should be 'are not only those that can control'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly and needs completion for clarity.

× who is such a dedicated and we always got inspired by his punctual behavior.

✓ who was such a dedicated teacher and we were always inspired by his punctual behavior.

The relative clause refers to a past teacher, so past tense 'was' is appropriate. Also, 'we always got inspired' is better expressed as 'we were always inspired' to indicate passive voice in past tense.

× He was respected among everyone in the school.

✓ He was respected by everyone in the school.

The phrase 'respected among everyone' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'by' to indicate who respects him.

× I don't want more rules, but fewer rules that can shape children in the right path is essential.

✓ I don't want more rules, but fewer rules that can shape children on the right path are essential.

The subject 'fewer rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, the correct preposition is 'on the right path'.

× Without rules there will not be a proper coordination and that will not result in good school.

✓ Without rules, there will not be proper coordination and that will not result in a good school.

'Coordination' is uncountable, so 'a proper coordination' is incorrect; it should be 'proper coordination'. Also, 'a good school' is correct when referring to the institution.

× During that time, I always felt bad about it, but when I think about it now, it's the best that I had the teacher because from him I learned a lot of dedication, commitment, and how to be proper in studies and other extracurricular activities as well.

✓ During that time, I always felt bad about it, but when I think about it now, it was the best that I had that teacher because from him I learned a lot about dedication, commitment, and how to be proper in studies and other extracurricular activities as well.

The phrase 'it's the best that I had the teacher' is ungrammatical; it should be 'it was the best that I had that teacher'. Also, 'learned a lot of dedication' should be 'learned a lot about dedication'.

× No, I wouldn't like to work in a work as a teacher in a school rule free school because I personally believe rules are something that can provide children with clear thinking and a proper way of living life.

✓ No, I wouldn't like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because I personally believe rules are something that can provide children with clear thinking and a proper way of living life.

The phrase 'work in a work as a teacher' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'work as a teacher'. Also, 'school rule free school' is repetitive; 'rule-free school' is correct.

× Without rules you cannot just live a life that is not dedicated and committed towards doing.

✓ Without rules, you cannot live a life that is dedicated and committed to doing things properly.

The original sentence is confusing and incomplete. 'Cannot just live a life that is not dedicated and committed towards doing' is unclear. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects prepositions.