Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami serta singkat. Hindari kesalahan seperti 'are prohibit' dan 'prohibit to wearing'. Gunakan kalimat yang jelas dan efektif.

예시: Yes, there are many rules at my school. For instance, students are not allowed to wear nail art or makeup, and we must wear the school uniform jacket instead of our own jackets.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan hindari pengulangan kata.

예시: I think it depends. Too many rules can be uncomfortable because students might feel they cannot express themselves. We know right from wrong, so excessive rules can make us feel less human.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan alami. Jelaskan contoh dengan lebih spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran jawaban.

예시: Yes, I have a dedicated teacher named Mr. Allen. He is very strict because he has many responsibilities. For example, we must ask permission before going to the toilet, and if the pass is not available, we cannot go.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur. Jelaskan alasan dengan contoh yang relevan dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

예시: I prefer more rules at school because without them, things can become chaotic. Freedom without limits can lead to problems like bullying and stealing. Rules help people understand consequences and behave responsibly.

제안: Jawaban sudah cukup baik, namun bisa lebih singkat dan fokus pada poin utama. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan hindari pengulangan.

예시: Yes, my teacher Mr. Allen was very strict. He required us to ask permission before leaving the class, but his discipline helped us focus and improve our study habits, which I appreciated.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan alami. Jelaskan alasan dengan lebih spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran jawaban.

예시: No, I would not like to work in a school without rules. It would be difficult to teach because students might do whatever they want, which can cause problems and make the environment chaotic.

× Yes, there's a lot of rules for students at my school.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of rules for students at my school.

The phrase 'there's' is a contraction of 'there is', which is singular. However, 'a lot of rules' is plural, so the correct form is 'there are'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue involving singular and plural forms.

× we as students are prohibit to use nail arts or make up in our school

✓ we as students are prohibited from using nail art or makeup in our school

The verb 'prohibit' should be used in the passive form 'are prohibited' followed by 'from' and the gerund form of the verb. Also, 'nail arts' should be 'nail art' and 'make up' should be 'makeup' as a noun.

× and also we prohibit to wearing our own jacket.

✓ and also we are prohibited from wearing our own jackets.

Similar to the previous sentence, 'prohibit' should be in passive form 'are prohibited' followed by 'from' and the gerund 'wearing'. Also, 'jacket' should be plural 'jackets' to match the context.

× We have to wear the uniform jacket that the school have given to us.

✓ We have to wear the uniform jacket that the school has given to us.

The subject 'school' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue.

× For me it's depends.

✓ For me, it depends.

The verb 'depends' does not require 'it's' before it. The correct form is 'it depends'. 'It's' means 'it is', which is incorrect here.

× if it's too much rules, it could be also very awkward for us as students,

✓ if there are too many rules, it could also be very awkward for us as students,

'Rules' is plural, so 'too much' should be 'too many'. Also, 'it's' is incorrect here; 'there are' is appropriate for plural nouns.

× If it's too much rule, it makes us not like a human.

✓ If there are too many rules, it makes us feel less human.

Again, 'rule' should be plural 'rules' with 'too many' instead of 'too much'. Also, 'it makes us not like a human' is awkward; 'makes us feel less human' is clearer.

× His name is Mr. Allen. He has so many roles in his classes and I don't really like him because of that because he's too strict for it.

✓ His name is Mr. Allen. He has so many roles in his classes and I don't really like him because of that because he's too strict about it.

The phrase 'too strict for it' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'about' when referring to being strict regarding something.

× For example, if we want to go to the toilet, we have to use the past toilet.

✓ For example, if we want to go to the toilet, we have to use the pass toilet.

The word 'past' is incorrect here; the correct term is 'pass toilet' or 'pass' as a noun meaning permission. However, 'pass toilet' is uncommon; better phrasing might be 'we have to use a toilet pass'.

× If the pastel is isn't there, we cannot go to the toilet.

✓ If the pass isn't there, we cannot go to the toilet.

'Pastel' is a misspelling of 'pass'. Also, 'is isn't' is incorrect; it should be 'isn't'.

× I prefer to have more rules at school because without rules people can very, very messy.

✓ I prefer to have more rules at school because without rules people can be very, very messy.

The verb 'can' should be followed by the base form of the verb 'be' to form 'can be'. The original sentence is missing 'be'.

× It's called freedom and freedom can let into a dangerous things, for example, bullying and then stealing, which rules we know the consequence and people aware about that.

✓ It's called freedom and freedom can lead to dangerous things, for example, bullying and stealing, with rules we know the consequences and people are aware of that.

'Let into' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'lead to'. 'A dangerous things' is incorrect; 'dangerous things' is plural without 'a'. Also, 'which rules we know the consequence' is awkward; 'with rules we know the consequences' is better. 'People aware about that' should be 'people are aware of that'.

× Although he was quite strict, like requiring us to ask permission before going to the toilet, he was very committed to maintaining discipline and helping us focus in his class.

✓ Although he was quite strict, like requiring us to ask permission before going to the toilet, he was very committed to maintaining discipline and helping us focus in his class.

No correction needed here as the preposition 'in his class' is acceptable, though 'focus during his class' might be more natural.

× No, I wouldn't like to work as a teacher, especially in a rural free school.

✓ No, I wouldn't like to work as a teacher, especially in a rule-free school.

The phrase 'rural free school' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'rule-free school' meaning a school without rules.

× Why? It's going to be very annoying because me myself, I don't like to teach someone, especially in rivalry school, which everybody has the freedom to do anything.

✓ Why? It's going to be very annoying because I myself don't like to teach someone, especially in a rule-free school, where everybody has the freedom to do anything.

'Me myself' is incorrect; the correct reflexive pronoun is 'I myself'. 'Rivalry school' is incorrect; it should be 'rule-free school'. Also, 'which' should be 'where' when referring to a place.