Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but try to reduce the use of filler words like 'uh' and 'also can, uh'. This will make your speech sound more natural and fluent. Additionally, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly, for example, use 'for instance' instead of 'for example' and 'therefore' to show result.

예시: Actually, I am no longer a student, but from my experience, there were many strict regulations at school. For instance, we had to wear uniforms and punctuality was emphasized. Therefore, these rules helped create a focused learning environment and reduced distractions during classes.

제안: Your answer addresses the question well, but the frequent use of fillers like 'umm' and 'uh' interrupts the flow. Try to avoid these to improve fluency. Also, use linking words such as 'however' or 'on the other hand' to contrast ideas clearly.

예시: I believe students benefit most when there is a balanced set of rules. However, if the rules are very strict, they can cause stress and anxiety and negatively affect students' motivation and performance. So, with flexibility, we can create a happy and healthy school environment for students.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains many filler words like 'uh' which affect naturalness. Try to speak more smoothly and use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas. Also, avoid repeating 'uh' and try to be more concise.

예시: Yes, I have. When I was in high school, I had a biology teacher who was extremely dedicated and passionate about her subject. She always prepared her lessons in a very structured and enjoyable way, so all the students loved her.

제안: Your answer is well-structured and uses linking words effectively. However, try to avoid filler words like 'uh' to improve fluency. Also, you can add a concluding sentence to summarize your opinion clearly.

예시: I prefer having a moderate number of rules at school. On the one hand, too many strict regulations can cause anxiety and stress among students. On the other hand, if there are no rules at all, the school environment might become undisciplined, which is not good for learning. Therefore, a balanced approach is best.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains many filler words which reduce naturalness. Try to avoid fillers and use more precise vocabulary. Also, you can add a linking word like 'because' to explain why the environment was stressful.

예시: Yes, I have. I remember my first primary school teacher was extremely strict because she used to punish us physically. As a result, the environment of her classes was very stressful for all of us.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has many filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' which affect fluency and naturalness. Try to speak more confidently and clearly. Also, avoid short fragmented sentences and use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to connect ideas logically.

예시: To be honest, I wouldn't like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because such undisciplined environments can negatively affect students' focus on lessons and their behavior during classes. Therefore, it is not my preferred choice.

× I think these rules are important because they can create a focused learning environment and uh, also can, uh, reduce the distractions through the classes.

✓ I think these rules are important because they can create a focused learning environment and also can reduce distractions during the classes.

The preposition 'through' is incorrectly used here; the correct preposition to indicate something happening within the duration of classes is 'during'. Using 'during' properly conveys that distractions occur in the time span of the classes.

× So with flexibility, we can uh, create a happy and healthy school, uh, for students.

✓ So with flexibility, we can create a happy and healthy school environment for students.

The phrase 'a happy and healthy school' is incomplete; adding 'environment' clarifies the meaning. Also, the preposition 'for' is correct here, but the sentence benefits from clearer noun usage to improve clarity.

× she always prepared, uh, her lessons, uh, very structured and enjoyable

✓ she always prepared her lessons to be very structured and enjoyable

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'structured' as an adjective directly after 'prepared' without a linking verb or infinitive. The correction uses 'to be' to properly link the verb 'prepared' with the adjectives describing the lessons.

× I remember my first primary school teacher was extremely strict. Uh, she used to punish, uh, us physically and uh, I think uh, the environment of her classes was very stressful for all of us.

✓ I remember my first primary school teacher was extremely strict. She used to punish us physically, and I think the environment in her classes was very stressful for all of us.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used with 'environment'; the correct preposition is 'in' to indicate the environment within the classes.

× in such schools, uh, undisciplined environments can, umm, negatively affect the students, umm, focusing on lessons and their behaviors, umm, during the classes.

✓ In such schools, undisciplined environments can negatively affect students' focus on lessons and their behavior during classes.

The phrase 'focusing on lessons and their behaviors' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'students' focus on lessons and their behavior' to correctly express the intended meaning. Also, 'during the classes' is better as 'during classes' for natural usage.