Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and clear. Avoid redundancy such as "I don't go to school anymore, but in my student life". Also, clarify what "2 ponies" means (likely two ponytails) and explain why it was unusual. Use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: When I was in school, there were strict rules that everyone had to follow. For example, all the girls were required to wear their hair in two ponytails, which was quite unusual. These rules aimed to promote discipline among students.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition like "and to and to" and by adding linking words for better flow. Also, provide a specific example or reason to support your opinion.

예시: It depends on the type of rules. On one hand, some rules help maintain discipline and teach students about uniformity. However, on the other hand, students should have some freedom to express themselves and develop independence.

제안: Avoid filler words like "UMM" and correct grammar mistakes such as "even more deeper" (should be "deeper" or "even more deeply"). Also, try to be more specific about how the teacher helped you and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I was fortunate to have a dedicated chemistry teacher who explained concepts clearly. Because of his effective teaching methods, I improved my grades and gained a deeper understanding of the subject.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and unclear at the end. Avoid vague phrases like "force in my institution". Make sure to finish your sentences and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Be specific about why fewer rules are better.

예시: Based on my experience, I prefer fewer rules at school. While order and discipline are important, allowing students to make their own choices helps them develop independence and confidence.

제안: Avoid filler words like "Umm" and complete your sentences. Explain clearly how the strictness affected you and other students. Use linking words to balance positive and negative effects.

예시: Yes, I had a strict biology teacher. Although her strictness improved my grades, it also made many students feel afraid, which affected the classroom atmosphere negatively.

제안: There is a typo "rural free school" instead of "rule-free school". Also, your answer is incomplete. Avoid repeating phrases like "they help children, they guide children on" without finishing the thought. Provide clear reasons and complete sentences.

예시: No, I would not like to work in a rule-free school because rules are essential for maintaining order and discipline. They guide students to behave properly and create a positive learning environment.

× all the girls had to wear 2 ponies only

✓ all the girls had to wear 2 ponytails only

The word 'ponies' is incorrect here; the correct term for the hairstyle is 'ponytails'. This is a singular/plural vocabulary issue, not just grammar. Use 'ponytails' to refer to the hairstyle worn by girls.

× and to and to teach students about uniformity

✓ and to teach students about uniformity

The phrase 'and to and to' is a repetition error. Only one 'and to' is needed to connect the ideas properly. This is an incorrect conjunction usage causing redundancy.

× he was really good at teaching UMM for

✓ he was really good at teaching me

The phrase 'teaching UMM for' is incorrect and unclear. It seems to be a mishearing or typo. The correct phrase is 'teaching me'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and pronouns leading to confusion.

× understand the subject even more deeper

✓ understand the subject even more deeply

The phrase 'more deeper' is incorrect because 'deeper' is already a comparative adjective. Also, 'understand' should be modified by an adverb, so 'more deeply' is correct. This is an incorrect use of adjectives and adverbs.

× This helps the.

✓ This helps the students.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'This helps the.' It needs an object to complete the meaning. This is a sentence structure error causing the sentence to be incomplete.

× but it also created a sense of fear among the students and.

✓ but it also created a sense of fear among the students.

The sentence ends with 'and' without completing the thought, making it incomplete. This is a sentence structure error; the sentence should end properly or continue with another clause.

× in a rural free school ever

✓ in a rule-free school ever

The phrase 'rural free school' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'rule-free school'. This is an incorrect use of adjectives causing confusion in meaning.