Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and some awkward phrasing. To improve, try to use clearer sentence structures and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, there are several rules for students at my school. For example, students are not allowed to bring their cell phones to class. This rule helps them concentrate better on their lessons and allows teachers to manage the class more effectively.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and contains repetition. To improve, organize your points logically using linking words and avoid repeating phrases. Also, use correct verb forms and prepositions.

예시: Yes, I believe students benefit from having more rules because they learn to be organized and disciplined. Moreover, rules discourage them from breaking laws, which helps them focus better on their studies and improve academically.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has several grammatical mistakes and awkward expressions. To improve, use correct verb tenses and avoid filler words. Also, provide clearer supporting details with linking words.

예시: Yes, when I was in high school, I had a math teacher who was very dedicated. She taught us complex math formulas in depth, and her teaching left a strong impression on me because she was very helpful.

제안: Your answer conveys your opinion but includes filler words and some grammatical errors. To improve, avoid fillers, use proper sentence structures, and connect your ideas with linking words for coherence.

예시: I prefer having more rules at school because they help students stay organized and disciplined. Additionally, rules teach students to follow the school's laws and regulations, which encourages good manners.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. To improve, use correct verb tenses, avoid repeating phrases, and organize your answer clearly with linking words.

예시: Yes, I remember having a strict teacher in elementary school who gave us a quiz on the first day of class. I was very sad because I failed that quiz, and it remains one of my worst school memories.

제안: Your answer presents a clear opinion but has grammatical mistakes and some repetition. To improve, use concise sentences, correct grammar, and linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: In my opinion, working as a teacher in a rule-free school would be very challenging. Without any rules or regulations, managing and controlling students in the classroom would be difficult.

× One of them is could be, uh, forbidden, bring their cell phones to their class.

✓ One of them could be forbidding students to bring their cell phones to class.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'could be, uh, forbidden, bring' which is not a proper modal verb construction. The correct form is 'could be forbidding' or 'could be to forbid'. Also, 'to their class' is better as 'to class' for natural English usage.

× And I think it's a good one because they could concentrate on the lessons and on their studies and it's good for managing their teacher.

✓ And I think it's a good one because they can concentrate on the lessons and their studies, and it's good for managing their teachers.

'Could' suggests possibility but here 'can' is more appropriate to express ability. Also, 'managing their teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match the plural subject 'students'.

× I think it's beneficial for students because they learned how to be organized and learned how to obey rules and it it deters them to commit some breaking laws and I think it helps them to focus on their studies and it could help them to improve.

✓ I think it's beneficial for students because they learn how to be organized and how to obey rules, and it deters them from breaking laws. I think it helps them focus on their studies and could help them improve.

The sentence mixes past tense 'learned' with present tense context; 'learn' is better here. 'Deters them to commit some breaking laws' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'deters them from breaking laws'. Also, 'it it' is a repetition error.

× Yes, whenever I was at high school, I had a mathematic teacher and she was really did really dedicated and try to taught us, uh, deeply mathematics formulas and she, she was really, uh, stay in my mind and really helpful.

✓ Yes, when I was in high school, I had a math teacher who was really dedicated and tried to teach us mathematics formulas deeply. She really stayed in my mind and was very helpful.

'Was really did really dedicated' is incorrect; 'was really dedicated' or 'did really dedicate herself' is correct. 'Try to taught' mixes present and past; correct is 'tried to teach'. 'Stay in my mind' should be past tense 'stayed in my mind'.

× I prefer more UH rules at schools because it could organize, it could help students to be well organized and disciplined, and it could help them to learn how obey the laws and regulations of the school.

✓ I prefer more rules at school because they can help students be well organized and disciplined, and help them learn how to obey the laws and regulations of the school.

'Rules at schools' is less natural than 'rules at school'. 'It could organize' is unclear; 'they can help' refers to 'rules' plural. 'Help them to learn how obey' needs 'to obey'.

× Yes, I could remember when I was at elementary school, I had a a strict teacher that she take a quiz from us at first class and I could remember.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was in elementary school, I had a strict teacher who gave us a quiz in the first class, and I remember it well.

'Could remember' is awkward; 'remember' is better. 'That she take a quiz from us' is incorrect; correct is 'who gave us a quiz'. 'At first class' should be 'in the first class'.

× I was very sad because I couldn't pass that quiz and it was the worst memory of my school time.

✓ I was very sad because I couldn't pass that quiz, and it was the worst memory of my school time.

This sentence is grammatically correct; only a comma is added for clarity.

× In my opinion, working as a teacher in a rule free school, it could be very demanding job because controlling and managing a students in a class could be very difficult because they have no rule to obey and there there there is not any regulation and it's really difficult.

✓ In my opinion, working as a teacher in a rule-free school could be a very demanding job because controlling and managing students in a class could be very difficult since they have no rules to obey and there are no regulations, so it's really difficult.

'A students' is incorrect; 'students' is plural without 'a'. 'Rule free' should be hyphenated 'rule-free'. 'There there there is not any regulation' is incorrect; correct is 'there are no regulations'. Also, sentence structure improved for clarity.