Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer provides relevant rules but lacks natural phrasing and some grammar accuracy. Try to use clearer sentence structures and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

예시: When I was in high school, there were several rules. For example, girls were not allowed to wear bands that covered their eyes. Additionally, all students had to wear uniforms instead of their own clothes. Moreover, bringing dangerous items to school was strictly prohibited.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas and improve sentence structure for clarity.

예시: I think it really depends on the situation. If the rules are meant to protect students' safety, such as prohibiting dangerous items, then they are beneficial. However, rules that limit students' personality development, like mandatory uniforms, may not be helpful.

제안: Your answer shows good content but has grammar mistakes and some unclear sentences. Use correct verb forms and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: Yes, I had many dedicated teachers in high school. For instance, my biology teacher was very kind. He not only taught us biology but also cared about our emotional well-being. Whenever we felt unhappy, we could share our feelings with him, and he would support us. This made us feel comfortable at school.

제안: Your answer expresses your opinion but is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to use simpler sentences and explain your reasons clearly with linking words.

예시: I prefer to have fewer rules at school. For example, I found wearing a uniform uncomfortable, especially when I had to wear a skirt in cold and rainy weather. This made me feel annoyed sometimes.

제안: Your answer has several grammar mistakes and unclear pronoun references. Use correct verb tenses and pronouns, and organize your ideas logically with linking words.

예시: Yes, I had a very strict teacher in high school. He always made sure we wore the proper uniform and shoes. If we didn't, he would ask us to change immediately, even if it was cold or rainy. This made me feel quite unhappy.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Use clearer sentence structures and linking words to express your opinion logically.

예시: I don't think I would like to work in a rule-free school because it would be difficult to control students' behavior. Therefore, I prefer having some rules, as they help guide students' development and conduct.

× First, girls cannot have their band, which will cover their eyes.

✓ First, girls cannot have their bangs, which will cover their eyes.

The word 'band' is incorrect here; it should be 'bangs' to refer to hair covering the forehead. This is a vocabulary issue rather than a grammar problem, but correcting it clarifies the meaning.

× Second, for all students, they have to wear uniform to go to school instead of their own clothes.

✓ Second, all students have to wear a uniform to go to school instead of their own clothes.

The pronoun 'they' is unnecessary and awkward here. Also, 'wear uniform' should be 'wear a uniform' because 'uniform' is a countable noun. Removing 'they' and adding the article improves sentence clarity and correctness.

× Third, they cannot bring any dangerous stuff.

✓ Third, they cannot bring any dangerous items.

The word 'stuff' is informal and uncountable; 'items' is more appropriate in formal speech. Also, 'dangerous stuff' is vague; 'dangerous items' is clearer. This improves formality and clarity.

× If the rule is to protect students safety, for example to prohibit what student bring to the school, that is good for the student safety.

✓ If the rule is to protect students' safety, for example, to prohibit what students bring to the school, that is good for students' safety.

The modal verb 'prohibit' is used correctly, but 'student' should be plural 'students' to match the context. Also, possessive form 'students'' is needed for 'students' safety'. This corrects number agreement and possessive form.

× But the rule is about to limit students personality development.

✓ But the rule is about limiting students' personality development.

The phrase 'about to limit' is incorrect; it should be 'about limiting' to express purpose. Also, 'students' should be possessive 'students'' to show ownership of personality development.

× Let's say the student have to wear a uniform then it's not good.

✓ Let's say the students have to wear a uniform then it's not good.

The subject 'student' should be plural 'students' to agree with the verb 'have'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× Yes, I have had so many dedicated teacher in my high school.

✓ Yes, I have had so many dedicated teachers in my high school.

The noun 'teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to agree with 'so many'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× I remember there's a biological teacher.

✓ I remember there was a biology teacher.

The phrase 'there's' (there is) is singular present tense, but the context is past tense, so 'there was' is correct. Also, 'biological teacher' is incorrect; 'biology teacher' is the correct term.

× He not only teach us about the biological knowledge but also he would take care of us about our emotional development.

✓ He not only teaches us about biological knowledge but also takes care of our emotional development.

The verb 'teach' should be 'teaches' to agree with third person singular subject 'He'. Also, 'would take care of us about' is awkward; 'takes care of our' is better. This corrects subject-verb agreement and improves phrasing.

× If we have anything unhappy, we can share with him and he will.

✓ If we are unhappy about anything, we can share with him and he will listen.

The phrase 'have anything unhappy' is incorrect; 'are unhappy about anything' is correct. Also, 'he will' is incomplete; adding 'listen' clarifies the meaning.

× They made us feel comfortable.

✓ He made us feel comfortable.

The subject refers to a single teacher 'He', so 'They' is incorrect. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× I was always feeling so annoying about the uniform that I have to wear to school whenever there's a really moment because it really made me so uncomfortable.

✓ I was always feeling so annoyed about the uniform that I had to wear to school whenever there was a special moment because it really made me so uncomfortable.

'Annoying' is an adjective describing something that causes annoyance; 'annoyed' describes the feeling. Also, 'have to' should be past tense 'had to' to match past context. 'There's a really moment' is incorrect; 'there was a special moment' is clearer.

× Wear the skirt when it's cold and rainy.

✓ I had to wear the skirt when it was cold and rainy.

The sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'I had to' completes the sentence and matches past tense context.

× Yes, I have had a school teacher who is very strict with when I was in high school so he would make sure us where the proper uniform and also where the proper shoes.

✓ Yes, I had a school teacher who was very strict when I was in high school, so he would make sure we wore the proper uniform and also wore the proper shoes.

'Strict with' is incorrect; 'strict' alone suffices. 'Make sure us where' is incorrect; it should be 'make sure we wore'. Also, verb tense should be past to match context.

× If we don't then she will ask us to change immediately even when it's rainy or when it's cold which made me feel so unenjoyed.

✓ If we didn't, then he would ask us to change immediately even when it was rainy or cold, which made me feel very uncomfortable.

Pronouns 'she' and 'he' are inconsistent; the teacher was previously 'he'. 'Don't' should be past tense 'didn't'. 'Unenjoyed' is not a correct word; 'uncomfortable' is appropriate.

× I don't think I would because in a rule free school there's a lot you need to do so you can't control the students behavior.

✓ I don't think I would because in a rule-free school there's a lot you need to do, so you can't control the students' behavior.

'Rule free' should be hyphenated 'rule-free'. 'Students behavior' needs possessive form 'students' behavior'. The modal verb usage is correct here.

× So it's more a more an A straight way to have a rule free school.

✓ So it's more of a straight path to have a rule-free school.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. Rephrasing to 'more of a straight path' clarifies meaning. 'Rule free' should be hyphenated.

× I prefer to have some rules. That is certain rules can control the students development or behavior.

✓ I prefer to have some rules. That is, certain rules can control students' development or behavior.

'That is certain rules' is unclear; adding a comma clarifies the sentence. 'Students development' needs possessive form 'students' development'.