Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details. Avoid redundancy and use correct sentence structure.

예시: Yes, there are many rules for students at Rim High School. These rules help maintain discipline and ensure students attend regularly.

제안: Your answer has many hesitations and filler words. Try to speak more fluently and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, be more concise and clear.

예시: Yes, I believe students would benefit from more rules because strict rules help maintain discipline and respect for teachers, which creates a positive learning environment.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and correct grammar. Provide a clear topic sentence and specific supporting details. Avoid unnecessary pauses and filler words.

예시: Yes, I had a dedicated teacher in school who encouraged us to follow lessons carefully and complete regular work. Because of this, I was able to maintain good scores and ranks.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Use correct grammar and avoid repeating words. Provide a clear reason with linking words to support your opinion.

예시: I prefer more rules at school because when students follow more rules, they become more regular and punctual.

제안: Your answer is confusing and incomplete. Provide a clear topic sentence and specific examples. Avoid filler words and ensure your sentences are complete.

예시: Yes, I had a strict tuition teacher when I was in a certain grade. For example, they always gave us lessons and homework that we had to complete on time.

제안: Your answer is unclear and off-topic. Directly answer the question and provide clear reasons. Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure.

예시: No, I would not like to work as a teacher in a school without rules because I believe rules are important for discipline. Also, I do not want to become a teacher as I prefer another profession.

× Is there so many rules for the students at the Rim High School and the schools are important to make a discipline and also to make a student regular?

✓ Are there so many rules for the students at Rim High School? Rules are important to maintain discipline and also to make students regular.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'Is there' with the plural noun 'rules'. The correct form is 'Are there' for plural subjects. Also, 'make a discipline' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'maintain discipline'. 'Make a student regular' should be 'make students regular' to refer to students generally.

× Yes, I think uh, wish, uh, shouldn't, uh, would benefit more from the, uh, more rules because, uh, when uh, students follow the strict rules, then uh, they maintain their discipline and also respect their teachers and the, their belief, whatever the teacher says.

✓ Yes, I think students would benefit more from more rules because when students follow strict rules, they maintain their discipline and also respect their teachers and their beliefs, whatever the teacher says.

The original sentence has unnecessary modal verbs and fillers like 'wish' and 'shouldn't' which confuse the meaning. The correct modal verb here is 'would' to express hypothetical benefit. Also, 'the strict rules' should be 'strict rules' without 'the' for general rules.

× Yes, I had a really dedicated teacher when I am in my, uh, school, uh, because uh, my uh school teacher believes to follow the, uh, whatever they teaches us, uh, and uh, do a regular work.

✓ Yes, I had a really dedicated teacher when I was in my school because my school teacher believed we should follow whatever they taught us and do regular work.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'I am' should be 'I was' to match past tense. 'Believes' should be 'believed' and 'teaches' should be 'taught' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Do a regular work' is incorrect; it should be 'do regular work' without 'a'.

× I prefer to have more rules at a school, uh, because I believe to, uh, where when the more roles, uh, people are, follow, then the, they become, uh, regular and uh, also they, they are, uh, they are they, they are to be punctual.

✓ I prefer to have more rules at school because I believe when more rules are followed, people become regular and punctual.

'More roles' is a mispronunciation of 'more rules'. Also, 'at a school' is better as 'at school' for general reference. The sentence structure is confusing and redundant; simplifying improves clarity.

× Yes, I had a really, uh, strict teacher when I was, uh, indicative standard and I joined my institution classes.

✓ Yes, I had a really strict teacher when I was in a certain standard and I joined my institution classes.

'Indicative standard' is unclear and likely incorrect; it should be 'in a certain standard' or specify the grade. The sentence needs 'in' before 'my school standard' to be grammatically correct.

× My tuition teacher was so strict. And uh, they, uh, for example, like they give uh, the lesson, uh, and uh, for the, uh, homework and which we have.

✓ My tuition teacher was very strict. For example, they gave us lessons and homework which we had to complete.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'They give the lesson and for the homework which we have' is ungrammatical. Correct sentence uses past tense 'gave' and clarifies the meaning.

× No, I really don't like to work as a teacher in rural to school or the with two uh, following this because, uh, I don't like to work as a teacher and I don't like to, uh, with the teacher prefer profession and I want to be paid.

✓ No, I really don't like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school or one without rules because I don't like to work as a teacher and I prefer another profession where I can be paid.

The original sentence is confusing and contains many errors. 'Rural to school' likely means 'rule-free school'. 'With two following this' is unclear and removed. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper modal verb usage.