Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples. Correct grammar (verb agreement, articles) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like “for example” or “such as” to add details.

예시: Yes. My school had several important rules, mainly about discipline and respecting teachers. For example, students had to wear uniforms and arrive on time, and we were not allowed to use phones in class.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then give two specific reasons with linking words (because, for example, also). Keep sentences short and correct word order and grammar. Avoid filler words like “uh” and repetition.

예시: Yes, I think more rules could help. Because rules teach students good habits and respect for teachers; for example, rules about punctuality and classroom behavior encourage responsibility.

제안: Answer directly and give a brief specific example of what made the teacher dedicated. Use past tense consistently and include tangible details (activities, methods, outcomes). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes. My primary school teacher was very dedicated and always prepared extra lessons to help us. For example, she gave after-school study sessions and taught us time management, which helped me improve my grades.

제안: State a clear preference and give two concise reasons using linking words (because, however). Avoid vague phrases and correct grammar. Provide a short example to illustrate your point.

예시: I prefer fewer rules because students need some freedom to be creative and learn from mistakes. However, basic rules about respect and safety should remain, for example rules against bullying and for punctuality.

제안: Give a clear description of what made the teacher strict, using past tense and specific examples. Use linking phrases like “for example” and avoid fillers. Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct word order.

예시: Yes. In my first year of college we had a strict teacher who did not allow late entry. For example, if you were outside when class started you could not come in for that lecture, which made attendance very strict.

제안: Answer the question clearly (yes/no) and provide one or two reasons with examples. Avoid unclear phrases and filler words. Use correct sentence structure and vocabulary to explain consequences of a rule-free environment.

예시: No, I would not. I think a rule-free school would be chaotic and make teaching difficult; for example, without rules students might miss classes or disrupt lessons, so learning would suffer.

× At my school there were many rules for the student.

✓ At my school there were many rules for the students.

The noun 'student' should be plural 'students' to match 'many rules' and refer to multiple pupils. Use plural nouns when speaking about a group in general.

× The main rules is the discipline and respect the teachers.

✓ The main rules are discipline and respecting the teachers.

'Rules' is plural so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also 'respect the teachers' should be a gerund phrase 'respecting the teachers' to function as a noun parallel with 'discipline'.

× One of the teacher is the more dedicated in the teaching to student how to make a discipline, how to take a responsibility and how to become a goal, What is the achieve in the future, what is more?

✓ One of the teachers was the most dedicated in teaching students how to develop discipline, take responsibility, and set goals for what they want to achieve in the future.

Use 'teachers' (plural) after 'one of the'. Verb tense should be past 'was' to match 'I had'. Use 'most dedicated' for superlative. Replace 'teaching to student' with 'teaching students' and use infinitives or nouns properly: 'develop discipline', 'take responsibility', 'set goals', and 'achieve' to make clear, grammatical phrases.

× they are playing lists to students will benefit from the more rules because of the the rules teach student to how to become a good student, how to respect to the teachers and the older than older than them those and also they are the uh lots of things.

✓ I think students will benefit from more rules because the rules teach students how to be good, how to respect teachers and older people, and many other things.

Pronouns and subjects were confused. Replace 'they are playing lists to students' with a clear clause 'I think students will benefit'. Use 'students' plural and remove unnecessary words. Use 'how to be good' instead of 'how to become a good student' for concision, and 'respect teachers and older people' for clarity.

× Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?

✓ Do you think students would benefit from having more rules?

Add 'having' to make the sentence natural; article use here is acceptable but adding a verb makes the meaning clearer. No definite article change needed.

× I prefer to fewer rules.

✓ I prefer fewer rules.

Do not use 'to' before 'fewer'. Use 'fewer rules' directly after 'prefer'.

× So, uh, so student in the mod rules, so they are break the rules, but in the few rules are there.

✓ With moderate rules, students sometimes break them, but with very few rules there is more freedom.

Original sentence has word order and structure problems. Rephrase to present the contrast: 'With moderate rules' and 'but with very few rules'. Use 'students sometimes break them' (correct verb form) and 'there is more freedom' for clarity.

× So the student error follow this rule and also some uh, liberty is also there.

✓ So students can follow these rules, and there is also some freedom.

'Student error follow' is ungrammatical; change to 'students can follow'. Use plural 'students' and plural demonstrative 'these rules'. 'Liberty' is better expressed as 'freedom'.

× Yeah, I had a really strict teacher at my College in the first year as the one of the teacher is the most, uh, if, uh, for example, if the uh, teachers have come in the classroom and uh, we are, we were out of the class.

✓ Yes, I had a really strict teacher at my college in my first year. For example, if the teacher arrived and we were outside the classroom,

Maintain past tense: 'had' and 'arrived' (or 'came'). Use 'college' lowercase. 'One of the teacher is the most' is incorrect — use 'one of the teachers' and past tense 'was'. Simplify the example to a correct past-tense conditional.

× after the teacher, we cannot enter the room, enter the classroom and also, uh, in the fully one hour lecture. Fully concerned.

✓ after the teacher arrived, we could not enter the classroom, even for the full one-hour lecture.

Use 'after the teacher arrived' and past ability 'could not'. Replace 'enter the room' with 'enter the classroom' and 'fully one hour lecture' with 'the full one-hour lecture'. Combine fragments into a complete sentence.

× Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?

✓ Would you like to work as a teacher in a school with no rules?

Question phrasing is okay, but 'rule-free school' is awkward. Use 'a school with no rules' for naturalness. Modal 'would you like' is correct.

× Uh, first of all, the dual preschool eastern not, uh, not there, but is the if work as a teacher in a rural preschool, no, no benefit for student.

✓ First of all, if I worked as a teacher in a rural preschool, it would not benefit the students.

Rewrite to a conditional form: 'if I worked' (second conditional for hypothetical present) and 'it would not benefit the students'. Original had unclear words and incorrect word order.

× And also teacher is not, uh, satisfied at that work environment because student are all freedom.

✓ Also, the teacher would not be satisfied in that work environment because the students would have complete freedom.

Use 'the teacher' with article, adjust tense to conditional 'would not be satisfied' to match hypothetical, plural 'students' and 'have complete freedom' for clarity.