Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and filler words, use a clear topic sentence, and keep supporting details specific and coherent. Avoid repetition and ensure grammar agreement (e.g., 'each school has its own rules'). Limit to 3–4 short sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'as a result'.

예시: Yes, my school had several important rules. For example, students were expected to be punctual and keep their classrooms tidy. If pupils failed to complete homework, teachers sometimes scolded them, which could lead to arguments among students.

제안: Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give two concise reasons linked with connectors like 'because' and 'therefore'. Avoid long hesitations and unnatural words ('jaded' is okay but explain). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I don't think more rules are better. If there are too many rules, students become overwhelmed and cannot remember them, which reduces their effectiveness. Therefore, schools should have a few clear rules to promote responsibility.

제안: Use correct articles and plural/singular agreement ('some teachers', 'my maths teacher was'). Provide one specific example and link actions to outcomes using connectors like 'for example' and 'as a result'. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher. For example, my maths teacher stayed after class to help struggling students prepare for exams, and as a result many classmates improved their grades because she was patient and supportive.

제안: Answer directly then support with two clear reasons. Correct grammar ('well explained' needs 'and') and avoid awkward phrasing ('it's a make it easier'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' and keep sentences concise.

예시: I prefer fewer rules that are clear and simple because they help students learn responsibility and discipline. Also, simple rules are easier for teachers to explain and enforce consistently.

제안: Avoid run-on sentences and improve grammar ('enforce the students', 'homework' singular). Give one or two specific examples of strict behaviour and explain the effect using linking words like 'so' or 'as a result'. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, we had some strict teachers who enforced heavy homework loads and punished students for minor mistakes. As a result, many classmates felt stressed and anxious during those lessons.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion sentence and avoid vague or informal phrases ('cause crazy'). Provide one reason and one suggestion, using linking words like 'because' and 'therefore'. Correct collocations ('rule-free school', 'tolerate them' -> 'manage them'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I would not want to teach in a rule-free school because managing chaotic behaviour without clear expectations would be very difficult. Therefore, I think schools should have a few fair and well-explained rules to maintain order and support learning.

× Each school has their own rules.

✓ Each school has its own rules.

The subject 'Each school' is singular, so the possessive pronoun must be singular 'its' rather than plural 'their'. Use 'its' for singular institutions to maintain agreement.

× If they don't, uh, do them, uh, their teacher, uh, sometimes yell at them and also they have lots of argument with each other.

✓ If they don't do it, their teacher sometimes yells at them and they have many arguments with each other.

Pronoun reference and number: 'homework' is uncountable or singular so refer to it as 'it' not 'them'. Subject-verb agreement: 'teacher' is singular so verb should be 'yells'. 'Arguments' is plural and use 'many' rather than 'lots of' before a countable noun for clarity.

× If they don't do them, their teacher, sometimes yell at them and also they have lots of argument with each other.

✓ If they don't do it, their teacher sometimes yells at them and they have many arguments with each other.

The singular subject 'teacher' requires 'yells' (third-person singular). Also adjust 'do them' to 'do it' to match 'homework' and pluralize 'argument' to 'arguments' with appropriate quantifier.

× For instance, my mass teacher were devoted most of the time after lessons to help struggling student prepare for exams and she was really patient and also affectionate.

✓ For instance, my maths teacher was available most of the time after lessons to help struggling students prepare for exams, and she was really patient and affectionate.

Subject-verb agreement: 'teacher' is singular so use 'was' not 'were'. Word choice: 'mass' should be 'maths' (or 'math' in US English). 'Devoted' is misused—'available' or 'devoted her time' is clearer. 'Student' should be plural 'students' to match 'struggling' and context.

× Yes, during school time I had some teacher, they were really dedicated.

✓ Yes, during school I had some teachers; they were really dedicated.

Plural consistency: 'some teacher' should be 'some teachers' to match the plural pronoun 'they'. Also 'during school time' is more natural as 'during school'.

× Actually, I believe that there should be a small number of rules.

✓ Actually, I believe that there should be a small number of rules.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No article change needed. (Kept as is because it fits the Grammar Problem Type List conditions.)

× There should be clear, simple, well explained because it can help a student to learn responsibility and discipline and also it's a make it easier for teacher to enforce them consistently.

✓ There should be clear, simple, well-explained rules because they help students learn responsibility and discipline, and they also make it easier for teachers to enforce them consistently.

Missing noun after adjectives: list of adjectives should modify 'rules'. Use hyphenated 'well-explained' as a compound adjective. Pronoun and number agreement: 'it can help a student' changed to plural 'they help students' for general statement. Remove extra 'a' before 'make' and pluralize 'teacher' to 'teachers'.

× Yes, during a school time we had a few teachers, they were really strict and they pushed and enforce the student to do lots of homeworks and also they were really unfair and some sometimes they punished a student.

✓ Yes, during school we had a few teachers; they were really strict and they pushed and enforced the students to do lots of homework, and sometimes they punished students.

Verb tense and form: 'enforce' should be past 'enforced' to match past narrative. 'Student' should be plural 'students'. 'Homeworks' is incorrect—'homework' is uncountable. Remove redundant words ('some sometimes').

× So most of my classmates had lots of stress when we had this class and lessons.

✓ So most of my classmates were very stressed when we had that class and those lessons.

Use adjective 'stressed' rather than noun phrase 'had lots of stress' for natural expression. 'This' to 'that' and 'those' may be used depending on context, but 'we had that class and those lessons' matches past reference and pluralization.

× To be honest, it's really difficult to work in a rule free school nowadays. Most children are really stubborn and we cannot tolerate them, they may cause crazy.

✓ To be honest, it's really difficult to work in a rule-free school nowadays. Most children can be very stubborn and difficult to manage; they may cause chaos.

Hyphenate 'rule-free' as a compound adjective. 'Cannot tolerate them' is harsh—'difficult to manage' is more natural. 'Cause crazy' is incorrect collocation; use 'cause chaos' or 'cause problems'. Modal 'may' kept but used with correct noun 'chaos'.

× So I believe that there should be a small and well explained and clear and fair rule in a school to work there.

✓ So I believe that there should be a small number of well-explained, clear, and fair rules in a school to work there.

Consistency and plurality: use 'a small number of ... rules' not 'a small ... rule'. Use commas to separate adjectives and hyphenate 'well-explained'. Maintain plural 'rules' to agree with context of multiple rules.