Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and use concise, natural phrasing. Replace vague phrases like "making discipline at class proper" and "and so on" with specific rules. Use 2–3 supporting details and linking words. Pronoun/grammar errors should be corrected (e.g., "well behaved" → "being well-behaved").

예시: Yes. My school has several rules: students must wear a uniform, arrive on time, and complete homework by the deadline. For example, teachers check homework every morning, and late work receives a warning.

제안: Give a clear opinion sentence, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Avoid repetition and correct grammar ("complete their tasks before the deadline"). Make sentences shorter and coherent.

예시: Yes, I think more reasonable rules could help students. Because rules teach time management, students learn to submit tasks before the deadline, and rules encourage respectful behaviour — for example, rules about classroom manners reduce interruptions.

제안: Answer directly with one clear sentence saying yes/no and why. Use past tense consistently when describing past experiences. Remove repetition and give one or two specific examples of how the teacher helped you. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a very dedicated maths teacher who always explained difficult problems step by step. When I was stuck, she gave extra examples and stayed after class to help me, which made me feel more confident in exams.

제안: Give a direct preference (more or fewer) in the first sentence. Then give two clear reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "however"). Avoid unclear phrasing like "fear rules" and correct grammar. Keep answers concise and coherent.

예시: I prefer fewer rules at school because too many rules can create stress and reduce students' motivation. However, basic rules like punctuality and respect are important to maintain order.

제안: Start with a simple yes/no and follow with one or two concrete examples of strict behaviour. Avoid vague or repetitive explanations and correct grammar (e.g., "he was strict and sometimes punished the class for minor mistakes"). Explain briefly why you felt they were strict.

예시: Yes, my science teacher was very strict. He often punished the whole class for small mistakes, such as talking during experiments, and expected us to finish a lot of homework, which made the lessons stressful.

제안: State your position clearly (yes/no) and give 2–3 specific reasons. Clarify whether you mean a "rule-free" or "less strict" school, and correct confusing phrases. Use linking words and finish with a concise concluding sentence.

예시: No, I would not like to work in a completely rule-free school. I prefer a school with reasonable rules because things like discipline, clear routines, and dress code help children feel safe and focused in class.

× Yes, there are many rules for students in my school, such as making discipline at class proper, uniform, well behaved, completing homework on time and so on.

✓ Yes, there are many rules for students in my school, such as maintaining discipline in class, wearing the proper uniform, behaving well, completing homework on time, and so on.

The sentence uses incorrect adjective/adverb forms and word choices: 'making discipline at class proper' should be 'maintaining discipline in class'; 'uniform' needs 'proper' as an adjective before it and 'well behaved' should be 'behaving well'. Also prepositions need correction ('in class'). Suggestion: use common collocations (maintain discipline, behave well, wear a uniform).

× From my perspective, so students would benefit more from more rules full stop.

✓ From my perspective, students would benefit from having more rules.

The sentence has redundant words and incorrect structure ('so' and 'full stop' spoken). Remove filler words and use a clear statement. Use 'benefit from having' for natural phrasing.

× For students can learn about the discipline like how to complete their task, how to meet, how to complete their task task before deadline as well as they can learn how to respect others because there is a give respect and take respect.

✓ Students can learn discipline, such as how to complete their tasks, how to meet deadlines, and how to respect others because respect is mutual.

Pronoun and noun number errors: 'their task' should be 'their tasks'; repetition 'complete their task task' removed. 'how to meet' is vague and should be 'how to meet deadlines' or 'how to meet expectations'. The phrase 'there is a give respect and take respect' is ungrammatical; replace with 'respect is mutual'. Suggest using plural nouns with 'their' and clearer expressions.

× I still remember my teacher. I'm very dedicated teacher.

✓ I still remember my teacher. She was a very dedicated teacher.

Tense and article errors: 'I'm very dedicated teacher' mixes present tense and missing article; context refers to past so use past tense 'was' and include 'a'. Suggest match tense to context and include articles before singular countable nouns.

× Whenever I was stuck at any question, she always helped me in in a unique way.

✓ Whenever I was stuck on a question, she always helped me in a unique way.

Preposition error: use 'stuck on a question' not 'stuck at any question'. Also remove duplicated 'in'. Use 'a question' rather than 'any question' for natural speech.

× And I also got a tuition from my maths teacher because she's my she was my favorite teacher.

✓ I also received tuition from my math teacher because she was my favorite teacher.

Article and tense/pronoun errors: 'got a tuition' is unnatural; use 'received tuition' or 'had tutoring'. 'she's my she was my' mixes tenses and duplicates pronoun; use past 'she was my favorite teacher'. Also 'maths' -> 'math' (varies by dialect; keep consistent).

× I feel very confident. I felt very confident.

✓ I felt very confident.

Tense inconsistency: speaker describes a past memory so use past tense consistently. Keep a single sentence to avoid repetition.

× From my perspective, I usually prefer fewer roles at work if schools have a more rules.

✓ From my perspective, I usually prefer fewer rules at school if schools have many rules.

Quantifier and word choice errors: 'roles' should be 'rules'; 'a more rules' incorrect—use 'many rules' or 'more rules'. Also 'at work' is irrelevant; replace 'at school'. Ensure nouns and quantifiers agree.

× So students should umm would not get happy to do studies as well as they have a bad impact on their minds because fear rules are have have to understand and have to have to make a discipline.

✓ Students would not enjoy studying if there are too many rules because strict rules can have a negative effect on their minds and create fear rather than discipline.

This sentence is disfluent with filler words and incorrect structure. 'should umm would not get happy to do studies' should be 'would not enjoy studying'. Remove repeated words and clarify meaning: strict rules 'create fear rather than discipline'. Use concise, grammatical clauses.

× Yes, I still remember my science teacher was very strict every time he gave a punishment to our class, because every time he was very aggressive because of their workload as well as because of their primary problems.

✓ Yes, I still remember my science teacher; he was very strict and often punished our class, sometimes acting aggressively because of his heavy workload and personal problems.

Tense and pronoun agreement: combine sentences with semicolon or conjunction. 'every time he gave a punishment' -> 'he often punished our class'. 'because of their workload' should be 'his heavy workload' and 'primary problems' likely means 'personal problems'. Clarify pronouns and use past tense.

× Even without any fault. They also punished us just because of minor things such as regarding.

✓ Even when we had done nothing wrong, he still punished us for minor things.

Fragment 'Even without any fault.' should be attached to main clause. 'They also punished us' pronoun wrong (teacher not they). 'such as regarding' is incomplete; replace with 'for minor things'. Ensure complete sentences and correct pronouns.

× Definitely, I really like to work in a rural preschool, because I do not like to, because I do not like too much tools.

✓ Definitely. I would like to work in a rural preschool because I do not like too many rules.

Sentence is unclear and contains repetition. 'too much tools' is incorrect: use 'too many rules' (tools->rules?) Clarify intended meaning: likely 'rules' not 'tools'. Use conditional/modal 'would like' for preference.

× I like this fear rules. From my perspective, they are mean.

✓ I do not like strict rules because they feel harsh.

Phrase 'fear rules' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'strict rules' that cause fear. 'they are mean' is informal; 'they feel harsh' is clearer. Use appropriate adjectives.

× There are examples which are very important, such as discipline and proper uniform, giving, respect, well behaved and.

✓ There are important examples such as discipline, wearing the proper uniform, showing respect, and behaving well.

List items need parallel structure and correct forms: 'giving, respect, well behaved' is ungrammatical. Use gerunds or nouns consistently: wearing, showing, behaving. Ensure list ends properly.