Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장은 전반적으로 이해되지만 말더듬(uh)과 어색한 표현(‘attendancy’, ‘which is directly connected’)이 있어 자연스러움이 떨어집니다. 핵심을 먼저 말한 뒤 구체적 세부사항을 간결하게 연결하는 연습을 하세요. 예: 주제문 → 규칙 요약 → 세부사항(조건과 결과). 연결어(so, therefore, for example)를 사용해 문장 흐름을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

예시: Yes. There are a few important rules at my university. The most well-known one concerns attendance: if a student misses a class more than three times, they automatically receive an F. For example, this policy aims to encourage regular participation and ensure fairness among students.

제안: 의미는 전달되지만 문장이 장황하고 일부 어법(‘must be needed’, ‘it will differ per rule’)이 부자연스럽습니다. 간결한 주제문을 쓰고 이유와 예시를 논리적으로 이어주세요. 연결어(for example, because, if)와 자연스러운 표현을 사용하도록 연습하세요.

예시: It depends on the type of rule. If new rules protect students’ well-being or academic integrity, they could be beneficial. For example, clear guidelines on AI use in assignments would help prevent plagiarism and set fair standards for everyone.

제안: 감정은 잘 전달되지만 문법 오류(주어-동사 일치: ‘who have’ → ‘who has’), 불필요한 수식(‘kind of disrespectful’)과 말더듬(uh)이 있습니다. 먼저 명확한 주제문으로 답하고, 그 교사가 어떻게 영향을 주었는지 구체적 예(행동, 수업방식)를 덧붙이세요.

예시: Yes. I’ve had several dedicated teachers, but my middle school English teacher had the biggest influence on me. She spent extra time helping students with pronunciation and encouraged us to read widely, which greatly improved my confidence and speaking skills.

제안: 의견은 분명하지만 반복과 비문(‘that will are necessary’)이 있어 명확성이 떨어집니다. 주제문으로 입장 밝히고, 이유를 1–2개로 압축하여 연결어(because, therefore)와 구체적 예를 사용하세요. 불필요한 말버릇(uh)도 줄이세요.

예시: I prefer having more rules, especially regarding academic conduct. Because digital media and AI are increasingly used, clear policies are needed to prevent cheating and protect intellectual property. For instance, rules on proper citation and limits on AI assistance would help maintain fairness.

제안: 내용은 전달되지만 문법과 어순 문제(‘it was there was’, ‘which focused’, ‘wear respectfully’)와 단어 선택 오류가 있어 이해가 어렵습니다. 간결한 문장으로 재구성하고 구체적 행동 예시(규칙, 이유)를 명확히 쓰세요. 옳은 단어(collared dress → dress respectfully)를 사용하도록 확인하세요.

예시: Yes. Last semester I had a very strict law teacher who focused on copyright. She required us to dress professionally and wear name tags at every class. She also enforced punctuality and strict deadlines to emphasize responsibility.

제안: 답변이 중복되고 문장이 비문(‘I would say I would have to work in an environment that has regulations, without regulations and rules to control our actions’)입니다. 간단한 주제문으로 입장 명확히 밝히고 이유를 1–2개 제시하세요. 문장 연결 시 불필요한 반복을 피하고 논리적 흐름을 유지하도록 연습하세요.

예시: I would prefer to teach in a school with clear rules. Regulations help maintain discipline and protect both teachers and students, especially in higher education where academic standards must be upheld.

× I think the most, uh, well known rule is about the attendancy and which uh, is directly connected to your grades.

✓ I think the most well-known rule is about attendance, which is directly connected to your grades.

'There be issue' applies because 'attendancy' is incorrect noun form; correct noun is 'attendance'. Also remove unnecessary 'which uh, is' and use a relative clause 'which is' attached to 'attendance'. Use hyphen in 'well-known'. Overall sentence structure corrected for clarity.

× In our policy, it states that if you do not attend a particular class for more than three times, you will immediately get an F.

✓ Our policy states that if you do not attend a particular class more than three times, you will immediately receive an F.

Use 'Our policy states' instead of 'In our policy, it states' to avoid dummy 'it'. 'More than three times' is correct placement without 'for'. 'Receive' is more formal than 'get'. This fixes sentence structure and word choice issues.

× I think it will differ per rule.

✓ I think it will depend on the rule.

'Differ per rule' is non-idiomatic. Use 'depend on the rule' or 'vary by rule'. This corrects English usage and fits future/modal context 'will'.

× then I believe that new regulations must be needed.

✓ then I believe that new regulations are needed.

'Must be needed' is redundant. Use 'are needed' or 'must be introduced'. Corrects modal verb misuse and redundancy.

× For instance maybe rules about the use of AI.

✓ For instance, maybe rules about the use of AI are necessary.

Original is a sentence fragment. Add a verb and clarify meaning: 'are necessary' completes the sentence and adds proper punctuation.

× But if I were to pick one teacher who have really influenced in my life would be my first uh English teacher in my years of middle school.

✓ But if I were to pick one, the teacher who has really influenced my life would be my first English teacher in middle school.

Subject-verb agreement: 'teacher' is singular so use 'has' not 'have'. Also 'influenced in my life' is incorrect; use 'influenced my life'. Rearranged for clarity and removed filler 'uh'.

× She inspired me a lot.

✓ She inspired me a lot.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. 'Inspired' correctly matches past tense context.

× These days, I believe that we need some more rules, uh, toward the student body.

✓ These days, I believe that we need more rules for the student body.

Use 'for' not 'toward' when indicating purpose/audience. Remove filler 'uh' and 'some' is unnecessary. Adjusts preposition and adverb usage.

× As I mentioned earlier, I believe that the use of AI and digital media is getting frequently, uh, more overused in the field of academics.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I believe that the use of AI and digital media is becoming increasingly overused in academia.

'Getting frequently more overused' is awkward and incorrect. Use 'becoming increasingly overused'. 'Field of academics' is better as 'academia'. Removes filler.

× And without new rules to prevent piracy or cheating, I think those will are necessary.

✓ Without new rules to prevent piracy or cheating, I think those rules are necessary.

Original has word order and redundant modal 'will are'. Replace with 'rules are necessary' to form a correct clause.

× Last semester it was there was a teacher who was teaching law and which focused on copyright and she was one of the strictest teachers I have ever met.

✓ Last semester there was a teacher who taught law and focused on copyright; she was one of the strictest teachers I have ever met.

Remove redundant 'it was' and use 'taught' for concise past tense. Use 'who taught' not 'who was teaching' plus 'which' is wrong for people; use 'who' or rephrase. Fixes sentence structure and relative clause errors.

× She always asked us to wear respectfully and also have a name tag with us every time we meet.

✓ She always asked us to dress respectfully and to wear a name tag every time we met.

'Wear respectfully' is incorrect collocation; use 'dress respectfully'. 'Have a name tag with us' is awkward; use 'wear a name tag'. Match past tense 'asked' with 'met'.

× That depends on who I'm teaching.

✓ That depends on whom I'm teaching.

'Who' should be 'whom' as the object of the verb 'teaching'. For conversational speech 'who' is common, but formally use 'whom'.

× But if I were to say I could teach a college to university students and I would say I would have to work in an environment that has regulations, without regulations and rules to control our actions.

✓ But if I were to teach college or university students, I would need to work in an environment that has regulations to control our actions.

Original is repetitive and ungrammatical: 'teach a college to university students' is wrong; use 'teach college or university students'. Remove redundant phrases 'would say' and 'without regulations and rules'. Clarify and simplify sentence.