Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use 'rules' not 'role'), avoid repetition, and add one brief supporting detail. Keep to 1–3 sentences. Use linking words if adding details.

예시: At my university there are few formal rules compared with primary or secondary schools. This is because university students are expected to be more independent, so regulations are mainly about attendance and campus safety.

제안: Give a complete, grammatically correct answer. Start with a clear position, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'on the other hand'). Avoid unfinished sentences and repeated words.

예시: It depends on the student: stricter rules can help disruptive pupils behave better and focus on learning. However, for shy or mature students, too many rules might hinder creativity and independence.

제안: Improve verb tenses and sentence flow: give a clear topic sentence, then one specific example with tidy past-tense verbs and a concise result. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'as a result'.

예시: Yes, I had several dedicated teachers. For example, my middle-school biology teacher always explained every question in detail, and as a result I became much more interested in biology.

제안: State your preference clearly, correct vocabulary and grammar ('rules' not 'raw/roles'), and give one specific reason using a linking word like 'because'. Keep sentences short and uncluttered.

예시: I prefer fewer rules because too many restrictions would limit my creativity and prevent me from expressing myself freely.

제안: Use consistent past tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement, give one specific example with relevant details, and finish with a short consequence or feeling.

예시: Yes, I had a strict teacher in middle school called Ms Liu. She rarely allowed students to work independently and often gave extra homework after class, which made me feel pressured but more disciplined.

제안: Give a direct answer and clear reasoning. Correct grammar (use conditional forms correctly) and avoid repeating phrases. If you mean you'd like to try teaching temporarily, say so with a brief explanation.

예시: I wouldn't want to work permanently as a teacher in a rule-free school because I'm not interested in a teaching career. However, I would be open to trying a short teaching placement to gain experience and see what it's like.

× I'm currently at the university and university there's typically not that much of role compared to elementary school or middle school or even high school.

✓ I'm currently at university, and there typically aren't as many rules as in elementary, middle, or high school.

The original sentence has word order and article issues and incorrect noun number. Use 'at university' (no article for general attendance), 'there aren't' for 'there is/are' with plural 'rules', and 'as many rules as in' for correct comparison. Use commas to separate clauses.

× So as of now there's not many rules in our school.

✓ So as of now there aren't many rules at our school.

Use 'there aren't many' (negative with plural noun) not 'there's not many'. Also use 'at our school' rather than 'in' for attendance context.

× I think it depends on the student.

✓ I think it depends on the student.

This sentence is acceptable; no grammatical correction needed. (Included for completeness.)

× If a student it's very naughty and do not comply to the rules, I think some some amount of roles will be pretty suitable for the individual.

✓ If a student is very naughty and does not comply with the rules, I think some amount of rules would be appropriate for that student.

Errors: 'it's' should be 'is' after subject; subject-verb agreement 'do not' should be 'does not' for singular; use 'comply with' not 'comply to'; 'roles' should be 'rules'; duplicate word 'some' removed; 'would be' fits conditional. Also 'that student' clearer than 'the individual'.

× But conversely, if a student are quite very really introvert or.

✓ But conversely, if a student is very introverted or shy, (then fewer rules may be better).

Original lacks completion and has subject-verb agreement 'are' for singular should be 'is'; word order 'quite very really' is redundant—use a single modifier like 'very'. 'Introvert' (noun) should be 'introverted' (adjective). Provide a complete clause; added a parenthetical suggestion to complete thought.

× I had quite a few dedicated teacher that teach me.

✓ I had quite a few dedicated teachers who taught me.

'teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match 'quite a few'; relative clause uses past tense 'taught' because action occurred in the past; use 'who' for people rather than 'that'.

× For example, my biology teacher from my middle school is was very dedicated.

✓ For example, my biology teacher from middle school was very dedicated.

Remove extra 'is'; use simple past 'was' because referring to past time (middle school). Also 'from middle school' is more natural than 'from my middle school'.

× He just gave a lot of explanation towards every question I asked him.

✓ He gave a lot of explanations for every question I asked him.

Use plural 'explanations' for multiple instances; use 'for' rather than 'towards' with 'explanations'; past tense 'gave' is fine. Keep concise.

× So it just inspired me to get more and more interested in.

✓ So it inspired me to become more and more interested in the subject.

Sentence was incomplete; add object 'the subject' to show what the speaker became interested in. 'Inspired me to become more interested' is natural phrasing.

× For a student like me, I don't like that much of raw.

✓ For a student like me, I don't like that many rules.

'that much of raw' is incorrect: 'raw' should be 'rules'; use 'that many rules' (countable plural) rather than 'that much'. Remove redundancy.

× I think too many roles will will limit my imagination and just ultimately limited from limited me from exploring myself and express my feelings.

✓ I think too many rules will limit my imagination and ultimately prevent me from exploring myself and expressing my feelings.

Fix repeated 'will', change 'roles' to 'rules'; use parallel gerunds 'exploring' and 'expressing'; 'prevent me from' is correct phrase instead of 'limited from limited me from'.

× Yeah, I had quite a few strict teachers.

✓ Yes, I had quite a few strict teachers.

Minor style: 'Yeah' to 'Yes' for formality; otherwise sentence is grammatically correct. Included for completeness.

× For example, my teachers back in middle school called Liu Yunxi was very very strict about me.

✓ For example, my teacher back in middle school, Liu Yunxi, was very strict with me.

If referring to a single named teacher use singular 'teacher' not 'teachers'; set name off with commas; use 'strict with me' rather than 'strict about me'; remove duplicate 'very'.

× She do not allow me to do my own thing.

✓ She did not allow me to do my own thing.

When speaking about past events use past tense 'did not allow'. If intending present, use 'does not allow'. 'Do' is incorrect for third-person singular.

× Even after class, she will give me extra assignments to do.

✓ Even after class, she gave me extra assignments to do.

Context describes past experiences, so use simple past 'gave' rather than 'will give'. 'Will' implies future habitual action which mismatches narrative.

× Since I'm not interested in education, I won't want to had a job in a rule free school.

✓ Since I'm not interested in education, I wouldn't want to have a job in a rule-free school.

'Won't want to had' mixes tenses and forms. Use conditional 'wouldn't want' and base form 'have' for the noun 'job'. Hyphenate 'rule-free' as a compound adjective.

× Instead if I had a opportunity, an opportunity I would like to experience of being a teacher instead of actually having a job as a teacher.

✓ Instead, if I had the opportunity, I would like to experience being a teacher rather than actually working as one.

Use 'the opportunity' (not 'a opportunity'); avoid repetition; 'experience being a teacher' is clearer; use 'working as one' to avoid repetition of 'teacher'. Use conditional 'would like' correctly.