Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and add a brief topic sentence that directly answers whether there are rules, then give one or two specific examples with a short reason. Avoid repeating 'rule' and aim for three sentences maximum.

예시: Yes — my school has strict uniform rules. For instance, hair must not cover the eyebrows and skirts must be knee-length to promote modesty and uniformity. Teachers enforce these rules to keep discipline and a professional atmosphere.

제안: Good structure and balance. Improve by linking the two parts more smoothly with a linking phrase and slightly more specific consequence or example for each type of rule.

예시: It depends: stricter rules on punctuality can improve time management and self-discipline, helping students meet deadlines. On the other hand, strict rules about hair color or exact hair length can stifle personal expression and lower morale.

제안: Answer is on the right track but has a grammatical error and an unclear final phrase ('inspired me to help worker'). Fix language, be specific about what you did (e.g., tutor classmates or pursue teaching), and limit to three sentences.

예시: I had one very dedicated teacher in high school — my math teacher. He stayed after class to explain difficult concepts and offered extra practice, which made me admire his dedication and inspired me to tutor my classmates.

제안: Clear opinion and reasons. Improve subject-verb agreement (‘encourage’ -> ‘encourages’) and shorten slightly to avoid redundancy. You could add a brief linking phrase to connect the points.

예시: I prefer fewer rules because allowing choices in clothes and hairstyles helps students express themselves and develop personal style. Also, this small freedom encourages creativity and responsibility, which are valuable skills for modern life.

제안: Correct the verb phrase ('insisted on punctuality') and expand with a short specific example of how the strictness affected you or the class. Keep it to two or three sentences.

예시: Yes — my secondary school teacher was very strict and insisted on punctuality. She also expected homework to be done perfectly, which made the class very disciplined but sometimes stressful.

제안: Good reasoning. Remove filler ('Umm'), correct minor grammar ('would make it harder'), and make sentences slightly more concise. Optionally give a brief positive alternative (e.g., some flexible rules).

예시: No — I wouldn't want to teach in a completely rule-free school because teachers need clear guidelines to keep students safe and focused. Without rules there could be more disruption and inconsistent behaviour, making it harder to plan lessons and ensure effective learning.

× which made me really admire his dedication and inspired me to help worker.

✓ which made me really admire his dedication and inspired me to help workers.

Plural and noun form: 'worker' here is a common noun referring to people in general, so it should be plural 'workers' to match the meaning. The original sentence also mixes verbs but is grammatically acceptable otherwise. Use 'workers' to indicate more than one person or the profession in general.

× who insisted in punctuality and always expected homework to be done perfectly.

✓ who insisted on punctuality and always expected homework to be done perfectly.

Preposition error: the correct collocation is 'insist on' not 'insist in'. Use 'insist on' when emphasizing a demand or requirement. Suggestion: remember common verb + preposition pairs (collocations).

× Without rules, I'll be worried about increased disruption and inconsistent behaviour, which would make it more harder to plan lessons and ensure effective learning.

✓ Without rules, I'd be worried about increased disruption and inconsistent behaviour, which would make it harder to plan lessons and ensure effective learning.

Modal and comparative errors: 'I'll' (I will) is less appropriate in a hypothetical conditional; 'I'd' (I would) matches the conditional 'would make'. Also 'more harder' is incorrect because 'harder' already expresses comparative degree; 'more' is redundant. Use 'would' for hypothetical situations and avoid double comparatives.

× Giving young people more freedom in small choices also encourage creativity and responsibility, which is important in modern society.

✓ Giving young people more freedom in small choices also encourages creativity and responsibility, which are important in modern society.

Subject-verb agreement and noun number: the verb must agree with the singular gerund subject 'Giving young people more freedom', so use 'encourages'. Also 'creativity and responsibility' are two items, so the predicate adjective should be plural 'are important' rather than 'is important'. Alternatively, keep singular by rephrasing the sentence.